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Mama believes that I despise my adorable sister, Maggie, because Mama is slightly ignorant, so and I do not blame her for the way she percieves me because my mother did not get an education beyond 2nd grade. I know how it was almost impossible for a black person in the 1920s to get an education, especially for girls. As I was growing up in my Mama’s house, I realized that we were poverty-stricken. I wanted to have a better life for my family and myself. So I decided to get an education in order to be able to unshackle my family and myself from the bondage of ignorance. I remember when I was young and naive, our old house that I despised engulfed by the flames. I was so gratified because I wanted to wipe out all the memories that I resented while living in my old house. I remember seeing my beautiful sister getting eaten by the flames, and unfortunately, I was completely paralyzed that I could not even help her, probably because I wanted the house to be wiped off the surface of the Earth or because I witnessed my adorable sister being hunted by the flames? All I know that at that time I was dazed and overwhelmed.

Mama believes that I despise my adorable sister, Maggie, and I do not blame her for the way she percieves me because my mother did not get an education beyond 2nd grade. I know how it was almost impossible for a black person in the 1920s to get an education, especially for girls. As I was growing up in my Mama’s house, I realized that we were poverty-stricken. I wanted to have a better life for my family and myself. So I decided to get an education in order to be able to unshackle my family and myself from the bondage of ignorance. I remember when I was young and naive, our old house that I despised engulfed by the flames. I was so gratified because I wanted to wipe out all the memories that I resented while living in my old house. I remember seeing my beautiful sister getting eaten by the flames, and unfortunately, I was completely paralyzed that I could not even help her, probably because I wanted the house to be wiped off the surface of the Earth or because I witnessed my adorable sister being hunted by the flames? All I know that at that time I was dazed and overwhelmed.

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Also, I remember when I was trying to enlighten my family by teaching them and showing them the other worlds, they felt like I was intimidating them. I do not blame them for their feelings, but I do blame them for the fact that they believed that I hate both of them and never attempted to listen and open their minds. After I felt completely disconnected from my family, I decided to travel to build my own future due to the fact my family seemed loving mother and sister seemed to love each other, living in their small and very-limited world.After five years of departurebeing away, I bought my own house and got married to a man that I love and believed who believe will assist me in my journey of prospering.This is the reason why I left my own family - . I left them to become a better person and help them in the future, but I never hated the family that I grew up with.

Also, I remember when I was trying to enlighten my family by teaching them and showing them the other worlds, they felt like I was intimidating them. I do not blame them for their feelings, but I do blame them for the fact that they believed that I

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both of them and never attempted to listen and open their minds. After I felt completely disconnected from my family, I decided to travel to build my own future due to the fact my mother and sister seemed to love each other, living in their small and very-limited world. After five years of being away, I bought my own house and got married to a man that I love and believe will assist me in my journey of prospering. This is the reason why I left my own family. I
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them to become a better person and help them in the future, but I never hated the family that I grew up with.

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After five years of departurebeing away, I bought my own house and got married to a man that I love and believed who believe will assist me in my journey of prospering.

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As I started to get indulged involved in my life overseas, I came to realize that family is very precious and indispensable. I will never forget those days when I did not have any company but the bleak darkness of the midwinter. My husband left for a business trip and I was all alone at home. While he was away, I played dead, hoping the loneliness would leave me alone, and to avoid the empty side of my home. Each night Insomnia insomnia used to sweep me up in his arms dips and dip me in the kitchen in the small glow of the stove-light. Insomnia has this romantic way of making the moon feels like the perfect company. So I decided to go for walks but my stuttering kneecaps clank clanked like silver spoons held in strong arms with loose wrists. They ring in my ear like clumsy church bells, reminding me I am sleepwalking on an ocean of happiness that I can not baptize myself in. But this was not what really made me realize that family is vital to a healthy life, but the fact that I abandoned my own family because they could not comprehend and accept me.

As I started to get involved in my life overseas, I came to realize that family is very precious and indispensable. I will never forget those days when I did not have any company but

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the bleak darkness of the midwinter. My husband left for a business trip and I was all alone at home. While he was away, I played dead, hoping the loneliness would leave me alone, and to avoid the empty side of my home. Each night insomnia used to sweep me up in his arms and dip me in the kitchen in the small glow of the stove-light. Insomnia has this romantic way of making the moon feels like the perfect company. So I decided to go for walks but
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my stuttering kneecaps clanked like silver spoons held in strong arms with loose wrists. They ring in my ear like clumsy church bells, reminding me I am sleepwalking on an ocean of happiness that I can not
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baptize myself in. But this was not what really made me realize that family is vital to a healthy life, but the fact that I abandoned my own family because they could not comprehend and accept me.

