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Dear Representative Ocasio-Cortez,

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I am engrossed in absorbed by your Instagram video where you said that the Current Generation are Badass” video because it is current generation is badass. It is rare to see an adult stand up to defend what the youth in the past and today can actually do. As for me, I think that these young generations people are working together to make this world a better place. They are just correcting the mistakes that were already done in the past. As we can see today, in this world most of the things that is are happening is are just a repetition from the past, the .The same mistakes are repeating, people .People are suffering, not .Not only the government is working on that but the youth getting involved in it is making thing is things way better, because they are not lazy to not . They go out and say what they think. They are always on the streets, working really hard to make their voice voices heard. They are not stopping until they get what they are fighting for. One thing you said that stands out for me is: “I think that young people are more informed and dynamic than their predecessors. I think that they are more sensitive, in a positive way, in that they actually care about other peoples' experiences and lives. One thing that I love so much about mill -- this new generation is the radical acceptance that I see from so many and they actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism.” I think this is beguiling because it is not just charming but it is like a most powerful way to talk to people as they deserve it. I can say that the youth deserve to be seen and heard, because their words matter a lot more than the other. As of now, most rallies, clubs, groups, gangs etc….are made because they want their communities to see them and get involved.

I am absorbed by your Instagram video where you said that the current generation is badass. It is rare to see an adult stand up to defend what the youth in the past and today can actually do. As for me, I think that these young people are working together to make this world a better place. They are just correcting the mistakes that were already done in the past. As we can see today, in this world most of the things that are happening are just a repetition from the past. The same mistakes are repeating. People are suffering. Not only the government is working on that but the youth getting involved in it is making things way better, because they are not lazy. They go out and say what they think. They are always on the streets, working really hard to make their voices heard. They are not stopping until they get what they are fighting for. One thing you said that stands out for me is: “I think that young people are more informed and dynamic than their predecessors. I think that they are more sensitive, in a positive way, in that they actually care about other peoples' experiences and lives. One thing that I love so much about mill -- this new generation is the radical acceptance that I see from so many and they actually take time to read and understand our history, the history of the labor movement, civil rights, history of racial struggles, history of economics, history of the United States, history of colonialism.” I think this is beguiling because it is not just charming but it is like a most powerful way to talk to people as they deserve it. I can say that the youth deserve to be seen and heard, because their words matter. As of now, most rallies, clubs, groups, gangs etc….are made because they want their communities to see them and get involved.

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Aboubakar Dabre Aboubakar Dabre (Mar 17 2020 11:07AM) : Really man! I issue is no only for youth, it is for every body. When we talk about the future evrybody is conserne. I think you should be more espesific.
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I am engrossed in absorbed by your Instagram video where you said that the Current Generation are Badass” video because it is current generation is badass. It is rare to see an adult stand up to defend what the youth in the past and today can actually do.

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As for me, I think that these young generations people are working together to make this world a better place.

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Aboubakar Dabre Aboubakar Dabre (Mar 17 2020 11:33AM) : You said that they connecting the mistake from the past. But what mistake you are talking about? can you be more spesific?
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As we can see today, in this world most of the things that is are happening is are just a repetition from the past, the . The same mistakes are repeating, people . People are suffering, not . Not only the government is working on that but the youth getting involved in it is making thing is things way better, because they are not lazy to not . They go out and say what they think.

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Aboubakar Dabre Aboubakar Dabre (Mar 17 2020 11:38AM) : inten of make they voice heard they can put people who have the same voice as them. I mean go to vote. you can stay at home and don't vote for the person you want and get what you want
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They are always on the streets, working really hard to make their voice voices heard.

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Aboubakar Dabre Aboubakar Dabre (Mar 17 2020 11:44AM) : yeah yeah yeah yeah yeaah. their world matter but the way they fight to get what they want is not totaly perfect. they start fighting at the middle of they fight. they should started at the biggining of the fight.
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I can say that the youth deserve to be seen and heard, because their words matter a lot more than the other.

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I extremely agree with you that youth are badass, they are getting involved in their communityś issue, meaning that the community's issues. The youth call for a better future by interacting with one another and to stand and help their community. One reason I say this is that it is rare to see youth do things on their own. So if they are willing to work like badass they deserve to be recognized, which gives them the strength to work hard and change the world. There is also a part of your video when you said, “They're not afraid to have those conversations. If anything, I think they're profoundly courageous because they're willing to puncture more taboos and have conversations that, frankly, older generations sometimes struggle to have.” This set of words just makes me want to say things that I wanted to say for so long. It is just giving us courage and not to be afraid of showing themselvesourselves. But there is something about it. Even if they are not afraid to have those conversations, still there is no action . It just looks like their voices have not been heard. What can you do/say about it? Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. For example, Edna Chavez’s video was about shouting shootings that has happened in the schools and in neighborhoods. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Chavez because she is an inspiration. She gives the youth the reason to speak up and to have courage. So, she explains the issues of gun shooting that is happening in school and everywhere else. She lost her family because of gun shooting, and now she is asking for the government to take control. Something memorable in the video is when she was explaining the tragedy that happened in her life, and many others that have faced the same problem. As for now she wanted to stand up with the youth to fight for what is right for us and for everybody else. It is a good example of the point I am trying to make with, you AOC because it is just confirming what ALEXANDRIA OCASIO-CORTEZ says, you said about the youth are being badass, they . They are just doing what’s right. They want to get involved, they want their voice to be heard, they want to show that they care, they are motivation for the future, and the next future generation to be ready and open minded.

