Comments by Susan Elliott Most recent public comments by Susan Elliott https://nowcomment.com/users/159108 I like how Ankha acknowledges the death of the flowers. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546936 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546936 Sun, 14 Sep 2025 22:10:31 -0400 This is clever. "Tears pricked my eyes." https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546935 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546935 Sun, 14 Sep 2025 22:08:25 -0400 Need to add some space between the question mark and quotes. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546934 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546934 Sun, 14 Sep 2025 22:08:07 -0400 I like this. It is really neat to see the entire ordeal from the flower's perspective. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546933 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546933 Sun, 14 Sep 2025 22:07:29 -0400 I love the idea of this story. It is fascinating. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546932 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546932 Sun, 14 Sep 2025 22:06:20 -0400 Perhaps you should start with the flowers talking and then introduce the people? https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546931 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546931 Sun, 14 Sep 2025 22:05:15 -0400 You lost me. I think it was the POV switch. I thought you went into a dream sequence or something. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546930 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546930 Sun, 14 Sep 2025 22:03:27 -0400 I like the description, but... https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546929 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546929 I wonder if you were as detailed, but zoomed in on the animal instead of such a large general overview, it might be more powerful. For instance, a large blue parrot twittered its happy song. Sun, 14 Sep 2025 22:02:12 -0400 This is so heavy and relatable. https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546928 https://nowcomment.com/documents/405911?scroll_to=3546928 Sun, 14 Sep 2025 21:59:05 -0400