Most recent public comments by Leah Wagner https://nowcomment.com/users/67831 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1634605 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1634605 Mon, 09 Mar 2020 19:11:56 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1632471 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1632471 Diane was raised in a low-middle class immigrant family from Columbia. She usually go to church in a Catholic service just like most other Columbians. She wanted to be a signer or an actress. As they were living happily, her parents had a major issue. Her parents were immigrants. Besides spending thousands of dollars to become a citizen, weeks, months, and years had passed and never receives any good news on her immigrant's documentation. They were a fraud. On a random day, police came and arrested her mother and sent her to jail then deported her. I wonder how it felt thinking you'll never see your mother again? When the police departed her family everyone in the house was sad, cried, and her father looks like she was not living in the world anymore. Since her parents were undocumented she wanted to help her parents. So she had started to focus more in school, because she wanted to help them gain citizenship. Since mom was absent her father had to work extremely hard. As evidence, her father was working 3 jobs and long hours to help Diane with her situation. This reminds me of my cousin because he was deported back to Haiti after 20 years in the United States. I was too young to know if he was trying to get citizenship but the family was sad when it all happened. Sun, 08 Mar 2020 12:55:33 -0400 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1632437 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1632437 Hi Jennifer, This is a great personal text-to-self connection to the story and I'm glad there are outlets in your life to help with those more difficult moments. For future weeks, double check the polish on some of the grammar and conventions. For example, "She graduated from 8th grade and audition for art school" should have been auditioned so both are past tense. These minor tweaks that will make your writing stronger. Thank you for being so open about your connection to this text! Fri, 06 Mar 2020 09:33:48 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631179 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631179 The significant events that happen in these plages were Diane's mother and brother getting deported. Her mother was deported two times which after the first Diane's response changed. Diane's original response was panicked when she came to find her mother gone when she came back from school. The second time she wasn't that surprised or panicked. When Eric got deported due to legal trough, the family was sad at first but got used to it. The whole time this was going on, the family was dealing with the father fighting with the son working long hours while being scammed by fraudulent lawyers. Diane went from being okay to depressed then going into puberty causing even more problems for Diane, but these are events that all fit the coming of age criteria of a character learning to grow and deal with problems on their own. "In the Country We Love" reminds me of the book "Flipped", but "Flipped" focuses on two people and how they grow close then apart and the story is fictional. "Flipped" like "In the Country We Love" revolved around family and the difference between family members and how they feel. I feel "Flipped" is more interesting to read since you have flip the book upside down to read the other main character story and it tricks you into loving than hating the original main character for not respecting someone else's family life/situation and being rude to the girl other than the main character to be taught a lesson by his grandfather, who he hasn't seen in seven years. I prefer "Flipped" over "In the Country We Love" because it felt more down to earth by also put in real life situations without it feeling slow or uninteresting because of the book's unique formatting and sad conclusion. "In the Country We Love" I prefer how it feels more personal and the fact that it's real gives it a few extra points. Sat, 07 Mar 2020 14:18:59 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631027 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631027 Hi Justin, Your connection to another text is very intertwined between the 2 characters and that's wonderfully done! For part one, you have all of the coming of age moments but you didn't say explicitly about how those defend the coming of age genre. For next week, attempt to make those explicit connections so that you're giving great evidence towards a claim. Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:04:50 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631026 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631026 Hi Gaelle, This is a thorough summary of the text's events but the best part was just one sentences at the end where you talked about how Diane used these events. This would've been better suited to start your second paragraph and then spend more time sharing thoughts around that idea because then we'd here more of your analysis of Diane, not just a summary. For full credit next week, try to implement that feedback. Also, great grammar! I appreciate the attention to detail in your writing conventions. Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:02:42 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631025 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631025 Hi Jackie, This is a very thorough analysis and you were able to extend our questions about Diane even further to her father and thus the family "unit" that was left when her mother was gone. I also love the connection to the alternative text. In future weeks, end paragraphs with those connections to how Amal is like Diane just to connect both stories into one synthesized thought. Well done! Wed, 04 Mar 2020 20:00:00 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631024 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631024 Nouradine, You made great connections to Esperenza and that's a book often read in middle school so I'm glad you were able to make those connections. Still passing this week but right when you started the Esperenza introduction, "Diane's story reminds me of..." would have been the right place to formally start a second paragraph. Wed, 04 Mar 2020 19:57:11 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631023 https://nowcomment.com/documents/172179?scroll_to=1631023 Hi Ferdinand, You have a great & seamless incorporation of small quotes here which is great. Next week, try to add page numbers in parenthesis such as (p. 44). Did this part of the story remind you of anything else you have read? Wed, 04 Mar 2020 19:55:35 -0500 https://nowcomment.com/documents/171422?scroll_to=1628596 https://nowcomment.com/documents/171422?scroll_to=1628596 Sun, 01 Mar 2020 18:34:00 -0500