Comments by El-Hassn Salem

Her efforts to soter safe enveoimtnets in pubic school will be remembered becasue she stand up for what is right.

Fri, 06 Mar 2020 15:39:39 -0500

enough is enough. If stdents can't feel safe in classroom, they can't get education.

Fri, 06 Mar 2020 15:37:27 -0500

Mass shootings in U.S. Public school is the real threat that have been facing U.S. in the last couple of years.

Fri, 06 Mar 2020 15:36:11 -0500

Police should stop profile the minority commuintes in the public school becasue they are humans, too.

Fri, 06 Mar 2020 15:34:50 -0500

bullying is harvesting our youth lives and their lives matter as muc as everyone else.

Fri, 06 Mar 2020 15:33:51 -0500

She said she lost her hero and that shows that the impact of his brother on her is tremondus. She lost her brother for no reason.

Fri, 06 Mar 2020 15:32:13 -0500

I like the fact that she have the courage to tell her brother sad story fro everyone.

Fri, 06 Mar 2020 15:29:27 -0500

I sgrre with the fact that past shouldn't hold us back and stop us from achiving our dreams. Despite the fact that his brother passed away in school shooting, but she didn't give up.

Fri, 06 Mar 2020 15:28:40 -0500

We, youth, should make sure that our voices are heard. We should demand and keep fighting untill we acheive educational justice.

Fri, 06 Mar 2020 15:24:54 -0500

I like that she push for educational justice because this area has been begging for years.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 22:07:24 -0500

I like it when he said I don't want you to stand for us but stadnd with us...this is reinforcne the imporatnce oe unity and be one perosn.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 22:05:07 -0500

humans created the greatest crissis and the greateest civlization so we sghould wokr together to create long lastine civlication

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 22:03:57 -0500

the belifes of the current socierty is killing the earth and we should change thi belifes comepletly.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 22:02:56 -0500

we shouldn't forget the past. Instead, use it as a lessons and to repeat the same mistake again.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 22:02:02 -0500

we should work together for soemthing novel. we should enlight everyone about the imporatnve of unity and how it's the only way to survuve on this planet.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:53:51 -0500

HUman greed is the main issue of all the human race problems. greed make us blind and makr us work on destroying each other instead of working togethert.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:52:20 -0500

we should be carfeul avout hwat we leave on this plaent. A destroyed plant or a planet that give a chance to the other ggnerations to live.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:50:50 -0500

I like the facke that he says that all of us from this earth. the core of the race issues is not the real issues. we sshould put all of htese arguemnnts aiside and work toward out coomon goal which to save that plant that have been hositplaizing us

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:49:48 -0500

We can't take whatever we have without giving back. this is a very important lesson becasue we should give to earth as we takw from it.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:47:59 -0500

I like that how he care about the next generation and how he have that much confiddnce in his vision.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:46:19 -0500

the way we are living will bring this world to an end. We should care about envromwnt becasue this is our duty.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:31:36 -0500

Animlas share this planent wiht us and we should give them their fair share of this planet. Instead of pushing them to extinct.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:30:19 -0500

Climate change is threating our extience and we should work together to fight that for the common good.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:29:14 -0500

this kid was raised with much awarnnes that make him respect enviroment.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:28:00 -0500

this is so inpiring. It shows that is not aobut age. it's about you bleive in yourself or not.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:21:17 -0500

Blair Imani is an exmple of an youth activist that care about the queer, a minority grouup. She belives that everyone should has the full right as any humans. Your sexual orientaion shouldn't be a problem at all.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:18:31 -0500

we should be proud of who we are inlcding differnces. It's ok to be different. It's ok to be unique. Everyone born unique and we should take the effrots to make the uniqunees in us stand out.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:15:50 -0500

Balir imani is an inspiring example for queer muslims. She helped othet queer to conffes who they are ...she proves to the world that you are not alone. there are a lot of queer people and it's ok to be different.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:14:22 -0500

people most likely to agree with new things and they tend to refuse it

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:10:27 -0500

People refuse to accnkweldge extience becaseu they are different.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:08:23 -0500

People refuse your extience becasue they think that your brlifes doen't allow that.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:07:35 -0500

we live in a sick society that judge you based on the way you look

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 21:06:51 -0500

organized cmpings are the key of sccuses to deliver your message

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:57:40 -0500

Strenght and confidccne are the only suppourt throughu struggle.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:56:16 -0500

Gangs should be detterred becasue innocent people who grow up in gangs area can't do anyhting about this.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:55:38 -0500

it shows his strrugel and his persistence.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:54:31 -0500

he uses his creativity to deliver his messages. This shows creativity is the key for every change.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:51:05 -0500

Youth are the backbone of the country and that's why everyone should beleive in them and thier dreams

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:50:05 -0500

His peers see the sense of the leadership in his personlaity. This shows his tremendous affects on his peers.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:49:00 -0500

This is person is conderete because he cares about other and want to make differnce in his own commuinty and end the bitter suffering of his people.

Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:47:48 -0500

I think what created the problem is that when she got en educaiton, it changed the way she perecives world and that what created the differecne, but not because she left her home town.

