PS 166Q Grade 2

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Nov 4

Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:41PM) : These are aligned to the writing standard and help to show what needs to be included. The next step is to create explicit learning targets that give students an idea of how to meet the criteria. We will explore these next session.

Nov 30

Constantia S Constantia S (Nov 30 2021 11:12AM) : Thank you Liz for the comment. For this assignment the learning targets was the success criteria. The children are always given the target/success criteria. The next step will be to explain in writing if they have met this criteria.

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Nov 4

Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:43PM) : This student clearly thought out of the box. I expected to find facts in the graph in the text, but that was not the case. It would be interesting to encourage the student to a graph of his own design to arrange facts that help to respond to the task. [Edited] more

The student clearly understood the criteria. I wonder what scaffolding was involved. He even used transitions effectively and gave meaningful conclusion. This would be an excellent exemplar to share with the class.

Nov 30

Constantia S Constantia S (Nov 30 2021 11:17AM) : That is a great suggestion. I was proud of this child because he attempted to include this graph, although he was not asked to do so.

Nov 30

Liz L Liz L (Nov 30 2021 2:54PM) : Highlight more

It’s a great idea to highlight behavior that shows taking a responsible risk so that other students realize it is a good thing to try.

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Nov 4

Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:50PM) : The student was striving for accuracy in drawing the goat.

Nov 30

Constantia S Constantia S (Nov 30 2021 11:15AM) : Drawing was not required. The students are encouraged to choose from a variety of papers I provide for them.

A hook 0

Nov 4

Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:51PM) : This student knew to use a question as a hook. He clearly grabbed the reader's attention. more

I wonder if you had a lesson or showed samples of good introduction paragraphs.

Conclusion 0

Nov 4

Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:52PM) : There is a clear conclusion, but it could reflect the rest of the essay more directly. more

Although this student has done an excellent job, we want to give him next steps so that he keeps improving on his work.

Transitions 0

Nov 4

Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:54PM) : This student did a great job with transitions: one reason, another reason, a different reason, a last reason. more

I wonder if students were given a list of possible transitions to use.

Nov 30

Constantia S Constantia S (Nov 30 2021 11:21AM) : We have done a lot of practice using transition words. A list of transition words was given to the children earlier in the year.

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Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:54PM) : The development of each paragraph is very strong. This sample would also be an excellent exemplar to share with the class.

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Nov 4

Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:56PM) : This pulls the essay together.

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Nov 4

Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:56PM) : The student indicated what the essay will do.

Nov 30

Constantia S Constantia S (Nov 30 2021 3:06PM) : This was as well a well thought response, but the child did not include 3 reasons which was part of the success criteria.

Contrast 0

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Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:57PM) : This paragraph presents a clear contrast. There is a good focus to this essay and it is reflected in the conclusion as well.

Attempted transitions 0

Nov 4

Liz L Liz L (Nov 04 2021 5:59PM) : The student knew to use transitions, he just needs to check the wording.

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