Most recent public comments by Sibely Anan https://nowcomment.com/users/11068 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25198?scroll_to=270251 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25198?scroll_to=270251 My point was that the material is excessive, and not wholly necessary. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:45:45 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25198?scroll_to=269835 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25198?scroll_to=269835 The reviewer has a habit of constructing careful characterizations of the individuals he explores in this love triangle. This last sentence has a hard impact on the reader - the word "practice" to normalize the actions of Hughes, the word "provoked" to denote the severity with which he performs these actions. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:45:45 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25198?scroll_to=269834 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25198?scroll_to=269834 The reviewer is trying to make it apparent that he has done his research and is well-informed on the people he is writing about. However, by having such a large chunk where he simply drops quotes from these other texts, he clutters his writing and distracts the reader. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:45:45 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25198?scroll_to=269814 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25198?scroll_to=269814 "The world went terribly wrong" (5) is a cliche that sets up the turning point for the relationships among the characters. It is not clear at all what exactly happened in Devon, which I assume is the point, but we do have a introduction into the elusive character of Assia. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:45:45 -0500