Sun, 02 Feb 2020 20:08:26 -0500

I think that they were allowed to receive education but it was hard for them to get it

Sun, 02 Feb 2020 20:07:26 -0500

I do agree with this too. But I think you should elobrate on that more throughuout your essay.

Sun, 02 Feb 2020 20:06:47 -0500

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Sun, 02 Feb 2020 20:05:18 -0500

The story “How to date a brown ,white, black and halfie girl” is similar with the stories “The lesson ” and “Everyday use ” because they are all narrated from people who are under represented but ““How to date a brown ,white, black and halfie girl” is addressing a problem with social class and race insecurities and the author didn’t end the story with a resolution instead he is teaching us how to hide these insecurities and to be ashamed of who we are.

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Sun, 02 Feb 2020 20:04:30 -0500

The issues that the United States has to be addressed and everybody has to speak up .

I agree with this. I also mentioned that in my essay.

Sun, 02 Feb 2020 20:03:16 -0500

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Thu, 30 Jan 2020 15:23:18 -0500

The theme for “Everyday Use ” and “The lesson” are conveying how important education is . While “Everyday Use ” is proposing an argument about the significance of “Heritage ” vs The significance of “education” .

I think that racial inequality and discrmnation in the is really a big problem and it make everyone baised. Once everyone beelive that we are all the same, no one will be feel isolated or rejected.

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:21:21 -0500

this sentnce show how every group profile the other and divide people into their own group. It seem everyone forgot that we are the same and skin color don't matter at all.

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:18:42 -0500

the boy should know that not everyone will accept him. In fact, a lot of poeple will not accept him because he is not like the majority.

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:17:01 -0500

this setnece shows how some people have no idea about the minority groups and it shows the biases

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:15:02 -0500

The boy's neighhood is very dengerous but you should do what you can do to make everything seem ok

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:12:27 -0500

you don't need to pretedn to fit in in your own world because it's your world. You are already part of it.

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:10:36 -0500

You should pretend that you are similiar to the majority of peopl, so you can be easily accepted in that world.

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:08:24 -0500

The boy neighhood is slum and too much crowded.

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:06:52 -0500

You should continue to pretend. The reason rely behind that is most people will not accept you if you live in a bad nieghrhood.

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:06:09 -0500

I believe you should always be presentable not only when you are going on a date. I mean hygyine is something that for yourself not for other people.

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:05:09 -0500

This is paragraph shows that you have to pretend in oreder to fit in, which is the sad the truth of the world that we live in today.

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:04:03 -0500

The boy is from a lowwer calss and it seem that he is not happy about that.

Wed, 29 Jan 2020 00:03:03 -0500

I think this is was the lesson that Miss Moore trying to teach they teenagers and why they should pursure a higher education so they can acheive a social mobility.

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:44:12 -0500

The teeenagers started to question the differences that racial inequality casue in the U.S. and how is life style is can be very differernt based on how much momney you have.

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:42:04 -0500

The teenagers know within themselves that they are rejected in any world execpt their own world. This is evident by the feeling that had when Miss Moore told them to enter the toy sotre and they were very hesitant to enter it.

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:38:43 -0500

At the point the teenagers realize that this world is not for them becasue of money.

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:34:04 -0500

The teenagers are close-minded that they don't even believe that the sailboat is expensive because of the materials is made of.

Tue, 20 Sep 2022 13:22:02 -0400

This shows that poor public education that the fat boy is getting into his school.

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:29:27 -0500

Miss Moore seems highly educated and well-informed.

Thu, 22 Sep 2022 13:10:52 -0400

The teengers don't want to be exposed to any new wolrd and theink thay moore is saying useless things, but, in fact, she is trying to guide them.

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:26:13 -0500

The teenagers misbehave because they were raised to take life as a joke and that shows the poor education they received from their parents.

Thu, 22 Sep 2022 13:09:33 -0400

Moore is aware of the racial inequality in the U.S.

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:19:05 -0500

Moore is trying to guide the teenagers and she think it's her abligation to do that

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:17:40 -0500

The teenagers show a lot of agression toward ms Moree neither they care about education or pursuin a higher education

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:16:11 -0500

Slum area

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:13:01 -0500

This is shows that the teenager were living in a slum area aroound toxic people

Miss Moore wasn't a goo person

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 23:09:18 -0500

The teenagers think that she is not a good person and she always pretend

Teenager spirit

Thu, 13 Jul 2023 23:28:04 -0400

Teenagers always think that they are right and they have the world in their hand.

OMG

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 15:34:14 -0500

After "even money...."just check it

For God Sake

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 15:30:41 -0500

What is that sentence mean?

Thoughuts

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 15:29:24 -0500

I think you shouldn't say what literally element is.....just talk about it and the reader will understand

Need to add more

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 15:23:16 -0500

I think you should expand concluoiion more

Quotation

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 15:22:33 -0500

Maybe you should quote the name of each sory you tlak about

what do you mean by that time?

Sun, 02 Feb 2020 20:41:26 -0500

I think you need to clarify that more

Repeated

Tue, 28 Jan 2020 15:20:06 -0500

I think you repeated that before.

