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Fatoumata's Speculation on Scenes One and Two

Author: Fatoumata

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This play emphasised "The Glass Manegerie" emphasises the value of family But tom , but Tom and Laura dod do not have a good relationship with their mother.The mother want wants to force her each of her kids to be someone they do not want to be.The first and the second sections of "The Glass Menagerie" by Tennessee Williams might leave a reader feeling captive because the play make makes you want to read more.It captive captures our attention and push pushes you to read again and again even though it’s a harder english some of it is harder English and difficult to understand.An example of this is on page <20in paragraphs 20-23 >. “This is our father who left us a long time ago. He was a telephone man who fell in love with long distances; he gave up his job with the telephone company and skipped the light fantastic out of town.The last we heard of him was a picture postcard from Mazatlan, on the Pacific coast of Mexico, containing a message of two words. Hello - Good-bye!' and no address. Think the rest of the play will explain itself”. This is clear introduction of the play because the author motivated the reader to continue to read.

"The Glass Manegerie" emphasises the value of family, but Tom and Laura do not have a good relationship with their mother. The mother wants to force her each of her kids to be someone they do not want to be.The first and the second sections of "The Glass Menagerie" by Tennessee Williams might leave a reader feeling captive because the play makes you want to read more. It captures our attention and pushes you to read again and again even though some of it is harder English and difficult to understand. An example of this is in paragraphs 20-23. “This is our father who left us a long time ago. He was a telephone man who fell in love with long distances; he gave up his job with the telephone company and skipped the light fantastic out of town.The last we heard of him was a picture postcard from Mazatlan, on the Pacific coast of Mexico, containing a message of two words. Hello - Good-bye!' and no address. Think the rest of the play will explain itself”. This is clear introduction of the play because the author motivated the reader to continue to read.

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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:24AM) : I want to see you free written sentence at begin.
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Paul Allison (Apr 30 2020 2:18PM) : Suggested Revision more wording accepted ✓

This play emphasised "The Glass Manegerie" emphasises the value of family But tom , but Tom and Laura dod do not have a good relationship with their mother.

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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:15AM) : I like the way you start your sentence but where is your free written?
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The mother want wants to force her each of her kids to be someone they do not want to be.The first and the second sections of "The Glass Menagerie" by Tennessee Williams might leave a reader feeling captive because the play make makes you want to read more.

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Denieris Marte Denieris Marte (Apr 30 2020 3:02PM) : Love how you explained in few words why the mother and the kids do not have a good relationship and and the examples are pretty clear of why Laura and Tom only have a mother figure.
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It captive captures our attention and push pushes you to read again and again even though it’s a harder english some of it is harder English and difficult to understand.

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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:15AM) : I feel like you don't need this <> stuff.
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Paul Allison (Apr 30 2020 2:20PM) : Suggested Revision more wording accepted ✓

An example of this is on page <20in paragraphs 20-23 >.

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A reader’s questions might start on page <58paragraphs 58-60 > where it says: “AMANDA: They knew how to entertain their gentlemen callers. It wasn't enough for a girl to be possessed of a pretty face and a graceful figure although I wasn't alighted in either respect. She also needed to have a nimble wit and a tongue to meet all occasions. TOM: What did you talk about?AMANDA: Things of importance going on in the world! Never anything coarse or common or vulgar”. This is important because you can know Amanda character without reading the entire play. She is demanding and very ambitious. However this part her character is confusing because you may asked a reader might ask why she is doing that. The more you read it the more you will understand why she wanted this. The author seems to be making the point that this family is controlling controlled by a the mother.I guess she want to wants her kids to live as she wish wishes and will wills them to.

A reader’s questions might start on paragraphs 58-60 where it says: “AMANDA: They knew how to entertain their gentlemen callers. It wasn't enough for a girl to be possessed of a pretty face and a graceful figure although I wasn't alighted in either respect. She also needed to have a nimble wit and a tongue to meet all occasions. TOM: What did you talk about?AMANDA: Things of importance going on in the world! Never anything coarse or common or vulgar”. This is important because you can know Amanda character without reading the entire play. She is demanding and very ambitious. However her character is confusing because a reader might ask why she is doing that. The more you read it the more you will understand why she wanted this. The author seems to be making the point that this family is controlled by the mother. I guess she wants her kids to live as she wishes and wills them to.

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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:17AM) : I like the quote because it is respond your reasons that you give.
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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:26AM) : I don't see the thing that you about his author written.
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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:16AM) : same to here of curse you need page number but not <> this.
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A reader’s questions might start on page <58paragraphs 58-60 > where it says: “AMANDA: They knew how to entertain their gentlemen callers.

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Denieris Marte Denieris Marte (Apr 30 2020 3:03PM) : what paragraph or line are this, because in line 58-60 there are many paragraph. and I know you put evidence but what lines and what paragraph
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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:19AM) : yes but I feel like it is not confusing at all because she jut want a good life style that society is showing us.
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However this part her character is confusing because you may asked a reader might ask why she is doing that.

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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:20AM) : of curse nice sentence.
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The author seems to be making the point that this family is controlling controlled by a the mother.

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I guess she want to wants her kids to live as she wish wishes and will wills them to.

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After this part of the play, most readers probably will be looking forward to reading the rest of this play because I’m the reader might be little be confused and I hope when I will be hope that by reading the the next scenes I he or she will understand more.And may be I will understand why Amander The reader might want to know why Amanda is obsessed with Laura to have a gentleman caller. What’s probably going to happen next is That that the mother may will understand her kids and leaved allow them to live as they want.

After this part of the play, most readers probably will be looking forward to reading the rest of this play because the reader might be little be confused and hope that by reading the the next scenes he or she will understand more. The reader might want to know why Amanda is obsessed with Laura to have a gentleman caller. What’s probably going to happen next is that the mother may will understand her kids and allow them to live as they want.

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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:21AM) : yes this sentence make more sentence to me because it still like you don't understand even if you get some part.
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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:28AM) : I feel like before to start this sentence I want to say the question that you will ask the author.
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Paul Allison (Apr 30 2020 2:23PM) : Suggested Revision more wording accepted ✓

After this part of the play, most readers probably will be looking forward to reading the rest of this play because I’m the reader might be little be confused and I hope when I will be hope that by reading the the next scenes I he or she will understand more.

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And may be I will understand why Amander The reader might want to know why Amanda is obsessed with Laura to have a gentleman caller.

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Kadidja El-Hadji Kadidja El-Hadji (Apr 09 2020 11:23AM) : can you please add some sentence at end and that will look fantastic.
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What’s probably going to happen next is That that the mother may will understand her kids and leaved allow them to live as they want.

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