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Dear Ocasio-Cortez,

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I am very thoughtful about this great piece of information the video you uploaded on Instagram because about the young generation being badass.It is necessary to have this piece of information pendant in society and highlight he valenty that teenagers show in advocating themselves to governmentgreat to see you argue that teenagers are brave when they advocate for change. It is necessary to have this source piece of information pendant in society and to highlight the he valenty that teenagers show in advocating themselves to government.

I am very thoughtful about the video you uploaded on Instagram about the young generation being badass. It is great to see you argue that teenagers are brave when they advocate for change. It is necessary to have this piece of information pendant in society to highlight he valenty that teenagers show in advocating themselves to government.

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Abigail Zamora Abigail Zamora (Mar 05 2020 3:39PM) : Suggested Revision more wording accepted ✓

I am very thoughtful about this great piece of information uploaded on Instagram because . It is necessary to have this piece source of information pendant in society and highlight he the valenty that teenagers show in advocating themselves to government.

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I am very thoughtful about this great piece of information the video you uploaded on Instagram about the young generation being badass.

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It is necessary to have this source of information pendant in society and highlight the valenty that teenagers show in advocating themselves to governmentgreat to see you argue that teenagers are brave when they advocate for change.

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It is necessary to have this piece of information pendant in society to highlight he valenty that teenagers show in advocating themselves to government.

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One thing you said that stands out to myself is that “this for me is: "This generation of teenagers is courageous, valiant and strong, profound and brave”brave."I agree very much with what you say said because teenagers are speaking out for themselves. They are learning how to defend their rights. It is because they care about them. They want other people to get the rights tat they deserve. The system really encourages them to do it due to the constantly happening constant injustices.Another reason statement that I agree a lot with is “this generation is not afraid, they are taken into account what has been happening for centuries, such as the Civil War, the Civil rights”.: “One thing that I love so much about mill -- this new generation is the radical acceptance that I see from so many and they actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism." I agree with you very much because there is a say that states that the person who does not shout out , does not obtain anything in benefit. In other words, because the government system many times is very unfair and just a single group of people get everything, others are being forgotten so it is very important to remain the other side that they need to speak up against injustices in order to to receive the benefits that they desire and want in society; including education, wealth equality and racial equality.

One thing you said that stands out for me is: "This generation of teenagers is courageous, valiant and strong, profound and brave." I agree very much with what you said because teenagers are speaking out for themselves. They are learning how to defend their rights. It is because they care about them. They want other people to get the rights tat they deserve. The system really encourages them to do it due to the constant injustices. Another statement that I agree a lot with is: “One thing that I love so much about mill -- this new generation is the radical acceptance that I see from so many and they actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism." I agree with you very much because there is a say that states that the person who does not shout out , does not obtain anything in benefit. In other words, because the government system many times is very unfair and just a single group of people get everything, others are being forgotten so it is very important to remain the other side that they need to speak up against injustices in order to to receive the benefits that they desire and want in society; including education, wealth equality and racial equality.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:40PM) : So.... I'm not sure where you are going with this paragraph. Go back to the guide. Only quote one thing from AOC in a paragraph by itself. Then in the next paragraph say if you agree with her statement and give two reasons for why.
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One thing you said that stands out to myself is that “this for me is: "This generation of teenagers is courageous, valiant and strong, profound and brave”brave."

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I agree very much with what you say said because teenagers are speaking out for themselves.

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Abigail Zamora Abigail Zamora (Mar 05 2020 3:41PM) : this is powerful but also think about to add about that they "care for everybody rights''
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The system really encourages them to do it due to the constantly happening constant injustices.

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Another reason statement that I agree a lot with is “this generation is not afraid, they are taken into account what has been happening for centuries, such as the Civil War, the Civil rights”.: “One thing that I love so much about mill -- this new generation is the radical acceptance that I see from so many and they actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism."

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:37PM) : Is this a saying you know in Spanish? Maybe say it that way first, then translate it. It needs to be more clear here.... simpler.
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Celines Zamora Celines Zamora (Mar 05 2020 3:37PM) : I think this sentence its long you can break up. You describe clear your ideas that connect with the evidence.

