Most recent public comments by Jona Jaupi https://nowcomment.com/users/13086 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=339896 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=339896 it is important to illustrate this point through literary techniques. Fri, 15 May 2015 11:37:42 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=339894 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=339894 Aren't we all. Fri, 15 May 2015 11:35:49 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=339893 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=339893 A timeless tale of man and sea, i feel like people today might have a hard time resonating with this because people are so attached to their technology on land. Fri, 15 May 2015 11:34:47 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=339892 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=339892 I agree with Nia, he makes his feelings towards life on land very apparent. Fri, 15 May 2015 11:33:08 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=339891 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=339891 I agree, it's important to not bury the narrative and story line underneath too much background. Fri, 15 May 2015 11:31:53 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=339890 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=339890 Even though it's complex, it is systematic and illustrated in a way that does not confuse the reader. Fri, 15 May 2015 11:31:05 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=339889 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=339889 I agree, I think suspense is an important and effective tool in keeping the reader engaged. Fri, 15 May 2015 11:29:35 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30608?scroll_to=327476 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30608?scroll_to=327476 In a review about a topic such as this one, which is essentially a personal experiment conducted by Spurlock, you need numbers to make the story. No one cares about Ebert's opinions, we just want the facts of what Spurlock unlocked about McDonalds, a popular food chain we are all guilty of having eaten in. What this says about Ebert's technique is that he realizes a good review of this documentary entails stats that the documentary gathered. His own story is used to contrast/balance out the review of the story, giving his own experience may help resonate with the reader better. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:47:02 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=327475 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=327475 it reiterates a question that the reader was probably thinking (I know I was), while simultaneously suggesting that it will address this question soon. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:46 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=327474 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=327474 "What Sontag wants to tell us" serves the purpose of letting the reader know that there is room for interpretation when analyzing her actions and thoughts. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:46 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=327473 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25280?scroll_to=327473 The first paragraph exemplifies Susan's curiosity and introspection at a young age. It prepares us to expect how this affected her growing up and a possible explanation for why she was like this. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:45 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30240?scroll_to=323502 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30240?scroll_to=323502 It seems that Ebert has the same notion of "real" that some morally-questionable photojournalists might have. For example in photojournalism, one is not allowed to manipulate photos, but by using functions such as "crop" you are in fact doing that, because while it is still real (you didn't photoshop anything into the photo) you are still distorting the original overall picture. Which is essentially what Flaherty did, and it seems that Ebert is condoning it. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:42 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30240?scroll_to=323501 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30240?scroll_to=323501 Because Flaherty's documentaries were created at a time where the standards for the "documentary" hadn't yet been solidified, he got away with manipulating the scenes for the sake of cinematography. Ebert chose the words, "realities admittedly assisted" because essentially the reality that was being shown on screen was being "assisted" to look the way Flaherty wanted it to. i.e. the fake wives and children, while they existed, Flhaerty had actors for whatever reason, but he admitted to it. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:41 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30240?scroll_to=323497 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30240?scroll_to=323497 Ebert began his review by focusing on said sequence because it is captivating to the audience. Reviews are not the most fascinating thing to read sometimes, so Ebert knew by focusing on the most adventurous part of the film that he could entice people to read further. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:41 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=321817 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=321817 Background is necessary to paint a fuller picture of the story, it provides depth and clarity, however too much might overly-saturate the picture. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:35 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=321816 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=321816 Every character in this narrative is a key component to telling the story of Plath's final days. The all give us perspective in one way or another. Either they are in the story to give us perspective on Plath, or we are shown Plath's perspective on them, which in turn gives us more perspective on Plath and her inner thoughts. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:34 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=321815 https://nowcomment.com/documents/25279?scroll_to=321815 The role of chronology in these paragraphs is crucial to telling Plath's story in not only an organized way, but an interesting way. It would be easy to write "Plath committed suicide using her oven", but the role of chronology walks us through in explicit details through the final moments of Plath's life. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:34 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321814 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321814 The feeling of being free is one all of mankind strives for, not just men. Liberation, freedom, clarity, these are all feelings that man seeks, and according to Ishmael, this can be obtained on the sea. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:37 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321813 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321813 I agree with you. Read my comment above! Fri, 06 Mar 2015 22:04:18 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321812 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321812 It is alluding to suicide yes, but instead of committing a literal suicide, it seems Ishmael has condemned himself to another type of death on land, and the only escape seems to be the sea. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:36 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321811 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321811 I would say suicide is strong suggested throughout lines such as, "whenever I find myself involuntarily pausing before coffin warehouses, and bringing up the rear of every funeral I meet." Fri, 06 Mar 2015 22:04:18 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321810 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321810 In the story, Ishmael says he has no particular ties to the land. He seems to turn to the sea whenever he is "grim," or has a "damp, drizzly November in [his] soul". The sea seems to be the only place that can soothe him and bring happiness to his life, as opposed to a "pistol and ball." Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:36 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321809 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30622?scroll_to=321809 Ishmael is the name of Abraham's son according to Judaism, Christianity, and Islam. Melville's character, like the religious figure, spends much time in the wilderness exploring and trying to find himself. This resonates well with Melville's character, hence he asks to be called "Ishmael." With that being said the kind of story I can anticipate is that of an epic one, as Ishmael's was in the religious tales. A story of loss, obsession, delusions of grandeur, and finding oneself. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:36 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314987 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314987 Fri, 06 Mar 2015 22:04:18 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314986 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314986 Fri, 06 Mar 2015 22:04:18 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314323 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314323 But it wouldn't hurt if you made some money off of it, after all, more money means more comfortable settings for me to happily write in. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:19 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314322 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314322 If there's one thing that bothered my journalism professors, it was using adverbs. I never use them anymore. It just starts making sentences too wordy. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:18 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314321 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314321 I agree with you, if a story is written in the passive voice I would probably stop reading it within an hour. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:18 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314320 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314320 I definitely agree with you Arif, as I mentioned in my comment to Hayley, I think if you write for yourself first, then your writing captures a very unique essence, the type of essence an author is trying to convey in the first place. Fri, 06 Mar 2015 22:04:18 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314319 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30612?scroll_to=314319 I kind of disagree with you in terms of writing a certain way to appeal to a target audience from the get-go. I think what King is trying to say here is that one's best work truly comes out when they write for themselves first. That way, the story comes out the way the author intended it to, it's not distorted for the purposes of reaching the target audience. However, after this first draft is written, then it is possible to edit certain characteristics without deteriorating the initial essence of the book. Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:18 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=314318 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=314318 Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:17 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=314317 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=314317 Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:17 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=314316 https://nowcomment.com/documents/30636?scroll_to=314316 Sat, 20 Feb 2016 08:46:17 -0500