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Sisterhood is not alway the cheerful moment. Having a lighter skin and education especially for girls in 1920’s in black community does not bettedhelp. It will be confusing that you will not know where you belong, white or black. My sister Maggie after she was burned with in our old house she has never been the same. She start to blasted to blame everyone. That does not mean I would do the same to make her happy. She was the most closed to Mama. But I understand how she feels about me. Usually mothers support more their kid who are not favored that mean who don't have confidence of themselves. She thought that I’m the one who takes all opportunities she should have, like education, and the physical appearancepopularity.After my mama and the church raised money for my college and I went to college I realized that my mama family does not have money.

Sisterhood is not alway the cheerful moment. Having a lighter skin and education especially for girls in 1920’s in black community does not help. It will be confusing that you will not know where you belong, white or black. My sister Maggie after she was burned in our old house she has never been the same. She start to blame everyone. That does not mean I would do the same to make her happy. She was most closed to Mama. But I understand how she feels about me. Usually mothers support more their kid who are not favored that mean who don't have confidence of themselves. She thought that I’m the one who takes all opportunities she should have, like education, and popularity. After my mama and the church raised money for my college and I went to college I realized that my family does not have money.

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Having a lighter skin and education especially for girls in 1920’s in black community does not bettedhelp.

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She start to blasted blame everyone.

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Usually Mothers mothers support more their kid who are not favored that mean who don't have confidence of themselves.

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She thought that I’m the one who takes all opportunities she should have, like education, and popularity. After my mama and the church raised money for my college and I went to college I realized that my family does not have money.

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Maggie is my sister and nothing will not change that. When I decided to present Hakim to my family my mama did not like him and she started making fun of him. As long I known her she , she always take takes my sister's side and both of them are really locked. She considered my sister more. I will love to have the same relationship with her. But I have no idea how it will started. I guess I supposed to behaved or be the same as my sister. Obviously It will not going to happen because I will not change my personality for nothing. I want to be love how I am and for who I am. She will have to accepted me as I am. She though that I hate Maggie but she is wrong even I like nice things or have knowledge that did not mean I’m a bad person or I hate my sister. The thing my Mama and Maggie did not understands we are a family and this will not change.

Maggie is my sister and nothing will change that. When I decided to present Hakim to my family mama did not like him and she started making fun of him. As long I known her, she always takes my sister's side and both of them are really locked. She considered my sister more. I will love to have the same relationship with her. But I have no idea how it will started. I guess I supposed to behaved or be the same as my sister. Obviously It will not going to happen because I will not change my personality. I want to be love how I am and for who I am. She will have to accepted me as I am. She though that I hate Maggie but she is wrong even I like nice things or have knowledge that did not mean I’m a bad person or I hate my sister. The thing my Mama and Maggie did not understands we are a family and this will not change.

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Maggie is my sister and nothing will change that. When I decided to present Hakim to my family mama did not like him and she started making fun of him. As long I known her.She always take , she always takes my sister's side and both of them are really locked, she . She considered my sister more. I will love to have the same relationship with her. But I have no idea how it will started. I guess I supposed to behaved or be the same as my sister. Obviously It will not going to happen because I will not change my personality. I want to be love how I am and for who I am. She will have to accepted me as I am. She though that I hate Maggie but she is wrong even I like nice things or have knowledge that did not mean I’m a bad person or I hate my sister. The thing my Mama and Maggie did not understands we are a family and this will not change.

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Added November 26, 2019 at 3:32pm by Fatoumata Diallo
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Sisterhood is not alway the cheerful moment. Having a lighter skin and education especially for girls in 1920’s in black community does not betted. It will be confusing that you will not know where you belong, white or black. My sister Maggie after she was burned with in our old house she has never been the same. She start to blasted to everyone. That does not mean I would do the same to make her happy. She was the most closed to Mama. But I understand how she feels about me. She thought that I’m the one who takes all she should have, education, and the physical appearance. After my mama and the church raised money for my college and I went to college I realized that my mama does not have money.

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Housseynatou Diallo Housseynatou Diallo (Nov 29 2019 4:51AM) : Can you tell me more about why she changed and how did that affect her relationship with her sister.
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Fatoumata Diallo Fatoumata Diallo (Dec 03 2019 5:46PM) : This affect her relationship with her sister because Maggie think she think her sister is beautiful than after she get burned.
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Housseynatou Diallo Housseynatou Diallo (Nov 29 2019 5:00AM) : I know you hate this kind of comment but can you tell me more about this?
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Fatoumata Diallo Fatoumata Diallo (Dec 03 2019 5:48PM) : I mean to behaved like her and be timid.
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Added November 26, 2019 at 3:35pm by Fatoumata Diallo
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Maggie is my sister and nothing will not change that. When I decided to present Hakim to my family my mama did not like him and she started making fun of him. As long I known her she always take my sister side and both of them are really locked. I will love to have the same relationship with her. But I have no idea how it will started. I guess I supposed to behaved or be the same as my sister. Obviously It will not going to happen because I will not change my personality for nothing. She will have to accepted me as I am. She though that I hate Maggie but she is wrong even I like nice things or have knowledge that did not mean I’m a bad person or I hate my sister. The thing my Mama and Maggie did not understands we are a family and this will not change.

