Comments by Candice Kwok Most recent public comments by Candice Kwok https://nowcomment.com/users/22052 are suicides the leading death of gay people? https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529964 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529964 Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:40:13 -0400 I thought that the suicide rates for heterosexuals are higher https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529963 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529963 Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:38:31 -0400 information about suicide https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529961 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529961 I think that it's very general until the next page Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:36:44 -0400 I don't have much to say on this page https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529960 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529960 Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:38:31 -0400 have homosexuals been raped? https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529959 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529959 I know it's probably true, but the idea sounds weird Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:32:04 -0400 GLSEN https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529958 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529958 I've researched about this organization/network before! They also started most of the LGBTQ clubs at high school Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:30:16 -0400 sexual harassment https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529957 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529957 Reread. I don't understand how it connects to homosexuality Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:28:36 -0400 bullying https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529955 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529955 This can also apply to other indentites as well Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:26:02 -0400 homophobia https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529953 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529953 this is not necessarily true for me and most Christians. We are not homophobic; it's just that we believe what they are doing isn't right. It doesn't mean we don't love them; it's because we know it's a sin Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:23:50 -0400 study on bullying https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529952 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529952 That is true. I've been bullied before, and it made me feel like some of the emotions listed in the paragraph Mon, 20 May 2024 00:43:41 -0400 defintions https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529951 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529951 prenatal: before birth spatial: relating to space Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:17:44 -0400 words that I don't know https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529950 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529950 prenatal, spatial Thu, 30 Jun 2022 03:09:06 -0400 Influence of environment https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529949 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529949 I disagree with that statement. Although it had evidence for it, I feel like that there is influence when it comes to being homosexual. Sun, 26 Jun 2022 04:13:40 -0400 animals and homosexuality https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529947 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529947 I wonder if that is really true. If it is, I want to look deeper into the theory of his research Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:09:23 -0400 The paragraph about twin brothers and influence https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529945 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529945 Is there a way where you can find out what your "gender" is what you are born? Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:07:24 -0400 The title of the essay is on also on the page of the introduction https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529942 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529942 It isn't acceptable for us to make the font on the title bigger. Is it ok to use on the EE? Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:00:52 -0400 Titles of the body paragraphs https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529939 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529939 very interesting; makes you want to read it Sun, 12 Jun 2016 00:55:38 -0400 There's a big space between the bibliography and conclusion https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529938 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=529938 Why is that? Is it because that it isn't a part of your essay (if you know what I mean)? Sun, 12 Jun 2016 00:55:38 -0400 indent on the lines after the first. Centered https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528724 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528724 Sun, 05 Jun 2016 17:23:35 -0400 bibliography https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528723 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528723 Author, day it was written, title, date retrieved, website Sun, 05 Jun 2016 17:23:35 -0400 last paragraph of the conclusion (even more specific, "even in zealous states such as Oklahoma") https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528722 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528722 why end with an example? Sun, 05 Jun 2016 17:19:49 -0400 conculsion https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528721 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528721 It summarizes all the body paragraphs, and takes out the important points in each paragraph to prove her point. Also, it shows how to fix it and how this research can help change the thoughts of others Sun, 05 Jun 2016 17:19:49 -0400 are you allowed to put that big of a quote in there? https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528720 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528720 Sun, 05 Jun 2016 17:14:26 -0400 That huge, long quote https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528719 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528719 Does that count as a part of the 4000 words in the essay? I don't remember what the handbook said about it Sun, 05 Jun 2016 17:14:26 -0400 Suicude, as a result from harassment https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528718 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528718 Author uses the pychologists' and gay peoples' perspectives in the essay Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:40:13 -0400 analysis is very settle, not big and over the top https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528717 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528717 Sun, 05 Jun 2016 17:03:56 -0400 Now I see a few personal stuff https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528716 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528716 There are a few analysis on the paper Sun, 05 Jun 2016 17:03:56 -0400 How the body paragraphs are written https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528715 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528715 I'm still kind of confused of how I'm supposed to write the body paragraphs. They all seem like they're summarizing the information that they found in the source. Sun, 26 Jun 2022 18:24:40 -0400 The Harassment of Homosexuals https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528714 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528714 How come the quote wasn't cited in the 1st paragraph? Sun, 05 Jun 2016 16:56:21 -0400 3rd page: how do we know that the information used in this essay is accurate? https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528706 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528706 Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:09:23 -0400 Upload https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528704 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528704 I uploaded the doc, and it got messed up. Sorry! Sun, 05 Jun 2016 16:32:00 -0400 second paragraph: it makes no sense to me https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528703 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528703 Sorry for being so critical of this essay. I'm expressing my thoughts in the essay. After all, we are supposed to challenge other peoples' opinions in IB, right Sun, 05 Jun 2016 16:21:45 -0400 Structure of the essay https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528702 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528702 It's doubled spaced, everything centered in the middle. The title of each little section has a slightly bigger font and it's underlined. There seems to be two spaces in-between the start of each new sentence Sun, 05 Jun 2016 16:18:33 -0400 The Psychology behind Homsexuality https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528701 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528701 I don't agree with the statement that being homosexual is biological. If that's the case, is it possible to find out if your child is going to be straight or not? Sun, 05 Jun 2016 16:21:45 -0400 Introduction: how do we know how to cite a piece of information? https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528700 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528700 is it by the author and the date of when it was written? Or the website and date? I'm slightly confused Sun, 12 Jun 2016 00:56:43 -0400 Introduction https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528699 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528699 The first paragraph shows statistics and studies of discrimination. These facts lead into the question the author is trying to answer The second paragraph shows the author's thoughts on how to solve this problem. The author refers back to the statistics in the first paragraph to show her point. S(he) also describes the impact of harassment before hopping into her body paragraph Sun, 12 Jun 2016 01:00:52 -0400 Table of Contents: the author broke the body paragraph down into sections. The subjects on here are also mentioned in the abstract https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528695 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528695 Sun, 12 Jun 2016 00:55:38 -0400 I agree that homosexuals are harassed and stuff, but I still don't believe that it's right to be homosexual https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528692 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528692 As a Christian, we are to love each other. I know that being homosexual is wrong, but it doesn't give us the right to hurt them. Instead, we should try to help them see that this is a sin. Sun, 05 Jun 2016 15:56:12 -0400 The abstract shouldn't be too long. Short summary of the essay https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528690 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528690 Sun, 05 Jun 2016 15:52:23 -0400 pg 1: The abstract gives an overview of what the essay is about, and want the reader is going to see in the actual essay https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528688 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528688 I got confused of what the difference is between introduction and abstract. I think this clears it a little bit Sun, 05 Jun 2016 15:56:12 -0400 This is for the title: Do you think that people become homosexual because of abuse? Instead of being homosexual and getting harassed? https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528686 https://nowcomment.com/documents/54894?scroll_to=528686 Not sure if I make any sense, but here are my thoughts Mon, 27 Dec 2021 21:45:42 -0500