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El-Hossin Salem El-Hossin Salem (Dec 03 2019 1:35PM) : The reason for the excessive metaphor is I wanted to demonstrate why family is indispensable.:)
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my stuttering kneecaps clank clanked like silver spoons held in strong arms with loose wrists.

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My loneliness somehow informed made me feel me that I am was obligated to reunite with my family, otherwise it would haunt me until the last mutter moment of my life. So I went back to my home country hoping that I would get accustomed to my family. I was compelled to incorporate new methods and means in the way that I treat my family to assure them that I am not an outsider. But still my family reject reunification, and this was the moment I came to realize that I was born alone. My fate is to be alone. The hollow auditorium of my life started to get wider and bigger as I decided to go back overseas. Still, Mama does not understand

My loneliness made me feel me that I was obligated to reunite with my family, otherwise it would haunt me until the last moment of my life. So I went back to my home country hoping that

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I would get accustomed to my family. I was compelled to incorporate new methods and means in the way that I treat my family to assure them that I am not an outsider. But still my family
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reunification, and this was the moment I came to realize that I was born alone. My fate is to be alone. The hollow auditorium of my life started to get wider and bigger as I decided to go back overseas. Still, Mama does not understand

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My loneliness somehow informed made me feel me that I am was obligated to reunite with my family, otherwise it would haunt me until the last mutter moment of my life.

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Fatema Rahman Fatema Rahman (Dec 03 2019 1:05PM) : who is feeling lonely?
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Paul Allison (Dec 02 2019 5:23PM) : So sad!

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Mama believes that I despise my adorable sister, MaggiMaggie, because Mama is slightly ignorant, so I do not blame her. I know how it was almost impossible for a black person in the 1920s to get an education, especially for girls. As I was growing up in my Mama’s house, I realized that we were poverty-stricken. I wanted to have a better life for my family and myself. So I decided to get an education in order to be able to unshackle my family and myself from the bondage of ignorance. I remember when I was young and naive, our old house that I despised engulfed by the flames. I was so gratified because I wanted to wipe out all the memories that I resented while living in my old house. I remember seeing my beautiful sister getting eaten by the flames, and unfortunately, I was completely paralyzed that I could not even shufflehelp her, probably because I wanted the house to be wiped off the surface of the Earth or because I witnessed my adorable sister being hunted by the flames? All I know that at that time I was dazed and overwhelmed.

Mama believes that I despise my adorable sister, Maggie, because Mama is slightly ignorant, so I do not blame her. I know how it was almost impossible for a black person in the 1920s to get an education, especially for girls. As I was growing up in my Mama’s house, I realized that we were poverty-stricken. I wanted to have a better life for my family and myself. So I decided to get an education in order to be able to unshackle my family and myself from the bondage of ignorance. I remember when I was young and naive, our old house that I despised engulfed by the flames. I was so gratified because I wanted to wipe out all the memories that I resented while living in my old house. I remember seeing my beautiful sister getting eaten by the flames, and unfortunately, I was completely paralyzed that I could not even help her, probably because I wanted the house to be wiped off the surface of the Earth or because I witnessed my adorable sister being hunted by the flames? All I know that at that time I was dazed and overwhelmed.

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Paul Allison (Dec 02 2019 10:56AM) : I'm wondering if you say too much in this first sentence. Maybe you could show Mama saying and doing things that Dee would consider "slightly ignorant." Stated boldly like that feels a bit too disrespectful for Dee.
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Mama believes that I despise my adorable sister, MaggiMaggie, because Mama is slightly ignorant, so I do not blame her.

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Fatema Rahman Fatema Rahman (Dec 03 2019 1:03PM) : who realize that they are poor?
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Paul Allison (Dec 02 2019 5:12PM) : Yeah... I'm not sure I agree that poverty = ignorance. Maybe you can think of a more accurate word for what you are saying here?
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I remember seeing my beautiful sister getting eaten by the flames, and unfortunately, I was completely paralyzed that I could not even shufflehelp her, probably because I wanted the house to be wiped off the surface of the Earth or because I witnessed my adorable sister being hunted by the flames?

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Housseynatou Diallo Housseynatou Diallo (Dec 03 2019 1:26PM) : By saying this you mean that Dee does feel over her sister just because she is more beautiful than her sister or she feels sorry for her sister?
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