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Added December 03, 2019 at 2:25pm by Fatoumata Diallo
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Sisterhood is not alway the cheerful moment. Having a lighter skin and education especially for girls in 1920’s in black community does not betted. It will be confusing that you will not know where you belong, white or black. My sister Maggie after she was burned with in our old house she has never been the same. She start to blasted to everyone. That does not mean I would do the same to make her happy. She was the most closed to Mama. But I understand how she feels about me. She thought that I’m the one who takes all opportunities she should have, education, and the physical appearance.popularity After my mama and the church raised money for my college and I went to college I realized that my mama family does not have money.

Sisterhood is not alway the cheerful moment. Having a lighter skin and education especially for girls in 1920’s in black community does not betted. It will be confusing that you will not know where you belong, white or black. My sister Maggie after she was burned with in our old house she has never been the same. She start to blasted everyone. That does not mean I would do the same to make her happy. She was most closed to Mama. But I understand how she feels about me. She thought that I’m the one who takes all opportunities she should have, education, and popularity After my mama and the church raised money for my college and I went to college I realized that my family does not have money.

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Housseynatou Diallo Housseynatou Diallo (Nov 29 2019 3:24AM) : You should be saying here that in a Black community.
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Fatema Rahman Fatema Rahman (Dec 02 2019 2:10AM) : How did she change? what affect she got from the house burned ?
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Fatema Rahman Fatema Rahman (Dec 02 2019 2:13AM) : By this sentence do you mean that between two sister didn't have good relationship?
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Added December 03, 2019 at 2:51pm by Fatoumata Diallo
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Sisterhood is not alway the cheerful moment. Having a lighter skin and education especially for girls in 1920’s in black community does not betted. It will be confusing that you will not know where you belong, white or black. My sister Maggie after she was burned with in our old house she has never been the same. She start to blasted to everyone. That does not mean I would do the same to make her happy. She was the most closed to Mama. But I understand how she feels about me. She thought that I’m the one who takes all opportunities she should have, education, and the physical appearance.popularity After my mama and the church raised money for my college and I went to college I realized that my mama family does not have money.

Sisterhood is not alway the cheerful moment. Having a lighter skin and education especially for girls in 1920’s in black community does not betted. It will be confusing that you will not know where you belong, white or black. My sister Maggie after she was burned in our old house she has never been the same. She start to blasted everyone. That does not mean I would do the same to make her happy. She was most closed to Mama. But I understand how she feels about me. She thought that I’m the one who takes all opportunities she should have, education, and popularity After my mama and the church raised money for my college and I went to college I realized that my family does not have money.

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Added December 03, 2019 at 3:02pm by Fatoumata Diallo (suggested by Paul Allison)
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Maggie is my sister and nothing will not change that. When I decided to present Hakim to my family my mama did not like him and she started making fun of him. As long I known her she . She always take my sister side and both of them are really locked, she considered my sister more. I will love to have the same relationship with her. But I have no idea how it will started. I guess I'm supposed to behaved behave or be the same as my sister.Obviously It will not going to happen because I will not change my personality for nothing. I want to be love how I am and for who I am. She will have to accepted me as I am. She though thought that I hate hated Maggie, but she is wrong even . Even thourh I like nice things or have knowledge, that did not mean I’m a bad person or that I hate my sister. The thing my Mama and Maggie did not understands understand is that we are a family and this will not change.

Maggie is my sister and nothing will change that. When I decided to present Hakim to my family mama did not like him and she started making fun of him. As long I known her. She always take my sister side and both of them are really locked, she considered my sister more. I will love to have the same relationship with her. But I have no idea how it will started. I guess I'm supposed to behave or be the same as my sister. Obviously It will not going to happen because I will not change my personality. I want to be love how I am and for who I am. She will have to accepted me as I am. She thought that I hated Maggie, but she is wrong. Even thourh I like nice things or have knowledge, that did not mean I’m a bad person or that I hate my sister. The thing my Mama and Maggie did not understand is that we are a family and this will not change.

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Fatema Rahman Fatema Rahman (Dec 02 2019 2:17AM) : Did you change her boyfriend name to Hakim?
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Fatoumata Diallo Fatoumata Diallo (Dec 03 2019 9:23PM) : yes
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Fatema Rahman Fatema Rahman (Dec 02 2019 2:19AM) : Do you mean mama do not love Dee as like Maggie?
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Fatoumata Diallo Fatoumata Diallo (Dec 03 2019 9:22PM) : No but she considered Maggie more
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Fatema Rahman Fatema Rahman (Dec 02 2019 2:20AM) : Why Dee does not have good relationship with mama? as like mama and Maggie. [Edited]
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Fatoumata Diallo Fatoumata Diallo (Dec 03 2019 5:59PM) : Because Maggie was burned I think this why her mother is more closed than her. Mothers usually support more who are not favored.
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I guess I'm supposed to behaved behave or be the same as my sister.

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Fatema Rahman Fatema Rahman (Dec 02 2019 2:28AM) : Why Dee's personality is different than mama and maggie? more

by this line you mean that Dee want to get close to mama and she behave with mama as like her sister does. at the same time you said, why Dee should change her personality for nothing.

CAN YOU CLARIFY THIS SENTENCE FOR ME?

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Fatoumata Diallo Fatoumata Diallo (Dec 03 2019 5:43PM) : yes because Maggie is shine. [Edited]
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She though thought that I hate hated Maggie, but she is wrong even . Even thourh I like nice things or have knowledge, that did not mean I’m a bad person or that I hate my sister.

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The thing my Mama and Maggie did not understands understand is that we are a family and this will not change.

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