Most recent public comments by Saucedog Jessica Jessica Kreiner https://nowcomment.com/users/24901 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595876 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595876 I wonder how many times the author has camped. It really seems that they are against the idea, so I wouldn't be surprised if that number was low... Sun, 16 Oct 2016 23:48:39 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595873 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595873 The author sort of states their position on the subject by saying “others”. This implies that that the author isn’t part of the group who believes that the ‘danger’ in camping is an adventure, so they must be against that dangerous aspect. Sun, 16 Oct 2016 23:44:19 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595871 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595871 I'm also really curious as to how bad this weather experience was? I mean, was it just some rain that made the ground muddy or was it more serious? Mon, 17 Oct 2016 01:14:12 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595870 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595870 At the end, although the author specifically says that they aren't better to each other in whole (there are obviously pros and cons), they do go on to state their position on the subject. Sun, 16 Oct 2016 23:40:27 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595869 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595869 This essay is a block essay. I can tell this because each of the following paragraphs explains one thing as a WHOLE (whole-to-whole is another term for block essays). The first paragraph explains the situations dealt with in tent-camping vacationing and the second paragraph explains the situations dealt with in hotel vacationing. Each paragraph deal with each subject completely, not adding specific similarities and differences between the two. Sun, 16 Oct 2016 23:37:42 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595866 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595866 What are the other two branches made up of? And how do they work? Sun, 16 Oct 2016 23:33:24 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595861 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595861 Who exactly do the choose to be in the Congress? How many people often run to be in the Congress, and do they have to have certain credentials? Sun, 16 Oct 2016 23:21:02 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595859 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595859 I find it interesting that they began with the differences. I would personally start with their similarities. Sun, 16 Oct 2016 23:17:54 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595858 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61998?scroll_to=595858 This paragraph displays the differences of the branches, the next paragraph going on to explain the similarities. Because of this, I can determine that this is an example of a point-by-point essay. The first point is the differences between the houses, going on to explain one house and noting the differences in contrast; and the second point is to explain all of the similarities between the houses. In each paragraph, the author lists the beginning statement about one of the houses and then goes on to list the differences raised because of the other houses. As said in the read-write-think lesson, "In this structure, you explain one point of comparison before moving to the next point. " Sun, 16 Oct 2016 23:34:07 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61240?scroll_to=585510 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61240?scroll_to=585510 This culture that changed America was a by-product of "a bunch of kids from a bunch of different places trying to talk to each other, to create a common language." These kids were trying to connect their cultures and uniqueness to gather a "sameness in a world that only seemed to emphasize [their] difference." Fri, 30 Sep 2016 02:10:20 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61240?scroll_to=585509 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61240?scroll_to=585509 I really appreciated this paragraph. The author names off all these friends that they had made and states their heritage and lineage. They all came from different places, but there were uniting despite the divided outside world. And they were uniting for one sole purpose, hip-hop (I'm guessing that this hip-hop that the author is making out in the entire document is a sort of musical culture created by all of these different cultures connecting). Fri, 30 Sep 2016 02:10:20 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61240?scroll_to=585508 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61240?scroll_to=585508 Fri, 30 Sep 2016 02:10:20 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61240?scroll_to=585507 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61240?scroll_to=585507 There's so much to say in this paragraph. For starters, the author is using a pretty strong rhetorical device - repetition. To show how many different types of people there were in this school, the author begins each describing sentence with the words, "There were kids", and then goes on to describe what types of kids there were. This goes on to prove my next point, evidence. I would qualify this as sustainable evidence towards what I believe to be the authors claim (the kids were oblivious to how all these cultures and self-expressionism uniting allowed them to change America). It is a bit more entry-level, but there were so many different, unique, people in that school and that's where the change took place. The author dramatizes this by starting out each sentence with "There were kids". Wed, 08 Aug 2018 19:34:20 -0300 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61240?scroll_to=585506 https://nowcomment.com/documents/61240?scroll_to=585506 "Who knew?" Who knew that that generation was going to be a major turning point for America? Who knew that all of these different cultures and languages they were tying into were a part of that change? That is what the author is trying to get you to ponder in this entire document. Of course, those two words alone wouldn't have been enough to be considered a claim, so I believe that the author used all of those other sentences in the first and second paragraphs to piece together a quick summary of those questions. But then he summarizes it even more by saying, "Who knew?" That was the biggest thing about this "cultural revolution". The kids didn't know that they were changing history, they were just being unique, to be kids, and because of that they changed America. Thu, 06 Oct 2016 17:40:38 -0300