Kadidja's Thanks you to give honors the young generations.
Author: kadidja
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Dear Representative Ocasio-Cortez,
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I am grateful for your Instagram video because it promotes and gives value to my generation's behaviour.
Since some old people think my generation people kids are not afraid to tell something.
So they are bad for our society.
One thing you said that stands out for me is have ability to stands up for sometime wrong in society are some of path way to change.
I think this is interesting because if we don’t stand up the thing we want nothing will change then is better to talk about our problem to be free and make some new change that we avocates for.
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Maybe try to say this sentence out loud, then write down what you say and try to make it clear?
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Since some people think my generation people are not afraid to tell sometimes so they are bad for our society.One thing you said that stands out for me is: “have ability to stands up for sometime wrong in society are some of path way to change” I think this is interesting because if we don’t stand up for the thing we want, nothing will change so . It is better to talk about our problem problems, to be free and treat them .In order to have changement.work for change.
Since some old people think my generation young people are not afraid to tell sometimes so something. So they are bad for our society. One thing you said that stands out for me is: “have ability to stands up for sometime wrong in society are some of path way to change” I think this is interesting because if we don’t stand up the thing we want nothing will change so is better to talk about our problem to be free and treat them .In order to have changement.
Since some old people think my generation kids people are not afraid to tell sometimes so they are bad for our society. meaning we should be a kids that respect everything that their parent are saying. One thing you said that stands out for me is: “have ability to stands up for sometime wrong in society are some of path way to change” I think this is interesting because if we don’t stand up the thing we want nothing will change so is better to talk about our problem to be free and treat them .In order to have changement.
Since some old people think my generation people kids are not afraid to tell somethingThe young generation is not afraid to speakThey have a courage to stand up and say what they want.
Since some old people think my generation people kids are The young generation is not afraid to tell something.speak a loud. They have a courage to stand up and say what they want.
The young generation do not scare to speak a loud. Since some old people think my generation people kids are not afraid to tell something.
Since some old people think my generation people kids are not afraid to tell somethingsometimes so they are bad for our society.
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I do totally agree with you when you are saying this young generation are not afraid to say something even if it will hurt.
We're not afraid to have those conversations.
One reason I say this is some people can be disrespectful, and they need to be quiet.
However, She does not want this thing in our community that is stop lisen others voices.
Since we want to have a better status for other young generations that are coming.
Another reason I agree with you is when you are talking about their freedom of speech because have freedom is to talk or has discuss about some issue that we are facing in our society.
And we feel is not great for us.
Does why we get this liberty from.
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TheyWe're not afraid to have those conversations. One reason I say this is some people 's minds are when people think something is disrespectful so can be disrespectful, and they need to be quetquiet.
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This leaves me quite confused because you say that you “totally agree” in the first sentence in this paragraph, then suddenly in the last sentence here, you say “Another reason you disagree…” What? Do you agree or disagree? Totally or in part? You need to rework this whole paragraph to say what you want it to say.
Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here.
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I’m especially inspired by the video by Blair Imani because as a Muslim women, I can connect to some of her speech since it is hard in this society for some people to accept you as you are. In my opinion I don't think judge someone is a big deal .But in real life yes specific in this County. Some people want to know everything on you even if you and them never speak . They will always care about your identity . Does she is fithing for she want people to lisen other voice and give some value with that no matter his or her status. Then this is the thing that Blair try to explain in her speech because people want to judge as if they were God. Instead they should accept themselves before they think or speak of someone’s life. However they think that they people who like judge forget we are same and made with Only One creator.
I’m especially inspired by the video by Blair Imani because as a Muslim women, I can connect to some of her speech since it is hard in this society for some people to accept you as you are.
In my opinion I don't think judge someone is a big deal .But in real life yes specific in this County.
Some people want to know everything on you even if you and them never speak .
They will always care about your identity .
Does she is fithing for she want people to lisen other voice and give some value with that no matter his or her status.
Then this is the thing that Blair try to explain in her speech because people want to judge as if they were God.
Instead they should accept themselves before they think or speak of someone’s life.
However people who like judge forget we are same and made with Only One creator.
Therefore Tucker Carlson is a American conservative Journalist who works on Fox News. Not all the people want to integrate with other people in their labor area.
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This is basically saying she is really proud to be who she is because she is glad to speak on behalf of her community. Also, the way she speaks in front of many people makes her grow and go beyond her identity.
When it comes to representation, we always have room to grow. I’m really excited about TV shows like Pose and The Bold Type for presenting queer characters with storylines that go beyond that person’s identity.
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I’ve also been learning about accepting yourself the way you are no matter what. The young protesters that I find most inspiring are the ones who explain how we should respect our environment and others thinking.
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I think this history is a good example to support something you said in your video that is don’t judge someone we should listen to people 's minds and that is totally clear to agree with. like" They're not afraid to have those conversations.
If anything, like I think they're profoundly courageous because they're willing to puncture more taboos and have conversations that, frankly, older generations sometimes struggle to have."
Does where I feel like all others story activity has connect with.
Since it is a powerful sentence.
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You are supposed to have a quote here from AOC, and we should get a clear idea about what you learned from the five movements in the Youth Revolt article.
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Thanks for taking the time to read my letter.
I look forward to seeing what you do or say next.
Since I really enjoy listen your instagram video and it helps me to open my mind about our society even though sometimes it is really hard for us like women to change things .
Trying to change their mind is a good solution because we have a right and the old people should accept the new generations the way they are because they just want the thing to change.
Added March 11, 2020 at 7:02pm
by Kadidja El-Hadji
Title: Wording change
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I’m especially inspired by the video by Blair Imani because as a Muslim women, I can connect to some of her speech since it is hard in this society for some people to accept you as you are.
In my opinion I don't think judge someone is a big deal .But in real life yes specific in this County.
Some people want to know everything on you even if you and them never speak .
They will always care about your identity .
Does she is fithing for she want people to lisen other voice and give some value with that no matter his or her status.
Then this is the thing that Blair try to explain in her speech because people want to judge as if they were God.
Instead they should accept themselves before they think or speak of someone’s life.
However they think that they forget we are same and made with Only One creator.
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I’m especially inspired by the video by Blair Imani because As as a Muslim women, I can connect to some of her speech story with me since it is hard in this society for some people to accept you they as you are.
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