Comments by Dani Kramer Most recent public comments by Dani Kramer https://nowcomment.com/users/159106 Choosing to only have two lines out of the little song is really interesting. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546495 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546495 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 22:21:02 -0400 As heartbreaking as it is this speaks monumentally about death and beauty. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546494 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546494 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 22:19:30 -0400 This sibling dynamic is done really nicely. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546493 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546493 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 22:17:41 -0400 This is a really interesting thought. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546492 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546492 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 22:16:14 -0400 You have more really wonderful imagery right here. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546491 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546491 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 22:15:18 -0400 I think you did really nicely on this paragraph, it feels very tense and mournful and that works for the unfortunate circumstances everything arose from. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546489 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546489 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 22:12:20 -0400 I feel like you could take off the mention of dying quickly at the end of this sentence as it feels a bit repetitive. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546488 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546488 Sun, 14 Sep 2025 18:59:26 -0400 This feels very disconnected to the rest of the paragraph, it kind of took me out of the imagery you wrote here. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546487 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546487 Fri, 12 Sep 2025 22:07:24 -0400