Comments by Murali Varadaraj Most recent public comments by Murali Varadaraj https://nowcomment.com/users/2771 'Required' can be taken out I'd say. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18663 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18663 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:42:10 -0400 I'd recommend adding 'additionally' before 'causing error'. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18658 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18658 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:41:45 -0400 Maybe say, "This reduces the predicted volume of fruits, which is a cause of error." https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18654 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18654 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:54:57 -0400 Combine this sentence with the previous one? For example: "This indicates that while limes contain the lowest ascorbic acid concentration, they are the most effective in terms of spatial conservation and consequently are the most efficient to pack. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18645 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18645 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:53:50 -0400 The first comma is unnecessary, but the second is perfect. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18620 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18620 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:37:20 -0400 I'd suggest to remove 'only', and just end the sentence with 'comparatively'. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18614 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18614 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:53:14 -0400 Referencing 'table three' can be done in parentheses, but also saying 'volume occupied' is redundant...I'd say take out the 'occupied'. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18599 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18599 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:34:51 -0400 Maybe an alternative title could be "Fruit ascorbic acid content and volume" https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18588 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18588 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:33:23 -0400 Good call, that's a perfect reason why disparities can occur. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18580 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18580 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:32:13 -0400 Referencing the table can be done in parentheses, rather than direct statement. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18576 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18576 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:31:41 -0400 For referencing table two i think you just have to put it in parentheses rather than actually stating it. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18569 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18569 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:49:49 -0400 Maybe title 'Iodine and Fruit Juice Titration'? https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18564 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18564 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:29:45 -0400 A little grammar issue, but an alternative sentence could be: "The reaction between titrant and analyte indicated that lime juice requires the lowest volume of iodine to reach the endpoint, while orange juice required the greatest volume." https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18560 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18560 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:29:11 -0400 The paper looks professional, it's formatted correctly from what I can see, essentially it looks great. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18546 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18546 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:26:01 -0400 Maybe 'combined' could be replaced with 'reacted'? Semantics, but it couldn't hurt. https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18543 https://nowcomment.com/documents/4551?scroll_to=18543 Fri, 21 Sep 2012 14:49:15 -0400