Comments by Sophia Williams Most recent public comments by Sophia Williams https://nowcomment.com/users/12972 In narratives, quotations play a key role of having the character of the story speak their own words. Quotations can also be quite eye-opening. They function here by displaying to the reader Sylvia's inner thoughts & feelings. https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=335521 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=335521 Fri, 17 Apr 2015 19:27:21 -0400 In this paragraph the background is painting a picture of the surroundings behind Sylvia and Ted's relationship https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=335520 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=335520 Fri, 17 Apr 2015 19:19:37 -0400 Background is super important as it helps to give the story context that can be helpful for the reader to begin visualizing every element of the story.environment around Sylvia and Ted https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=335518 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=335518 Fri, 17 Apr 2015 19:12:16 -0400 The character is introduced by taking part in an action relative to the main character and the story taking place. I felt that in this paragraph, the character (Aurelia) is introduced in a way that shows the interactions between her and Sylvia https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=335514 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=335514 Fri, 17 Apr 2015 18:47:09 -0400 It gives the reader a greater sense of everything taking place in the life of Sylvia. https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=335513 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=335513 Fri, 17 Apr 2015 18:40:45 -0400 I think it is short because of its emotional impact. About the narrative management: it states that a paragraph that is brief usually makes a huge impact and says a lot about the matter. https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=326336 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=326336 Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:45 -0500 Paragraph begins with a sentence to entice the reader and get/keep the reader interested in knowing more about Susan's background. https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=326332 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=326332 Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:45 -0500 There is much more for us to get to know about Sontag. A lot of it, I feel we may never imagine or be able to comprehend fully. https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=326329 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=326329 Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:44 -0500 it's in quotes as she didn't or couldn't really remember very clearly the event took place. https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=326327 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=326327 Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:44 -0500 1st Paragraph https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=326322 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=326322 I feel that this tells me Susan's curiosity with with what was around her and also, what is being said in her presence.I think it also shows her curiosity and interest with words and their meaning. The reader could possibly be prepared for numerous flashbacks of Susan's life that reflects her curiosity and wisdom. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:44 -0500 Language of Diary https://nowcomment.com/documents/25283?scroll_to=323551 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25283?scroll_to=323551 The use of first person. Informal language. Date entries. The incorporation of the author's personal stories. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:39 -0500 Men https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321800 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321800 Feelings of wanting to be in the company of others. Not wanting to ever be alone. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:37 -0500 Cato https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321799 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321799 I'm wondering if Cato represents another side of the character in the story. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:36 -0500 Ishmael's Story https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321798 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321798 I feel like a personal story is what I will read from Ishmael. Or maybe the name 'Ishmael' represents a character or some other figure who Ishmael in this story is trying to bring alive again. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:36 -0500 Ishmael https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321797 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321797 I feel like Ishmael has a lot dealing with and needs to get away. He seems to have a lot on his mind and have to find a way to be at peace or else something more dangerous may happen to him. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:36 -0500 I wonder. https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=317604 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=317604 "I wonder" feels like the biographer is still not 100% sure on all the parts of the story he/she intends to reveal to known and unknown audiences. I also feel like it means, the biographer will be somewhat opinionated on the person whose life is being written about. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:28 -0500 Biographer https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=317522 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=317522 I feel that the biographer is half the story as he/she has to tell the story and by telling the story he/she has to put themselves in the body of the person they are writing about, in order to strongly and accurately execute someone's lifestory Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:28 -0500 Biography smoothing over. https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=317521 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=317521 A biography can smooth over a raw record by providing the full story that illuminates the raw record of conversations Fri, 20 Feb 2015 22:44:35 -0500 Biography smoothing over. https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=317509 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=317509 I think the biography will smooth out and make more understandable the raw record of conversations. It can also smooth over the raw record by providing the whole biographical story. Fri, 20 Feb 2015 22:24:36 -0500 Egdon remained https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315974 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315974 This could possibly mean that Egdon is an eternal figure that does not change in nature even with civilization changing. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:26 -0500 Civilization v. Nature https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315973 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315973 I feel that civilization is the enemy of nature. Somehow, it's as if civilization came along and corrupted nature. And nature is always known to be this pure and beautiful thing. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:26 -0500 Domesday https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315972 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315972 The fact that Domesday is capitalized, I thought of it being a particular unknown place that the readers would eventually come to know later on in the story. In terms of the heath, I look at it as the place that holds the heath. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:26 -0500 Haggard https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315676 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315676 his paragraph is a little difficult for me to understand. However, I think haggard is applied to the heath, because the heath is being described in a run-down manner. Clearly, the heath's beauty has diminished. I think Hardy applies haggard to the heath, in order to show that it was once loved and admired, maybe when it was once of beauty. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:24 -0500 Space and Time https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315671 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315671 From the reading, I gather that Hardy is using space and time to give characteristics to the heath. For example, the heath is given characteristics of time where Hardy states, "the heath wore the appearance of an instalment of night." Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:24 -0500 Setting description https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315664 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315664 I like it that the author started off this piece with a really vivid description of the setting. It helps to draw me in any story. Thu, 12 Feb 2015 16:19:28 -0500 Title https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315645 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30619?scroll_to=315645 The first time looking at this title, gave me the impression that someone is returning home to the his/her homeland, after being away for some time. Thu, 12 Feb 2015 13:18:58 -0500 Take a Break https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314313 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314313 I love this rule. It is such a benefit when you take a break as a writer. Doing this can only enhance one's writing. One most likely can return to the writing more inspired and creative than before. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:19 -0500 Eliminate Distraction is key https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314309 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314309 This is very important. I know I need to get a better handle on how to do this. Personally, this is so hard to do, but if done, the results are amazing. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:19 -0500 So True https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314305 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314305 Reading a whole lot and being open about reading many different things and reading with an open mind is so important in understanding life. It will not only help with writing, but also help with our critiques. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:18 -0500 Sophia's Re-Rank of Rules https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314302 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314302 1. Turn off the TV 2. Eliminate Distraction 3. Read, read, read 4. Write for yourself 5. Don't obsess over perfect grammar 6. Avoid adverbs 7. Avoid adverbs, especially after he "he said" and "she said" 8. The magic is in you 9. Don't worry about making other people happy 10. Don't use passive voice 11. Dig 12. Stick to your own style 13. The research shouldn't overshadow the story 14. You become a writer simple by reading and writing 15. Leave out boring parts and kill your darlings 16. Take a break 17. Write one word at a time 18. There are two secrets to success 19. You have 3 months 20. Writing is about getting happy One rule I would add to King's list is to do a through outline Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:20 -0500