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Aug-25-23 Much more to add...
Aug-25-23 Perplesity.AI thread
Aug-26-23 Gray Tree Frog (Hyla versicolor)
Aug-27-23 Thinking about audience

Okay, so I want to do a sorts of follow-ups from Wednesday's TTT, and I want to get the AI MAKES going with the College Admissions Essay. Oh and there are a bunch of other developments flying aroud, and I have to get partnerships confirmed. So it might be a busy week, and it's our last week in the Berkshires.

DMU Timestamp: August 19, 2023 16:30

Added August 25, 2023 at 9:28pm by Paul Allison
Title: Much more to add...

I think wer ar on to something here:

https://nowcomment.com/documents/353458?scroll_to=3105959

and it all stated here:

https://www.youthvoices.live/losing-track-of-time-green/

This is the prompt:

Be an admissions officer seeking to help me with my College Admissions Essay. Read and judge my [Essay]
Talk to me like a supportive writing mentor.
Talk to me about my essay by using second-person pronouns: you, your, yours, yourself, yourselves.
Look in my essay for strong and weak examples of the five specific qualities and traits listed below.
Go step-by-step and show me what you are thinking for three of the five qualities and traits listed below.
Give me both positive feedback and let me know where I need to improve. There are two steps.
Strengths
Something to Improve
Strengths:
Choose two of the qualities and traits listed below that are strongest in my essay. Quote from my essay to specifically show why you think these are strong parts of my essay. Then give me one thing that I might improve on within these two qualities and traits, and give examples of what I might write.
Something to Improve:
Choose one of the qualities and traits listed below that needs the most improvement in my essay. Provide expanded examples of the kinds of things I might do to make these improvements on my next draft of this essay.

Five specific qualities and traits to choose from for in my essay. Choose two from this list that are strong and one that needs improvement.

1. Focus on personal attributes and skills: Shift your focus from solely academic achievements to personal traits and qualities associated with college success. You want to see evidence of empathy and passion in my essay.

2. Holistic approach: Take a holistic approach to reviewing my essay, considering not only academic achievements but also personality and character traits. You believe that character attributes are important in admissions decisions.

3. Looking for uniqueness: Show interest in what makes me unique and how I will contribute to the college campus. Value qualities such as leadership, willingness to take risks, initiative, sense of social responsibility, and commitment to service.

4. Academic excellence and character strength: Look for both academic excellence and character strength in my essay. You want to see evidence of creativity, self-awareness, and a good command of grammar in college essays.

5. Recognizing good writing and storytelling: Recognize and appreciate good, solid writing and storytelling in my college essay. While exceptional essays can make an impact, you also value essays that are well-written and effectively convey my story.

Overall, you are looking for applicants who not only have strong academic records but also possess personal qualities and character traits that align with the values and goals of the college or university. You want to see evidence of empathy, passion, uniqueness, leadership, and a commitment to service in my essay.

DMU Timestamp: August 19, 2023 16:30

Added August 25, 2023 at 9:30pm by Paul Allison
Title: Perplesity.AI thread

When it comes to reading and judging college admissions essays, admissions officers look for specific qualities and traits in applicants. Here are some character sketches of the admissions officers based on the information from the search results:

1. **Focus on personal attributes and skills**: Admissions officers have shifted their focus from solely academic achievements to personal traits and qualities associated with college success[1]. They want to see evidence of empathy and passion in applicants' essays[1].

2. **Holistic approach**: Admissions officers take a holistic approach to reviewing applications, considering not only academic achievements but also personality and character traits[2]. They believe that character attributes are important in admissions decisions[2].

3. **Looking for uniqueness**: Admissions officers are interested in what makes applicants unique and how they will contribute to the college campus[3]. They value qualities such as leadership, willingness to take risks, initiative, sense of social responsibility, and commitment to service[3].

4. **Academic excellence and character strength**: Admissions officers are looking for both academic excellence and character strength in applicants[3]. They want to see evidence of creativity, self-awareness, and a good command of grammar in college essays[3].

5. **Recognizing good writing and storytelling**: Admissions officers recognize and appreciate good, solid writing and storytelling in college essays[5]. While exceptional essays can make an impact, admissions officers also value essays that are well-written and effectively convey the applicant's story[5].

Overall, admissions officers are looking for applicants who not only have strong academic records but also possess personal qualities and character traits that align with the values and goals of the college or university. They want to see evidence of empathy, passion, uniqueness, leadership, and a commitment to service in applicants' essays.

Citations:
[1] https://writingcenterofprinceton.com/two-key-qualities-college-admissions-officers-want-to-see-in-your-common-app-essay/
[2] https://www.collegedata.com/resources/getting-in/9-personal-qualities-colleges-look-for-in-applicants
[3] https://bigfuture.collegeboard.org/plan-for-college/college-prep/stand-out/character-counts-what-are-colleges-looking-for
[4] https://files.eric.ed.gov/fulltext/ED608316.pdf
[5] https://admitreport.com/blog/college-essay-examples
[6] https://www.collegecovered.com/getting-into-college/bad-college-essay-topics/

DMU Timestamp: August 19, 2023 16:30

Added August 26, 2023 at 10:31am by Paul Allison
Title: Gray Tree Frog (Hyla versicolor)

DMU Timestamp: August 19, 2023 16:30

Added August 27, 2023 at 8:14pm by Paul Allison
Title: Thinking about audience

DMU Timestamp: August 19, 2023 16:30





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