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Dear Representative Ocasio-Cortez,

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I am surprised by your opinion about the new generation it's a "badass" on your Instagram video about how you explain . Your opinion describe the differences between the young people from old generations current generation that how take action to get involved in the issues that people face in the world today. The new generation They tries to find help from other people to advocate for justice in different ways.They They create different groups to help othersorganizations where people can find refuge and help about the issues.

I am surprised by your opinion about the new generation it's a "badass" on your Instagram video. Your opinion describe the differences between the current generation that how take action to get involved in the issues that people face in the world today. They tries to find help from other people to advocate for justice. They create different organizations where people can find refuge and help about the issues.

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One thing you said that stands out for me is: “they ; “They actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism.” I think this is powerful because you noticed that young people are activated on the issues that happen in the community and try to solve them using complex strategies. It's a good idea that they have the knowledge about their rights that they are supposed to have and they advocate for them.

One thing you said that stands out for me is; “They actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism.” I think this is powerful because you noticed that young people are activated on the issues that happen in the community and try to solve them using complex strategies. It's a good idea that they have the knowledge about their rights that they are supposed to have and they advocate for them.

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One thing you said that stands out for me is; they “They actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism.” I think this is powerful because you noticed that young people are activated on the issues that happen in the community and try to solve them using complex strategies.

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I totally agree with you that argument when you say that people have the power to change our world to start with our community, it saysand that they should start in their communities. You sayl; “Let me tell you something: you are the government! Like, as a democracy, we the people mean you. You are as a voter you are the government too” One reason I say this is an argument that can change or also people get too." You are saying that people can make change by getting involved in the community. Another reason I also agree with you is because you have some details that show in your opinion about the significance of voting. It's important to know about our right to vote, and to raise our voice. Our opinion counts to be part of . It's our government.

I totally agree with you when you say that people have the power to change our world and that they should start in their communities. You sayl; “Let me tell you something: you are the government! Like, as a democracy, we the people mean you. You are as a voter you are the government too." You are saying that people can make change by getting involved in the community. I also agree with your opinion about the significance of voting. It's important to know about our right to vote, and to raise our voice. Our opinion counts. It's our government.

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Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at “March for Our Lives” Washington, D.C. because she is an advocate for her community of South Los Angeles. I noticed on this video that there are good arguments about why the government does not do anything to change the situation. She tried to motivate people on her way. For example she said "It is normal to see flowers honoring the lives of black and brown youth that have lost their lives to a bullet. We need to tackle the root causes of the issues we face and come to understand how to resolve them." (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BinNvKznltA) In this quote, she is trying to give the message through a speech because she wants people to take action and force government to change the laws about racial injustices that still exist in the everyday. She wants news changes on the streets and education with security. She wants justice in her community.

Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at “March for Our Lives” Washington, D.C. because she is an advocate for her community of South Los Angeles. I noticed on this video that there are good arguments about why the government does not do anything to change the situation. She tried to motivate people on her way. For example she said "It is normal to see flowers honoring the lives of black and brown youth that have lost their lives to a bullet. We need to tackle the root causes of the issues we face and come to understand how to resolve them." (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BinNvKznltA) In this quote, she is trying to give the message through a speech because she wants people to take action and force government to change the laws about racial injustices that still exist in the everyday. She wants news changes on the streets and education with security. She wants justice in her community.

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This is basically saying that people are not surprised that the violation and some issues that happen just because they are adapting their life like that. If people don't take action, justice can not have value to protect people living there.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:12PM) : Is there a quote tat comes before this sentence? I'm not sure what the first word, "This..." is referring to.
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I’ve also been learning about the Civil Rights Movement where all people like young people who suffer from segregration are protesting for their rights. The challenge is of this protest was reduce the racism that people and the government need to work ondo it. For example; “Representative John Lewis Called “good trouble” -- fearless agitation designed to provoke, challenge, and move progress forward.”this mean that advocated for our rights can have a result based on the challenges that we put on progress. Young people were moved to fight for their rights at the time.

I’ve also been learning about the Civil Rights Movement where all people who suffer from segregration are protesting for their rights. The challenge of this protest was reduce the racism that people do it. For example; “Representative John Lewis Called “good trouble” this mean that advocated for our rights can have a result based on the challenges that we put on progress. Young people were moved to fight for their rights at the time.

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I think this history is a great example to show and know about our past population. Something you said in your video: “I don't think they're too delicate at all. I think that they're badass. I think that young people are more informed and dynamic than their predecessors.” I agree with you here, because young people have more knowledge that happened in the past and happens everyday on the news and also social media. This a tool that we can informated more about the world.

I think this history is a great example to show and know about our past. Something you said in your video: “I don't think they're too delicate at all. I think that they're badass. I think that young people are more informed and dynamic than their predecessors.” I agree with you here, because young people have more knowledge that happened in the past and happens everyday on the news and also social media. This a tool that we can informated more about the world.

