Comments by Adrienne Ransom Most recent public comments by Adrienne Ransom https://nowcomment.com/users/142544 I had that thought as well. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546421 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546421 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 13:34:09 -0400 I like using italics to show the other point of view, but the first two paragraphs should also be that way. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546420 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546420 Also, I would've liked to see more of a balance between the two POVs. Fri, 12 Sep 2025 13:31:03 -0400 Irony https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546405 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546405 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 13:24:30 -0400 POV of the flowers is just so interesting to me. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546404 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546404 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 13:16:35 -0400 Great job with personification. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546389 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546389 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 13:13:22 -0400 I like that the flowers refer to humans as foreigners for some reason. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546388 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546388 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 13:09:08 -0400 I can picture a colorful garden and imagine them talking. Nice details. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546387 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546387 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 13:03:37 -0400 Lol. I just realized they are flowers. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546386 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546386 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 12:58:20 -0400 Monarchs are beautiful. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546385 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546385 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 12:51:11 -0400 I'd revise this into two sentences. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546384 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546384 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 12:49:59 -0400 Were the first two paragraphs meant to be a prologue? POV change threw me off a little. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546383 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546383 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 12:47:40 -0400 Nice imagery here. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546382 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546382 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 12:43:27 -0400