Most recent public comments by Jessica Felts https://nowcomment.com/users/1533 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6768 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6768 Thank you so much for sharing these thoughts and sentiments, Margaret. I really appreciate you trusting us with your insights. I like how you talk about your growth for this semester... I'm so glad we get to experience your growth alongside you! Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6767 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6767 You've done a lot of great analysis of the books we've read.... I want to know more about you though! Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6766 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6766 I'd love to learn more about how your interact with these powers in your own life... who/what are they? Do they go away? Do you face or avoid them, or learn to live side by side with them? And what is "growing up"? Just food for thought! See, you're really sparking my own brain to question these things! Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6764 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6764 The metaphors of light and dark hallways resonate with me. Do you see life as a series of hallways -- and can you flip on the switch in dark hallways, or do they stay dark and you must find the light ones? Are you alone in the hallway? Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6763 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6763 I like how you are incorporating the Fairy Tales! Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6762 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3056?scroll_to=6762 The most powerful points of your reflections come when you talk about yourself. I really connected with this paragraph. I think that details really relate to the audience.... I'd love to learn more about you through a few more specific reflections interspersed through your paper. Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6758 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6758 I think you can, like I said, readjust your paragraphs to end with a thought a little bit more personal. I really loved this, August. Well done. Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6756 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6756 I think this is a very veyr powerful paragraph, I love what you're doing with the actions in the series near the end -- it reads really well, in my opinion. I think this is a great way to end the paper, if there's a way to tie up your thoughts with something so personal and tying in a lesson, maybe switch with the scripture analysis (which I also think is effective!) Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6754 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6754 So glad you're connecting with this portion of the reading -- really adds to depth to your ideas. Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6752 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6752 I don't think you need to say "Tying it back to the reading." It's clear that you are, so from a strutural standpoint, I think your words are more powerful if you SHOW the reader that you connected and embodied the readings without telling us that you are now drawing conclusions. Do you want to elaborate on your rhetorical question at the end of the paragraph? You don't seem to answer it in the next paragraph, so you may want to consider how best to place the question so it packs the most punch. Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6748 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6748 Thank you so much August, for trusting us with who you really are. I'm really honored to know you. Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6746 https://nowcomment.com/documents/3039?scroll_to=6746 I really like how you are starting with a question-- it makes me think about how I connect with myself, in a way preparing me to read your story like John and Dorothe prepare us for discussion through meditation. Thu, 23 Aug 2012 10:14:10 -0400