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I think this history is a great example to show and know about our past population.

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Thanks for taking the time to read my letter. I look forward to seeing what you do or say next. I hope you continue to motivate young people with your arguments.

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Added March 10, 2020 at 2:59pm by Celines Zamora
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I am surprised by your opinion about the new generation on your Instagram video because about how you explain the differences between the young people to the from old generations how take action to get involved in the issues that people face peoplein the world today. The new generation tries to find help from other people to advocate for justice in different ways. They create different groups to help others.

I am surprised by your opinion about the new generation on your Instagram video about how you explain the differences between the young people from old generations how take action to get involved in the issues that people face in the world today. The new generation tries to find help from other people to advocate for justice in different ways. They create different groups to help others.

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Idelkys Checo Idelkys Checo (Mar 05 2020 3:31PM) : Suggested Revision more wording accepted ✓

I am surprised by your opinion about the new generation on your Instagram video because about how you explain the differences between the young people to the from old generations how take action to get involved in the issues that people face peoplein the world today.

Reason: I am suggesting you to change the grammar.

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Added March 10, 2020 at 3:12pm by Celines Zamora
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One thing you said that stands out for me is: “they actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism.” I think this is powerful because you noticed that young people are activated on the issues that happened happen in the community and try to solve with some strategies that are complexthem using complex strategies.It's a good idea that they have the knowledge about their rights because they can that they are supposed to have and they advocate for them.

One thing you said that stands out for me is: “they actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism.” I think this is powerful because you noticed that young people are activated on the issues that happen in the community and try to solve them using complex strategies. It's a good idea that they have the knowledge about their rights that they are supposed to have and they advocate for them.

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Idelkys Checo Idelkys Checo (Mar 05 2020 3:37PM) : today youth people dive into into why things like this are happening and why.
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One thing you said that stands out for me is: “they actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism.” I think this is powerful because you noticed that young people are activated on the issues that happened happen in the community and try to solve with some strategies that are complexthem using complex strategies.

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Idelkys Checo Idelkys Checo (Mar 05 2020 3:40PM) : Suggested Revision more wording accepted ✓

It's a good idea that they have the knowledge about their rights because they can that they are supposed to have and they advocate for them.

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I totally agree with you that argument when you say that people have the power to change our world to start with our community, it says; and that they should start in their communities. You say: Let me tell you something: you are the government! Like, as a democracy, we the people mean you. You are as a voter you are the government too” One reason I say this is an argument that can change or also people get too.” You are saying that people can make change by getting involved in the community. Another reason I agree with you is because you have some details that show in your opinion the significance of voting. It's important to know that the vote, our voice, our opinion count for to be part of our governmentabout our right to vote and to raise our voice. Our opinion counts to be part of . It's our government.

I totally agree with you when you say that people have the power to change our world and that they should start in their communities. You say: “Let me tell you something: you are the government! Like, as a democracy, we the people mean you. You are as a voter you are the government too.” You are saying that people can make change by getting involved in the community. Another reason I agree with you is because you have some details that show in your opinion the significance of voting. It's important to know about our right to vote and to raise our voice. Our opinion counts. It's our government.

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I totally agree with you that argument when you say that people have the power to change our world to start with our community, it says; and that they should start in their communities. You say: Let me tell you something: you are the government!

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You are as a voter you are the government too” One reason I say this is an argument that can change or also people get too.” You are saying that people can make change by getting involved in the community.

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Another reason I also agree with you is because you have some details that show in your opinion about the significance of voting.

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It's important to know that the about our right to vote, our voice, our opinion count for . Our opinion counts to be part of our government.

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It's important to know about our right to vote , and to raise our voice.

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Our opinion counts to be part of . It's our government.

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I am surprised by your opinion about the new generation it's a "badass" on your Instagram video about how you . You explain the differences between the young people from old generations how take action to get involved in the issues that people face in the world today. The new generation tries to find help from other people to advocate for justice in different ways.They Also they create different groups to help otherswhere people can find help depending on their situation.

I am surprised by your opinion about the new generation it's a "badass" on your Instagram video. You explain the differences between the young people from old generations how take action to get involved in the issues that people face in the world today. The new generation tries to find help from other people to advocate for justice in different ways. Also they create different groups where people can find help depending on their situation.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 12:56PM) : I'm not sure what you are saying here. May try to say it simpler? Does AOC say anything about older generations or is this just inferred? Maybe just say what she argues about the current generation.
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Also they create different groups where people can find help depend depending on their situation.

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Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at “March for Our Lives” Washington, D.C. because she is an advocate for her community of South Los Angeles. I noticed on this video that there are good arguments about why the government does not do anything to change the situation. She tried to motivate people on her way. For example she said "It is normal to see flowers honoring the lives of black and brown youth that have lost their lives to a bullet. We need to tackle the root causes of the issues we face and come to understand how to resolve them." In this quote, she is trying to give the message through a speech because she wants people to take action and force government to change the laws. Based on the racial injustices that still exist everyday. She wants changes not only on her community, she wants chasnges on all the world. Justice for everyone.

