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Yeanoor's Letter to Ocasio-Cortez

Author: Yeanoor Chowdhury

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Dear Representative Ocasio-Cortez,

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I am feel tempestuous by about your Instagram video because it emphasizes how current generations are responsible, smart enough to implement what they craved for.She is You are very confident and inspiring to the people from the new generation and how we are the government.

I feel tempestuous about your Instagram video because it emphasizes how current generations are responsible, smart enough to implement what they craved for. You are very confident and inspiring to the people from the new generation and how we are the government.

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I am feel tempestuous by about your Instagram video because it emphasizes how current generations are responsible, smart enough to implement what they craved for.

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She is You are very confident and inspiring to the people from the new generation and how we are the government.

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One thing you said that stands out to me is: "His new generation is the radical acceptance that I see from so many and they take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, the history of racial struggles, the history of economics, the history of the United States, the history of colonialism.” I think this is remarkable because she ulizes you use some of the examples of how our young generation does not step back to learn or give value to our history and others memorials events that happened in the past. We always look forward to bringing out the past history and showing our interest by seeing that from different perspectives. We have courage to accept the fact even though or worse and it coulde be bad, we always try to make it better by not repeating the same mistake.

One thing you said that stands out to me is: "His new generation is the radical acceptance that I see from so many and they take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, the history of racial struggles, the history of economics, the history of the United States, the history of colonialism.” I think this is remarkable because you use some of the examples of how our young generation does not step back to learn or give value to our history and others memorials events that happened in the past. We always look forward to bringing out the past history and showing our interest by seeing that from different perspectives. We have courage to accept the fact even though it coulde be bad, we always try to make it better by not repeating the same mistake.

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One thing you said that stands out to me is: "HisThis new generation is the radical acceptance that I see from so many and they take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, the history of racial struggles, the history of economics, the history of the United States, the history of colonialism.” I think this is remarkable because she ulizes some of the examples of how our young generation does not step back to learn or give value to our history and others memorials events that happened in the past.

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One thing you said that stands out to me is: "His new generation is the radical acceptance that I see from so many and they take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, the history of racial struggles, the history of economics, the history of the United States, the history of colonialism.” I think this is remarkable because she ulizes you use some of the examples of how our young generation does not step back to learn or give value to our history and others memorials events that happened in the past.

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One thing you said that stands out to me is: "His new generation is the radical acceptance that I see from so many and they take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, the history of racial struggles, the history of economics, the history of the United States, the history of colonialism.” I think this is remarkable because she ulizes some of the examples of how our young generation does not step back to learn or give value to our history and others memorials events that happened in the past.

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We have courage to accept the fact even though or worse and it coulde be bad, we always try to make it better by not repeating the same mistake.

I do agree with you that our young generation is not so sensitive or emotional. Even if we are, it is a positive way because we know how to solve problems and are intelligent enough to take leadership roles and choose the government. Compared to the past, where people were going through different things. Lack of resources was not letting them make an enormous change in the world. The last generation also called the “silent generation” are those born from 1925 to 1945 – so called because they were raised during a period of war and economic depression.

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I do mostly agree with you that our young generation is not so sensitive or emotional.

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Even if we are, it is a positive way because we know how to solve problems and are intelligent enough to take leadership roles and choose to work with the government.

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Paul Allison (Mar 18 2020 2:03AM) : Where did you find this? I'm not sure I've ever seen this generation called that before. Please check your source and cite it here.

One reason I would agree with her is because we aren't afraid to accept criticism. Another reason is that we always work to develop the country and discover something new .

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One reason I would agree with her you is because we aren't afraid to accept criticism.

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Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here.

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I’m especially inspired by the video by Blair Imani because she is a queer Muslim woman and she empowers the lives of so many Muslim people that are being discriminated against in a world where not everyone is going to accept who they are.

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It is really good that she does not let herself down and does not let herself be affected by the denunciation. In addition, demonstrate what she is capable of to people. In actualityreality, many people face discrimination just because they have belifes in certain religions like such as Islam, and Hindu which really do not make any difference in their personality or hurt anyone.

It is really good that she does not let herself down and does not let herself be affected by the denunciation. In addition, demonstrate what she is capable of to people. In reality, many people face discrimination just because they belifes in certain religions such as Islam, and Hindu which really do not make any difference in their personality or hurt anyone.

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In addition, demonstrate she demonstrates what she is capable of to people.

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Celines Zamora Celines Zamora (Mar 09 2020 10:18PM) : I think you need to explain a little be more your opinion about religion. Everyone a received discrimination by their religion.
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In reality, many people face discrimination just because they of their belifes in certain religions such as Islam , and Hindu which and Hinduism. These beliefs really do not make any difference in their personality or hurt anyone.

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The memorable thing was that she raised her voice to hear her words around the world. She was embarrassed to say that she is a queer Muslim. The link of the inspiring video that I had watched is : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MNa3EhyN5Zc&feature=emb_logo

The memorable thing was that she raised her voice to hear her words around the world. She was embarrassed to say that she is a queer Muslim. The link of the inspiring video that I had watched is : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MNa3EhyN5Zc&feature=emb_logo

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Paul Allison (Mar 18 2020 2:07AM) : This is a good summary, but you need to transcribe a sentence or two from the video and put her actual words here in quotation marks.
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I’ve also been learning about how all the people have been facing so many problem and Youth are protesting for their water point which the government want to use to build some pipeline to factories and the young from china protesting to get the right to have a higher education to achieve the goals The young protesters that I find most inspiring are the ones who of is fighting for education

I’ve also been learning about how all the people have been facing so many problem and Youth are protesting for their water point which the government want to use to build some pipeline to factories and the young from china protesting to get the right to have a higher education to achieve the goals The young protesters that I find most inspiring are the ones who is fighting for education

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Paul Allison (Mar 18 2020 2:09AM) : All one sentence? This paragraph needs work, starting with making shorter sentences, and getting clear on what you want to say about ONE of the five historical movements portrayed in the National Geographic photo essay.
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I think this history is a good example of something you said in your video: “I think this new generation is very profound and very strong and very brave because they are actually willing to go to the streets” I agree with you here, because whatever we do not get, we fight for it and never give up on it until we achieve. However, I would say at a same time, the past generation was as we are right now.

I think this history is a good example of something you said in your video: “I think this new generation is very profound and very strong and very brave because they are actually willing to go to the streets” I agree with you here, because whatever we do not get, we fight for it and never give up on it until we achieve. However, I would say at a same time, the past generation was as we are right now.

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However, I would say at a same time, the past generation was as past generations of youth were just as strong as we are right now.

Thanks for taking the time to read my letter. I look forward to seeing what you do or say next.

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Added March 17, 2020 at 7:27am by Yeanoor Chowdhury
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The memorable thing was that she raised her voice to hear her words around the world. She was embarrassed to say that she is a queer Muslim.

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