Most recent public comments by Grace;Lesley Aheron https://nowcomment.com/users/2742 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15866 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15866 I like what you've done with your paper since draft #1! I hope my comments are helpful-- if you want follow-up on any of them, please email me! You're going in a great direction. I also wanted to commend your spunk for taking this class as a first year-- this is A LOT of work and a lot of engagement with concepts and ideas which may be difficult to grasp having only been inaugurated into the community a few weeks ago. Well done! Sun, 16 Sep 2012 22:20:54 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15863 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15863 I like your thinking here-- you've clearly thought about the issue and I actually learned a lot reading this portion of your essay. Sun, 16 Sep 2012 22:18:12 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15860 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15860 Here it might be more helpful to focus your critiques less on the structure of the class and more on ethics, content, or goals Sun, 16 Sep 2012 22:15:19 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15852 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15852 I'm so glad you put this in. You came a long way from not caring to being in a class solely about this event. what a marvelous journey! Sun, 16 Sep 2012 22:07:12 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15850 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15850 I think you may be responding to my suggestion to add in critiques of the class here... I think you're being a bit blunt, though! What's maybe difficult here is that you haven't yet experienced a lot of college classes (obviously) so I can imagine it would be difficult to compare and criticize this one. I was thinking that there might be ethical concerns with the nature of the class or critiques of oral history in general (Goodson offers a few)! I think your mention of the length of class as a legitimate critique is a bit juvenile-- there's lots of seminars around these parts! I hope this helps. And you may not have been responding to my previous comment, but, either way, I don't think this section is helping your essay. Sun, 16 Sep 2012 22:05:38 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15845 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15845 Do you like media studies? Maybe clarify that here. It's a little thing, but your reader doesn't know your interests! Sun, 16 Sep 2012 21:58:21 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15842 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4406?scroll_to=15842 I'm commenting on this one and not the one titled "super blog post" because this one is longer... I hope that's right! Also, please refer to my comments on your actual blog post. I'll try not to replicate those here :) Sun, 16 Sep 2012 21:54:31 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4408?scroll_to=15840 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4408?scroll_to=15840 Annie, if you'd like more feedback as you're writing, feel free to post most drafts of your essay on nowcomment and I'd love to say more. I like the direction you're going and I think it'll be a great paper. I'm happy to help in the revisions! Sun, 16 Sep 2012 21:48:41 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4408?scroll_to=15839 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4408?scroll_to=15839 So true-- I do hope that it helps develop our identities as society members and individual and Wahoos-- I hope you write more about YOUR own journey in all of that Sun, 16 Sep 2012 21:47:33 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4408?scroll_to=15836 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4408?scroll_to=15836 So true, I like this about our class as well. It'd be cool to expand on the diversity of our class and the diversity of people involved in the ouster community this summer Sun, 16 Sep 2012 21:43:13 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4408?scroll_to=15835 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4408?scroll_to=15835 You might be planning on doing this in your final paper, but I think being a part of the Dance Team is a really unique perspective. You basically pump people up about UVa all the time! I think I would be interested to read more about what your experience was like in all the Sullivan stuff as someone who has to be super excited about UVa. Sun, 16 Sep 2012 21:42:15 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4408?scroll_to=15833 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4408?scroll_to=15833 I think your connection here could be a little clearer. You're saying grades, how to interview, and people with similar interests are ALL part of why you picked UVa? :) Maybe be a bit clearer in answering your initial question, which I think, by the way, is a good starting point. Sun, 16 Sep 2012 21:38:40 -0500