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Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at “March for Our Lives” Washington, D.C. because she is an advocate for her community of South Los Angeles. I noticed on this video that there are good arguments about why the government does not do anything to change the situation. She tried to motivate people on her way. For example she said "It is normal to see flowers honoring the lives of black and brown youth that have lost their lives to a bullet. We need to tackle the root causes of the issues we face and come to understand how to resolve them." (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BinNvKznltA )In this quote, she is trying to give the message through a speech because she wants people to take action and force government to change the laws about racial injustices that still exist in the everyday. She wants news changes on the streets and education with security. She wants justice in her community.

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I’ve also been learning about the Civil Rights Movement where all people like young people that are desegregated are who suffer from segregration are protesting for their rights.The challenge is the racism that people and the government need to work on that. For example; “Representative John Lewis Called “good trouble”-- fearless agitation designed to provoke, challenge, and move progress forward.”This relates to the fact that young Young people were moved to change fight for their rights at the time.

I’ve also been learning about the Civil Rights Movement where all people like young people who suffer from segregration are protesting for their rights. The challenge is the racism that people and the government need to work on. For example; “Representative John Lewis Called “good trouble”-- fearless agitation designed to provoke, challenge, and move progress forward.” Young people were moved to fight for their rights at the time.

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I’ve also been learning about the Civil Rights Movement where all people like young people that are desegregated are who suffer from segregration are protesting for their rights.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:14PM) : Suggested Revision more wording accepted ✓

The challenge is the racism that people and the government need to work on that.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:16PM) : Maybe paraphrase this with your own words. Say what John Lewis was fighting for and what he was like when he was young.
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This relates to the fact that young Young people were moved to change fight for their rights at the time.

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Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at “March for Our Lives” Washington, DC;D.C. because she is an advocate for her community of South Los Angeles.I noticed on this video that there are good arguments about why the government dont that nothing does not do anything to change the situation. She tried to motivate people on her way. For example she said "It is normal to see flowers honoring the lives of black and brown youth that have lost their lives to a bullet. We need to tackle the root causes of the issues we face and come to understand how to resolve them." This In this quote that , she said is trying to give the message of her through a speech , because she wants people to take action and force the government to change the laws about the violation that happen racial injustices that still exist in the everyday. She wants news changes on the streets and education with security. She is wants justice in her community.

Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at “March for Our Lives” Washington, D.C. because she is an advocate for her community of South Los Angeles. I noticed on this video that there are good arguments about why the government does not do anything to change the situation. She tried to motivate people on her way. For example she said "It is normal to see flowers honoring the lives of black and brown youth that have lost their lives to a bullet. We need to tackle the root causes of the issues we face and come to understand how to resolve them." In this quote, she is trying to give the message through a speech because she wants people to take action and force government to change the laws about racial injustices that still exist in the everyday. She wants news changes on the streets and education with security. She wants justice in her community.

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I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at “March for Our Lives” Washington, DC;D.C. because she is an advocate for her community of South Los Angeles.

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I noticed on this video that there are good arguments about why the government dont that nothing does not do anything to change the situation.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:11PM) : Right after this quote you should put a link to the YouTube video. You should cite your evidence here.
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This In this quote that , she said is trying to give the message of her through a speech , because she wants people to take action and force the government to change the laws about the violation that happen racial injustices that still exist in the everyday.

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Paul Allison (Mar 12 2020 1:10PM) : Not sure what you mean by "news changes on the streets" and "education with security." Maybe you need to explain with more than one sentence here.
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She is wants justice in her community.

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Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at “March for Our Lives” Washington, D.C. because she is an advocate for her community of South Los Angeles. I noticed on this video that there are good arguments about why the government does not do anything to change the situation. She tried to motivate people on her way. For example she said "It is normal to see flowers honoring the lives of black and brown youth that have lost their lives to a bullet. We need to tackle the root causes of the issues we face and come to understand how to resolve them." In this quote, she is trying to give the message through a speech because she wants people to take action and force government to change the laws about racial injustices that still exist in the everyday. She wants news changes on the streets and education with security. She wants justice in her community.

Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at “March for Our Lives” Washington, D.C. because she is an advocate for her community of South Los Angeles. I noticed on this video that there are good arguments about why the government does not do anything to change the situation. She tried to motivate people on her way. For example she said "It is normal to see flowers honoring the lives of black and brown youth that have lost their lives to a bullet. We need to tackle the root causes of the issues we face and come to understand how to resolve them." In this quote, she is trying to give the message through a speech because she wants people to take action and force government to change the laws about racial injustices that still exist in the everyday. She wants news changes on the streets and education with security. She wants justice in her community.

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