I extremely agree with you that youth are badass, they are getting involved in their community's issues. The youth call for a better future by interacting with one another and to stand and help their community. One reason I say this is that it is rare to see youth do things on their own. So if they are willing to work like badass they deserve to be recognized, which gives them the strength to work hard and change the world. There is also a part of your video when you said, “They're not afraid to have those conversations. If anything, I think they're profoundly courageous because they're willing to puncture more taboos and have conversations that, frankly, older generations sometimes struggle to have.” This set of words just makes me want to say things that I wanted to say for so long. It is just giving us courage and not to be afraid of showing ourselves. But there is something about it. Even if they are not afraid to have those conversations, still there is no action . It just looks like their voices have not been heard. What can you do/say about it? Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. For example, Edna Chavez’s video was about shootings that has happened in the schools and in neighborhoods. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Chavez because she is an inspiration. She gives the youth the reason to speak up and to have courage. So, she explains the issues of gun shooting that is happening in school and everywhere else. She lost her family because of gun shooting, and now she is asking for the government to take control. Something memorable in the video is when she was explaining the tragedy that happened in her life, and many others that have faced the same problem. As for now she wanted to stand up with the youth to fight for what is right for us and for everybody else. It is a good example of the point I am trying to make with, you AOC because it is just confirming you said about the youth being badass. They are just doing what’s right. They want to get involved, they want their voice to be heard, they want to show that they care, they are motivation for the future, and the next future generation to be ready and open minded.

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Aboubakar Dabre Aboubakar Dabre (Mar 17 2020 11:45AM) : I agree
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I extremely agree with you that youth are badass, they are getting involved in their communityś issue, meaning that the community's issues. The youth call for a better future by interacting with one another and to stand and help their community.

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Aboubakar Dabre Aboubakar Dabre (Mar 17 2020 11:54AM) : is this sentence neccesairy? Just say what you have to say man.
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It is just giving us courage and not to be afraid of showing themselvesourselves.

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For example, Edna Chavez’s video was about shouting shootings that has happened in the schools and in neighborhoods.

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It is a good example of the point I am trying to make with you, AOC because it is just confirming what ALEXANDRIA OCASIO-CORTEZ says, the youth are badass, they are just doing what’s right.

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It is a good example of the point I am trying to make with, you AOC because it is just confirming what ALEXANDRIA OCASIO-CORTEZ says, you said about the youth are being badass, they . They are just doing what’s right.

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“It is normal to see posters. It is normal to see balloons. It is normal to see flowers honoring the lives of Black and Brown youth that have lost their lives to a bullet.” CHAVEZ, E. March For Our Lives In-text: (Chavez, 2018). Your Bibliography: Chavez, E., 2018. March For Our Lives. [video] Available at: [Accessed 28 March 2018].

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This is basically saying that seeing people die is not the end of life. People should fight for that to not happen again. They should stand up together and stop violationthe violence.

This is basically saying that seeing people die is not the end of life. People should fight for that to not happen again. They should stand up together and stop the violence.

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They should stand up together and stop violationthe violence.

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I’ve also been learning about Youth Revolt which is about youth from different countries standing up to make their voice voices heard. They were also protesting for their rights and their communities right. The young protesters that I find most inspiring are the ones who were protesting for civil rights. The Civil Right Activists, including young protesters, participate in one of three Alabama marches from Selma to Montgomery in 1965. They were demonstrating that their rights matter not only for men but also for women. They were marching for the civil right, a right that will allow women to have the right to vote.

I’ve also been learning about Youth Revolt which is about youth from different countries standing up to make their voices heard. They were also protesting for their rights and their communities right. The young protesters that I find most inspiring are the ones who were protesting for civil rights. The Civil Right Activists, including young protesters, participate in one of three Alabama marches from Selma to Montgomery in 1965. They were demonstrating that their rights matter not only for men but also for women. They were marching for the civil right, a right that will allow women to have the right to vote.

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I’ve also been learning about Youth Revolt which is about youth from different countries standing up to make their voice voices heard.

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I think this history is a good example of something you said in your video: “ I think this new generation is very profound and very strong and very brave because they are actually willing to go to the streets.” I agree with you here, because not just this new generation but also in the past, those generations were badass too. They were getting involved in any ways to help their elders.

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Aboubakar Dabre Aboubakar Dabre (Mar 17 2020 12:49PM) : every body is fight to get better and the one of the next genration.
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Thanks for taking the time to read my letter. I look forward to seeing what you do or say next time because the world needs people like you to make youth strong. You are an inspiration that push this new generation to believe in themselves and the power that they have which is their voice, and their personality.

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