Maggie's Perspectives
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| When | Why |
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| Dec-02-19 | Wording change |
| Dec-03-19 | Wording change |
| Dec-03-19 | Why do you mean by saying I am less than white people? It's not true. All human are equal. |
| Dec-03-19 | Wording change |
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Paragraph 1 changes
I’m going to rewrite “ Everyday Use” as A Short Story, from the point of view and narrative voice of Maggie , and omitting Dee and Mama fantasy and wishes. Including Maggie feeling about her self and life and the relationship between Maggie and Dee, who is her sister.Introduction not needed.
Introduction not needed.
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I’m going to rewrite “ Everyday Use” as A Short Story, from the point of view and narrative voice of Maggie , and omitting Dee and Mama fantasy and wishes. Including Maggie feeling about her self and life and the relationship between Maggie and Dee, who is her sister.Introduction not needed.
Paragraph 2 changes
The yard of my house is so beautiful. It makes me feel that I am sitting in my living room and relaxing. This is where I think about everything that was going on my impoverished life. Live Living a poor life , it’s is not an easy.It makes harder your life if you dont shows courage to pursue something, You have to put double efforts to pursue something just because you are belongs to lower class family.Be a family where has a inquality. It's rediculous that I was a partially educated child who does not did look as appealing as her older sister and was always get neglected from by her family and society just because of her my lack of confidence and skin scar, it scars. It is really ridiculous.mournful for me. My gloomy outlook and shuffles took all the opportunity that I coveted for.
The yard of my house is so beautiful.
It makes me feel that I am sitting in my living room and relaxing.
This is where I think about everything that was going on my life.
Living a poor life is not easy.
You have to put double efforts to pursue something just because you belongs to a family where has a inquality.
It's rediculous that I was a partially educated child who did look as appealing as her older sister and was always neglected by her family and society just because of my lack of confidence and skin scars.
It is really mournful for me.
My gloomy outlook and shuffles took all the opportunity that I coveted for.
The yard of my house is so beautiful. It makes me feel that I am sitting in my living room and relaxing. This is where I think about everything that was going on my impoverished life. Live Living a poor life , it’s is not an easy.It makes harder your life if you dont shows courage to pursue something, You have to put double efforts to pursue something just because you are belongs to a lower class family. Be a Being partially educated child who does not look as appealing as her older sister and always get neglected from her family and society just because of her lack of confidence and skin scar , it is really ridiculous.
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
Being It's rediculous that I was a partially educated child who does not did look as appealing as her older sister and was always get neglected from by her family and society just because of her my lack of confidence and skin scar scars It is really ridiculous.
Paragraph 3 changes
One day me and my sister were was playing in the backyard and , while my mom was in the kitchen making preparing food for us. We all ate together and had a wonderful family gathering. After we were done our eating, my mom helped my sister to drop her in the school while I was at home with my aunt .By chance, my get ready to school. I went to the kitchen to pick some food. My mom left the gas open and because of the wind, a piece of paper dropped into the gas stove fire and quickly constantly it spread spreads all over the house. I was scared and screaming by saying “Help! Help!” . The flame was surrounding me and I did not know what to do. I lost consciousness by seeing half of my conscious by facing and see myself in this unexpected and horrible situation. My mom came to rescue me, but however it was too late.Some Some of my body parts were already burned. My whole life was ruined because of this accident. I could not believe that my sister , who I love and respect most, she did not find a way try to help rescue me out or show concern even showing empathy toward me. This is the moment when I realized , she doesn't like me because her action implies how self-centered person she is, who puts herself first than others.
One day me and my sister was playing in the backyard, while my mom was in the kitchen preparing food for us.
We all ate together and had a wonderful family gathering.
After we were done our eating, my mom helped my sister to get ready to school.
I went to the kitchen to pick some food.
My mom left the gas open and because of the wind, a piece of paper dropped into the gas stove fire and constantly it spreads all over the house.
