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Mom Obligation - By Emely Lopez

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I am a single Black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing , doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me. I wish to be recompense recompensed for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear.

One of the most traumatic situations occured occur to Maggie. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes. This heartbreak event makes her be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance in society. She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands. The man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of house duty and taking care of the children. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes. This heartbreak event makes , this heartbreak event make her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on society .She so she prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husband.The husbands, the man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house house’s duty and taking care of the children.

Dee is totally different she wanted nice things, a yellow organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own: and knew what style was. She is more open mind she wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciate the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now because

I only had the opportunity to be slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Where only Maggie know the significant of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive.

Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life.

After all, I am going to be proud I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country creating equality.

I am a single Black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me. I wish to be recompensed for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear.

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I am a singer black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me. I wish to be recompense for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear.

One of the most traumatic situations occur to Maggie, sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes, this heartbreak event make her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on society so she prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands, the man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s duty and taking care of the children.

Dee is totally different she wanted nice things, a yellow organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own: and knew what style was. She is more open mind she wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciate the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now because

I only had the opportunity to be slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Where only Maggie know the significant of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive.

Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life.

After all, I am going to be proud I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country creating equality.

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One of the most traumatic situations occur occured to Maggie. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes, this . This heartbreak event make makes her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on in society so she . She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands, the . The man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s duty and taking care of the children.

One of the most traumatic situations occured to Maggie. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes. This heartbreak event makes her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance in society. She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands. The man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s duty and taking care of the children.

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Dee is totally different she wanted nice things like, a yellow, organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own -and knew what style was. She is more open mind she opened. She wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciate appreciating the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now.

Dee is totally different she wanted nice things like, a yellow, organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own -and knew what style was. She is more opened. She wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciating the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now.

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I only had the opportunity to be slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Where only Maggie know the significant of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive.

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Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life.

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After all, I am going to be proud I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country creating equality.

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One of the most traumatic situations occur to Maggie, sometimes . Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes, this . This heartbreak event make makes her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on in society so she . She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands, the . Tthe man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s house duty and taking care of the children.

One of the most traumatic situations occur to Maggie. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes. This heartbreak event makes her be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance in society. She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands. Tthe man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house duty and taking care of the children.

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Dee is totally different she wanted nice things, a yellow organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own: and knew what style was. She is more open mind she wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciate the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now.

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I only had the opportunity to be a slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Where only Only Maggie know knows the significant significance of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive.

I only had the opportunity to be a slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Only Maggie knows the significance of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive.

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Now, I want to send my two only daughter daughters outside to the society. I know it is going to be painful for Maggie having these because of those scars in her skin, but she as has to be a strong woman who believe believes in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education, there is going to be enough time, so for you had learned to learn the real value of life.

Now, I want to send my two daughters outside to the society. I know it is going to be painful for Maggie because of those scars in her skin, but she has to be a strong woman who believes in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education, there is going to be enough time, for you to learn the real value of life.

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After all, I am going to be proud. I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country, creating equality.

After all, I am going to be proud. I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country, creating equality.

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Added December 04, 2019 at 11:11pm by Emely Lopez
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I am a singer black single Black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing, doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me. I wish to be recompense for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear. One of the most traumatic situations occur occured to Maggie, sometimes . Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes. This heartbreak event makes her be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance in society. She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands. The man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of house duty and taking care of the children. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes, this . This heartbreak event make makes her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on society so she . She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands, the husband. The man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s house duty and taking care of the children. Dee is totally different she wanted nice things, a yellow organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own: and knew what style was. She is more open mind she wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciate the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now because I only had the opportunity to be slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Where only Maggie know the significant of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive. Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life. After all, I am going to be proud I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country creating equality.

I am a single Black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing, doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me. I wish to be recompense for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear. One of the most traumatic situations occured to Maggie. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes. This heartbreak event makes her be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance in society. She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands. The man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of house duty and taking care of the children. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes. This heartbreak event makes her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on society. She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husband. The man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house duty and taking care of the children. Dee is totally different she wanted nice things, a yellow organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own: and knew what style was. She is more open mind she wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciate the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now because I only had the opportunity to be slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Where only Maggie know the significant of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive. Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life. After all, I am going to be proud I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country creating equality.

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I am a singer black single Black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing, doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me.