Recently I was looking at the youth activists videos , on Nowcomment. One of them was an example of what I am saying here.

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Recently I was looking at the youth videos by young activists videos , on Nowcomment.One of them was an , and one of them is a good example of what I am I’m saying here.

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I am especially inspired by the video from Edna Chavez she explains very connected to what you state in this video. She talks about how immigrants need to me kept in mind in society. She yells how tired undermined groups are of being discriminated in society. How difficult their lives are and how unfair the racial economic equality is in the country. Her main focus is based on immigrants, since her family were part of this very known social group. In terms of education, she spoke that

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I am especially inspired by the video from Edna Chavez she explains very connected to what you state in this video. She talks about how immigrants need to me kept in mind in society. She yells how tired undermined groups are of being discriminated in society. How difficult their lives are and how unfair the racial economic equality is in the country. Her main focus is based on immigrants, since her family were part of this very known social group. In terms of education, she spoke that says:

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I am especially inspired by the video from Edna Chavez she explains at March for Our Lives in Washington, D.C. last year. Her speech is very connected to what you state in this videoyour video about how the youth are badass.

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She talks about how immigrants need to me be kept in mind in society.

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She yells how tired undermined groups are of being discriminated against in society.

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How difficult their lives are and how unfair the racial and economic equality inequality is in the country.

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Celines Zamora Celines Zamora (Mar 05 2020 3:41PM) : Her main idea of her is to get people involved on the issue and together find a solution of the violation specialty on the guns restriction. .
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Her main focus is based on immigrants, since her family were part of this very known social groupmembers are immigrants.

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“ We are tired of the things that we do not need and are starving for what surely would make us succeed in the country. We do not need security, we need resources it is why I am here to speak up (Chavez).”

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"We are tired of the things that we do not need and are starving for what surely would make us succeed in the country. We do not need security, we need resources it is why I am here to speak up up” (Chavez add link to her YouTube video).

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:48PM) : Are you sure that she says that we do not need security? Please check that.

It means that most likely the people tend to receive things that they do not need and as excuse, other people say that they are supplying what they should have, which is considered a trick to keep social disparities.

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It means This is basically saying that most likely the people tend to receive things that they do not need and as excuse, other people say that they are supplying what they should have, which is considered a trick to keep social disparities.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:50PM) : I don't really understand what you are saying here. You need to be much more clear on which quote you are choosing -- and get it right -- what it means to you, and why it inspires you.
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I have also been learning about Youth Revolt, a web page for teens strikes. What this page is about is youth people protesting, other are seeking for justices that have not been taken into account in the actuality, it includes environmental, social and political. One of them that I actually consider very essential in this century is the youth boy Xiuhtezcatl, an environmental young activist talking about environmental change. He explains that the ambition of men is going to end up with earth. Men are just thinking about making money off of fuel but forgetting that they are living on earth and it is getting destroyed because of their ignorance to protect it.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:53PM) : Wait... What? You need to look at the Youth Revolt article again and your example should come from there.
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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:51PM) : Try to more specific about this. It's photo essay by National Geographic.
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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:52PM) : You are on to something here, but you need to explain it again, getting it more clear.
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These stories are thought-provoking to what ou say on your video. Most of the people who are protesting for the socio-political issues happening in our world, are teenagers. As result I thought that your video is a great match prior to defending their rights as people in the world.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:55PM) : Yeah...once you go back to the Youth Revolt article, and summarize a movement from history this paragraph will make more sense. Please go back to the guide and follow what is suggested there.
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Celines Zamora Celines Zamora (Mar 08 2020 7:17PM) : I agree with you in this sentence you identify clear connection.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read this letter. I look forward to hear another admirable speech from you because it encourages me to know that there are other people out there, meaning those who have another perspective are doing the job and are giving others the opportunity to speak up in someone else’s shoes with their words.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:59PM) : You have good ideas here, but it all gets jumbled up in a very long sentence. Try to write this entire paragraph again with simpler, shorter sentences.

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