I was scared and screaming by saying “Help!
Help!”
.
The flame was surrounding me and I did not know what to do.
I lost half of my conscious by facing and see myself in unexpected and horrible situation.
My mom came to rescue me, however it was too late.
Some of my body parts already burned.
My whole life ruined because of this accident.
I could not believe that my sister who I love and respect most, she did not try to rescue me or even showing empathy toward me.
This is the moment when I realized she doesn't like me because her action implies how self-centered person she is, who puts herself first than others.
One day me and my sister was playing in the backyard where , while my mom was in the kitchen making preparing food for us. We all ate together and had a wonderful family gathering. After we were done our eating, my mom helped my sister to drop her in the school while I was at home with my aunt .By chance, my get ready to school. I went to the kitchen to pick some food. My mom left the gas open and because of the wind, a piece of paper dropped into the gas stove fire and constantly it spreads all over the house. I was scared and screaming by saying “Help! Help!” . The flame was surrounding me and I did not know what to do. I lost half of my conscious by facing and see myself in unexpected and horrible situation. My mom came to rescue me, however it was too late.Because some Some of my body parts already burned. My whole life ruined because of this accident. I could not believe that my sister who I love and respect most, she did not find a way try to help rescue me out or showed concerns even showing empathy toward me. This is the moment when I realized , she doesn't like me because her action implies how self-centered person she is, who puts herself first than others.
Paragraph 4 changes
My moms broke her back saving money for Dee to go to college, and I was staying home, carrying out the heritage.
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My moms break broke her back for saving money for Dee to go to college where , and I was staying home by , carrying out the heritage.
Paragraph 5 changes
Sometimes I ask myself what I got from my life and family.
It's nothing expect all the apathy.
Nothing,” Except all the apathy.
Sometimes I question ask myself asking, “What what I got from my life and family, Nothing” , . It's nothing expect all the apathy.
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Sometimes I question myself asking, “What did I got from my life and family, Nothing” , expect ? Nothing,” Except all the apathy.
Paragraph 6 changes
My mom never treated faired with me the way she treated as she was doing with Dee. She was getting everything , according to her , just because of her lighter skin , compared to me. My soft and kind personality making makes me feels regret that I should not be quiet, instead of am quiet. Instead fighting for my rights. Life is not easy as we predict. We all need to put effort to gain things that we desire for. Yeah, I agree that I am not stylist and even see myself less than white people, however, I never wished aspirated wrong or bad for my sister. Even though, I used to feel jealous, because she was getting everything which I am deprived from it.
feels
stylist
My mom never faired with me as she was doing with Dee.
She was getting everything according to her just because of her lighter skin compared to me.
My soft and kind personality makes me
regret that I am quiet.
Instead fighting for my rights.
Life is not easy as we predict.
We all need to put effort to gain things that we desire for.
Yeah, I agree that I am not
and even see myself less than white people, however, I never aspirated wrong or bad for my sister.
Even though, I used to feel jealous, because she was getting everything which I am deprived from it.
My mom never faired with me as she was doing with Dee. she She was getting everything according to her just because of her lighter skin compared to me. My soft and kind personality making makes me
Reason: Why do you mean by saying I am less than white people? It's not true. All human are equal.
The scar of my body demotivated me to introduce myself to the world where my sister brought change herself by embracing the modern life and also changed herself. However, I look for something better by enhancing my self and confidence level
My sister and mom never understood me, either helped me to come out from my comfort zone. Even Though, I did not get any justice, however, I will bring justice for me by keeping myself on top of everything. I would give a value my heritage, but not more than myself. I should not keep myself behind from everything and prisoned me the house. Its makes me feels suffocated and criminal. Earlier or later, one day i have to face the reality. Therefore, from right now. I know, I can not erase the scars of my body but I can make my life better by not hiding me on the corner of my room and backyard. During that time, there were slavery. White being so abusive and violent towards balck people. The scare of the wound still appear in balck people body. These people move forward in their life with their painful past and unfairness. Therefore, why I should not learns from it. I entitled to possess my sister's life. Eventually, I changed myself and overcome all the obstacles. I become more confident as I realized that I have some qualities that my sister does not share. I also able to develop a deeper relationship with my mother.
