Comments by Jingyu Shang Most recent public comments by Jingyu Shang https://nowcomment.com/users/80272 The whole article is very good. I'm sure you could have written a clearer ending, repeating the argument. My situation is very similar to yours, and I believe we can both get through this difficulty. https://nowcomment.com/documents/204024?scroll_to=1900129 https://nowcomment.com/documents/204024?scroll_to=1900129 Sat, 30 May 2020 12:48:11 -0400 Many of my friends back home have also experienced this series of difficulties. Isolation is difficult for us, but it can always be overcome. It is difficult to have classes in different time zones because you often have to stay up late. https://nowcomment.com/documents/204024?scroll_to=1900095 https://nowcomment.com/documents/204024?scroll_to=1900095 Sat, 30 May 2020 12:47:06 -0400 The beginning is very clear about the passage and the background of your story, but I think the last sentence of the first paragraph should have a clearer argument. https://nowcomment.com/documents/204024?scroll_to=1900072 https://nowcomment.com/documents/204024?scroll_to=1900072 Sat, 30 May 2020 12:45:47 -0400 The article is well-organized. You tell your story at first, then you tell your three ideas, which are very clear points. The first and second thing you learned is never give up and teamwork. The most important thing is maturity. https://nowcomment.com/documents/203506?scroll_to=1894878 https://nowcomment.com/documents/203506?scroll_to=1894878 Fri, 22 May 2020 22:09:23 -0400 Shang https://nowcomment.com/documents/203506?scroll_to=1894861 https://nowcomment.com/documents/203506?scroll_to=1894861 This paragraph is a turning point in your story, which describes a frustration in your experience in soccer. My parents didn't allow me to play soccer when I was in junior high school, because they think playing soccer will make me distracted on study. Unfortunately, I didn't succeed in unlearning my parents' ideas. However, this did not diminish my passion for soccer and I continued to play. I admire your courage and persistence in correcting your grandfather's ideas. I think that's the point of this article, so you can give a little more detail about the whole story of unlearning grandfather and your ideas. Sun, 24 May 2020 01:49:56 -0400