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Dec-03-19 | Wording change |
Dear Diary,
I have been dying to tell you what happened today in my life. I woke up every day and I don't feel happy with my life because I think everything about me does not worth. I don't feel happy with my life because I think everything about me ie no worth much. When I was a little child, I was the only person in my house who got burned a fire. Since that day, I lost confidence in myself. The only thing I desire now is to live with other people. I have a sister who is really enjoying her life and I am always observing her. I am someone who is barely recognized or even noticed by the world because I am silent and distant. I am rarely present even when I try to pronounce complete sentences. My life seems to be like darkness and disaster.
I have been dying to tell you what happened today in my life. I woke up every day and I don't feel happy with my life because I think everything about me does not worth. I don't feel happy with my life because I think everything about me ie no worth much. When I was a little child, I was the only person in my house who got burned a fire. Since that day, I lost confidence in myself. The only thing I desire now is to live with other people. I have a sister who is really enjoying her life and I am always observing her. I am someone who is barely recognized or even noticed by the world because I am silent and distant. I am rarely present even when I try to pronounce complete sentences.
Moreover, to be I am a burn victim , and I have a small education.I have a problem to read. My mother describes me in less than flattering terms such as a wounded animal who must live her life forever overpowered to forces bigger than her own will.Although faithful and loving, Mama
She does not fortify me with many powerful qualities. She never encourage me like she used to with Dee. In addition she used to make some judgement about my behavior. My mother only appreciates my sister. My mother sometimes gives the impression that I will fail in my life and becoming an individual; I will fade into a life of farm work, and take care of children.
Even though I have all those weaknesses and I am not like mama thinks want me to be, I am .I am grateful for what life gives to me because I am not like other people want me to be. Nonetheles my mother describes me as she does, but I thank my mother because I underwent a lot of changes in my life . because my Also, I become became more confident after my sister came to visit me and in front of her mama defends my best interests.
Moreover, I am a burn victim and I have a problem to read. My mother describes me in less than flattering terms such as a wounded animal who must live her life forever overpowered to forces bigger than her own will.
She does not fortify me with many powerful qualities .She because she never encourage me like she used uses to do with Dee. In addition she used to make some judgement judge me about my behavior. My mother only appreciates my sister. My mother sometimes Sometimes gives the impression that I will fail in my life and becoming an individual; I will fade into a life of farm work, and take care of children. Despite that my mother attitude was like I liked her and I will always protect her.
She does not fortify me with many powerful qualities because she never encourage me like she uses to do with Dee. In addition she used to judge me about my behavior. My mother only appreciates my sister. Sometimes gives the impression that I will fail in my life and becoming an individual; I will fade into a life of farm work, and take care of children. Despite that my mother attitude was like I liked her and I will always protect her.
Even though I have all those weaknesses and I am not like mama want me to be, I am grateful for what life gives to me because I am not like other people want me to be. Nonetheles my mother describes me as she does, but I thank my mother I underwent a lot of changes in my life because I became more confident after my sister came to visit me and in front of her mama defends my best interests.
Added December 03, 2019 at 2:11pm
by Leticia Zang
(suggested by Paul Allison)
Title: Wording change
The text below is the previous wording for paragraph 3 (click to return there).
Moreover, to be a burn victim, I have a small education. I have a problem to read. My mother describes me in less than flattering terms such as a wounded animal who must live her life forever overpowered to forces bigger than her own will. Although faithful and loving, Mama does not fortify me with many powerful qualities. My mother only appreciates my sister. My mother sometimes gives the impression that I will fail in my life and becoming an individual; I will fade into a life of farm work, and take care of children. Even though I have all those weaknesses and I am not like mama thinks I am. I am still grateful for what life gives to me because I am not like other people want me to be. Nonetheles my mother describes me as she does, but I thank my mother because I underwent a lot of changes in my life. because my Also, I become more confident after my sister came to visit me and in front of her mama defends my best interests.
Added December 03, 2019 at 2:59pm
by Leticia Zang
Title: Wording change
The text below is the previous wording for paragraph 4 (click to return there).
She does not fortify me with many powerful qualities. She never encourage me like she used to with Dee. In addition she used to make some judgement about my behavior. My mother only appreciates my sister. My mother sometimes gives the impression that I will fail in my life and becoming an individual; I will fade into a life of farm work, and take care of children.
Added December 03, 2019 at 3:07pm
by Leticia Zang
Title: Wording change
The text below is the previous wording for paragraph 2 (click to return there).
I have been dying to tell you what happened today in my life. I woke up every day and I don't feel happy with my life because I think everything about me does not worth. I don't feel happy with my life because I think everything about me ie no worth much. When I was a little child, I was the only person in my house who got burned a fire. Since that day, I lost confidence in myself. The only thing I desire now is to live with other people. I have a sister who is really enjoying her life and I am always observing her. I am someone who is barely recognized or even noticed by the world because I am silent and distant. I am rarely present even when I try to pronounce complete sentences. My life seems to be like darkness and disaster.
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Moreover, to be a burn victim, I have a small education. I have a problem to read. My mother describes me in less than flattering terms such as a wounded animal who must live her life forever overpowered to forces bigger than her own will.
Although faithful and loving, Mama does not fortify me with many powerful qualities. My mother only appreciates my sister. My mother sometimes gives the impression that I will fail in my life and becoming an individual; I will fade into a life of farm work, and take care of children.
Even though I have all those weaknesses and I am not like mama want me to be, I am grateful for what life gives to me because I am not like other people want me to be. Nonetheles my mother describes me as she does, but I thank my mother because I underwent a lot of changes in my life. I became more confident. Also, I become more confident after my sister came to visit me and in front of her mama defends my best interests.
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