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Paul Allison (Dec 02 2019 11:35AM) : Wow. That's a lot in one sentence. Do you intend that sort of non-stop, running-out-of breath feeling? If so, keep it, but you might consider breaking some of this up into separate sentences.
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Yeanoor Chowdhury Yeanoor Chowdhury (Dec 03 2019 12:02PM) : This story is great. I really like the way you describes Dee Characters and how she is developed her life by gaining what she desires for. Also you implies the life of African American
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I wish to be recompense recompensed for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear.

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Paul Allison (Dec 02 2019 11:37AM) : Again... such a long sentence. Consider more variety in sentence length.
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One of the most traumatic situations occur occured to Maggie, sometimes . Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes, this . This heartbreak event make makes her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on in society so she . She prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands, the . The man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s house duty and taking care of the children.

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Dee is totally different she wanted nice things, like a yellow, organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school.

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At sixteen she had a style of her own : and knew what style was.

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She is more open mind she -minded. She wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage. But she does this without knowing or appreciate appreciating the origin of her race, how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now because . I only had the opportunity to be a slave who has sold like an object without any value.

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Paul Allison (Dec 02 2019 11:58AM) : Was mama in this story a slave?
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Where only Only Maggie know knows the significant signifcance of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive.

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Now, I want to send my two only daughter daughters outside to the society. I know it is going to be painful for Maggie having these because of those scars in her skin, but she as has to be a strong woman who believe believes in herself more than other people's opinion.

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Dee I know that after finishing your education, there is going to be enough time , so you had learned for you to learn the real value of life.

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After all, I am going to be proud. I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country, creating equality.

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Added December 04, 2019 at 11:15pm by Emely Lopez
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I only had the opportunity to be slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Where only Maggie know the significant of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive.

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Added December 04, 2019 at 11:17pm by Emely Lopez
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Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life.

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Added December 04, 2019 at 11:18pm by Emely Lopez
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I am a singer black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me. I wish to be recompense for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear.

One of the most traumatic situations occur to Maggie, sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes, this heartbreak event make her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on society so she prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands, the man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s duty and taking care of the children.

Dee is totally different she wanted nice things, a yellow organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own: and knew what style was. She is more open mind she wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciate the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now because .

I only had the opportunity to be slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Where only Maggie know the significant of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive.

Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life.

After all, I am going to be proud I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country creating equality.

I am a singer black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me. I wish to be recompense for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear.

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I am a singer black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me. I wish to be recompense for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear. One of the most traumatic situations occur to Maggie, sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes, this heartbreak event make her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on society so she prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands, the man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s duty and taking care of the children. Dee is totally different she wanted nice things, a yellow organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own: and knew what style was. She is more open mind she wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciate the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now because I only had the opportunity to be slave who has sold like an object without any value. I got up early every single day to work in the cotton fields with the sun rays burning my skin. Now I am happy that this torment ended and finally I can enjoy my old and memorable house. Where only Maggie know the significant of all these walls, how our family fought to keep the house alive. Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life. After all, I am going to be proud I believe that one day both of you are going to be a change for the country creating equality.

I am a singer black women who raised my two daughters by hard work as a man on the field all day, breaking ice to get water for washing doing the best so Maggie and Dee can be proud of me. I wish to be recompense for all the obstacles that I have overcome so my family can have enough to eat and wear.

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One of the most traumatic situations occur to Maggie, sometimes . Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes, this heartbreak event make her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on society so she prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands, the man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s duty and taking care of the children.

One of the most traumatic situations occur to Maggie. Sometimes I can still hear the flames and feel Maggie’s arms sticking to me, her hair smoking and her dress falling off her in little black papery flakes, this heartbreak event make her to be conservative, shy, insecure about her personality and acceptance on society so she prefers to stay at home as women used to do with their husbands, the man goes to work in order to have an income in the house when the woman is in charge of the house’s duty and taking care of the children.

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Dee is totally different she wanted nice things like, a yellow, organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own : -and knew what style was. She is more open mind she wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciate the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now because .

Dee is totally different she wanted nice things like, a yellow, organdy dress to wear to her graduation from high school. At sixteen she had a style of her own -and knew what style was. She is more open mind she wants to travel around the world representing her race as a high heritage without knowing or appreciate the origin of her race how black people struggle in order to have the education that she is having right now.

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Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life.

Now, I want to send my two only daughter outside to the society I know is going to be painful for Maggie having these scars in her skin but she as to be a strong woman who believe in herself more than other people's opinion. Dee I know that after finishing your education is going to be enough time, so you had learned the real value of life.

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