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Thu, 30 Jan 2020 15:03:02 -0500

one of the character in each story has lack of knowledge about the world.

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Tue, 28 Jan 2020 15:15:44 -0500

One of the characters from in story is illiterate.

Flyboy thinks that the fiberglass sailboat is useless.

Mon, 06 Jan 2020 13:57:35 -0500

He think that the price of the fiberglass is expensive and not worthy. Also, he can make ine by him slef, but he doesn't want to acknoweldge that the one he make can't sail. He can't belive the differences between the "two world", so he try to convience himself that both of these world are same.

They encounter a "new world"

Mon, 06 Jan 2020 13:52:00 -0500

They couldn't believe the price of the sailboat and that shows that 5th Avenue was another world for them.This reinforces the racial inequality in the U.S.

Miss more refuse the reality of these little kids.

Mon, 06 Jan 2020 13:47:34 -0500

She knows that these kids don't have any of these things she is talking about, but she still pretends she doesn't know, maybe, because she doesn't want to admit the reality of the racial disparity in U.S.

Flyboy thinks that everything is simple to know.

Mon, 06 Jan 2020 13:44:21 -0500

Flyboy is not aware of the world around him because of the environment he grew up in. He thinks he, maybe, knows everything or he doesn't want to know anything because he thinks that the "world" is his neighborhood.

Teenager Boys and the new world

Thu, 12 Dec 2019 15:02:27 -0500

The group of the teenagers was exposed to a "new world", a world where they have no idea about its texture and appearance. They were kind of sedated in their neighborhood.They felt that they don't belong there and their sense of humor was the only way to resist their reyality.

this is the point where they were confronting a different environment. It seems that they totally denounce it.

Tue, 10 Dec 2019 15:34:28 -0500

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Tue, 03 Dec 2019 20:44:23 -0500

After we were done with lunch. Dee started to take a picture with us in every corner in the house, making sure that every picture she took include the house in the background. Dee asked Mom for the quilt that her ancestors made to give it to her, but Mom refused and said, “this quilt is for your sister Maggie.”

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Tue, 03 Dec 2019 11:41:50 -0500

My mom never faired with me as she was doing with Dee. She was getting everything according to her just because of her lighter skin compared to me. My soft and kind personality makes me feels regret that I am quiet. Instead fighting for my rights. Life is not easy as we predict. We all need to put effort to gain things that we desire for. Yeah, I agree that I am not stylist and even see myself less than white people, however, I never wished wrong or bad for my sister. Even though, I used to feel jealous, because she was getting everything which I am deprived from it.

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Tue, 03 Dec 2019 11:44:03 -0500

Sometimes I ask myself what I got from my life and family. It's nothing expect all the apathy.

Maggie staying home carrying out the hertiage. What does this mean? This is sentence can't be real. :(

Tue, 26 Nov 2019 16:51:38 -0500

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Tue, 03 Dec 2019 11:42:58 -0500

One day me and my sister was playing in the backyard, while my mom was in the kitchen preparing food for us. We all ate together and had a wonderful family gathering. After we were done our eating, my mom helped my sister to get ready to school. I went to the kitchen to pick some food. My mom left the gas open and because of the wind, a piece of paper dropped into the gas stove fire and constantly it spreads all over the house. I was scared and screaming by saying “Help! Help!” . The flame was surrounding me and I did not know what to do. I lost half of my conscious by facing and see myself in unexpected and horrible situation. My mom came to rescue me, however it was too late. Some of my body parts already burned. My whole life ruined because of this accident. I could not believe that my sister who I love and respect most, she did not try to rescue me or even showing empathy toward me. This is the moment when I realized she doesn't like me because her action implies how self-centered person she is, who puts herself first than others.

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Mon, 02 Dec 2019 19:38:05 -0500

The yard of my house is so beautiful. It makes me feel that I am sitting in my living room and relaxing. This is where I think about everything that was going on my impoverished life. Living a poor life is not easy. You have to put double efforts to pursue something just because you belongs to a lower class family. Being partially educated child who does not look as appealing as her older sister and always get neglected from her family and society just because of her lack of confidence and skin scar is really ridiculous.

It's better to delete this paragraph.

Tue, 03 Dec 2019 11:40:01 -0500

The Conclusion.

Mon, 15 Nov 2021 09:12:25 -0500

Dee thinks she is right and her family is wrong. She thinks that she is the real African who preserves culture, maybe, because she is more educated.

The Conclusion.

Thu, 06 May 2021 11:15:48 -0400

Dee thinks she is right and her family is wrong. She thinks that she is the real African who preserves culture, maybe, because she is more educated.

The Conclusion.

Mon, 15 Nov 2021 09:11:51 -0500

Dee thinks she is right and her family is wrong. She thinks that she is the real African who preserves culture, maybe, because she is more educated.

Dee still thinks that her mom and sister don't know what is African is, and they don't appreciate their culture. In fact, she thinks she is the real African who promotes culture and proud of it.

Thu, 06 May 2021 11:15:48 -0400