Added December 02, 2019 at 7:38pm
by Yeanoor Chowdhury
(suggested by El-Hassn Salem)
Title: Wording change
The text below is the previous wording for paragraph 2 (click to return there).
The yard of my house is so beautiful. It makes me feel that I am sitting in my living room and relaxing. This is where I think about everything that was going on my impoverished life. Live a poor life, it’s not an easy. It makes harder your life if you dont shows courage to pursue something, just because you are belongs to lower class family. Be a partially educated child who does not look as appealing as her older sister and always get neglected from her family and society just because of her lack of confidence and skin scar, it is really ridiculous.
Added December 03, 2019 at 11:40am
by Yeanoor Chowdhury
(suggested by Paul Allison)
Title: Wording change
The text below is the previous wording for paragraph 1 (click to return there).
I’m going to rewrite “ Everyday Use” as A Short Story, from the point of view and narrative voice of Maggie , and omitting Dee and Mama fantasy and wishes. Including Maggie feeling about her self and life and the relationship between Maggie and Dee, who is her sister.
Added December 03, 2019 at 11:41am
by Yeanoor Chowdhury
(suggested by El-Hassn Salem)
Title: Why do you mean by saying I am less than white people? It's not true. All human are equal.
The text below is the previous wording for paragraph 6 (click to return there).
Paragraph 13 changes
My mom never treated me the way she treated Dee.
She was getting everything, according to her, just because of her lighter skin, compared to me.
My soft and kind personality making me feels regret that I should not be quiet, instead of fighting for my rights.
Life is not easy as we predict.
We all need to put effort to gain things that we desire for.
Yeah, I agree that I am not stylist and even see myself less than white people, however, I never wished wrong or bad for my sister.
Even though, I used to feel jealous, because she was getting everything which I am deprived from it.
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
My mom never faired with treated me as she was doing with the way she treated Dee. she She was getting everything, according to her, just because of her lighter skin, compared to me.
Added December 03, 2019 at 11:42am
by Yeanoor Chowdhury
(suggested by El-Hassn Salem)
Title: Wording change
The text below is the previous wording for paragraph 3 (click to return there).
Paragraph 14 changes
One day me and my sister were playing in the backyard and my mom was in the kitchen making food for us.
We all ate together and had a wonderful family gathering.
After we were done eating, my mom helped my sister to drop her in the school while I was at home with my aunt .By chance, my mom left the gas open and because of the wind, a piece of paper dropped into the gas stove fire and quickly it spread all over the house.
I was scared and screaming by saying “Help!
Help!”
.
The flame was surrounding me and I did not know what to do.
I lost consciousness by seeing myself in this unexpected and horrible situation.
My mom came to rescue me, but it was too late.
Some of my body parts were already burned.
My whole life was ruined because of this accident.
I could not believe that my sister, who I love and respect most, did not find a way to help me out or show concern toward me.
This is the moment when I realized, she doesn't like me because her action implies how self-centered person she is, who puts herself first than others.
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
One day me and my sister was were playing in the backyard where and my mom was in the kitchen making food for us.
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
After we were done our eating, my mom helped my sister to drop her in the school while I was at home with my aunt .By chance, my mom left the gas open and because of the wind, a piece of paper dropped into the gas stove fire and constantly quickly it spreads spread all over the house.
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
I lost half of my conscious by facing and see consciousness by seeing myself in this unexpected and horrible situation.
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
I’m the Tech Liaison for the New York City Writing Project. I… (more)
I could not believe that my sister, who I love and respect most, she did not find a way to help me out or showed concerns show concern toward me.
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