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"Locomotive" Read Aloud

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Mar 12

Amelia Greene Amelia Greene (Mar 12 2018 2:59PM) : The lack of details on the faces is an interesting stylistic choice; it forces the focus from the characters to the concept of the train itself

Mar 12

Amelia Greene Amelia Greene (Mar 12 2018 3:07PM) : The narrator uses the pronoun "her" when referring to the train, and in when they speak about the engineer it implies that the train has a personality. Personification galore here!

Mar 19

Camille Jordan Camille Jordan (Mar 19 2018 7:57PM) : They told the story of the Locomotive while focusing on the people that interacted with the train. Adding a layer of importance and multiple point of views of the people on board.

Mar 22

Camille Jordan Camille Jordan (Mar 22 2018 5:10PM) : Personification more

The author uses personification a lot throughout the story. Portraying the train as a beast that need to be constantly feed while it hisses out steam. This makes it easy for the reader to imagine themselves there.

Mar 22

Camille Jordan Camille Jordan (Mar 22 2018 5:14PM) : Simplicity more

The simplicity of the story makes it perfect for all ages. While describing the train, the passengers and their emotions. The author managed to keep it simple enough to be perfect for all ages.

Apr 3

Laney Paharik Laney Paharik (Apr 03 2018 11:52AM) : I like the frequent use of onomatopoeias, it added flavor to the story. I found the story a little plain, but his helped.

Apr 3

Laney Paharik Laney Paharik (Apr 03 2018 11:55AM) : I could clearly imagine the sound of the train from the details in the book, also because I hear the trains passing through my city all the time.

Apr 3

Laney Paharik Laney Paharik (Apr 03 2018 11:58AM) : It was interesting the way the author referred to the train as pronoun “her”. It could make a child reading this think of the train as a girl rather than a thing, which I child can relate to.

Apr 24

Nathaniel Rake Nathaniel Rake (Apr 24 2018 11:24AM) : I like the use of the onomatopoeia in this section. It adds a nice feel and atmosphere that bring the story to life

May 7

Nathaniel Rake Nathaniel Rake (May 07 2018 12:03PM) : The book mentions things like "switchgrass" and "blue stem" without any pictures, which may be difficult for a child to comprehend. There are no context clues to help understand these more advanced terms

May 7

Nathaniel Rake Nathaniel Rake (May 07 2018 12:10PM) : The cadence of the words used makes the sound of a chugging train. The emphasis is on every second or third syllable giving that impression.

Jun 11

Christian Lewis Christian Lewis (Jun 11 2018 8:06PM) : The reader read in a tone of voice that helped captivate in listeners.

Jun 11

Christian Lewis Christian Lewis (Jun 11 2018 8:08PM) : The author did a good job describing how a steam locomotive works. If I were still a naive child, I would think I'm an expert in trains.

Jun 11

Christian Lewis Christian Lewis (Jun 11 2018 8:09PM) : The author also taught a little history.

Jul 5

Jen Bird Jen Bird (Jul 05 2018 9:29PM) : I like the way it explains how the locomotive starts up. I feel it's an interesting and fun way to introduce children to curiosity of the world's workings.

Jul 5

Jen Bird Jen Bird (Jul 05 2018 10:48PM) : There is the recurring phrase of "Westward, westward rolls the train". It is a reminder to the reader that the train and all her travelers are drawing closer to their destination and to whatever they're trying to get to.

Jul 5

Jen Bird Jen Bird (Jul 05 2018 11:12PM) : The ending is very nice. It explains that the characters have had a long, unforgettable,and hard trip, but that they reunited with those they love at the end. It's a sign the adventure is over, but a new one has just begun as they ride off into the sunset

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Jun 19

Heidi Gray Heidi Gray (Jun 19 2018 12:54PM) : I love that the very first sentence tells you that there is a new road but it isn't your ordinary road. He gives you a hint but not a super obvious one. This was an amazing hook to grab the readers attention to continue reading.

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Jul 11

Chia Chi Hsiao Chia Chi Hsiao (Jul 11 2018 4:24AM) : The rule of three is used in the story when they say "Clang-clang-clang-clang."

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Jun 19

Heidi Gray Heidi Gray (Jun 19 2018 1:08PM) : The way that the author puts in so many onomatopoeias really brings the train to life. You can almost see it right in front of you!

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Jul 11

Chia Chi Hsiao Chia Chi Hsiao (Jul 11 2018 4:31AM) : When the story uses "easy-easy" and "pushes-pushes," it uses repetition.

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Jun 19

Heidi Gray Heidi Gray (Jun 19 2018 1:30PM) : The author gives you some information on a train but also helps you picture what it all looks like at the same time.

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Jun 19

Heidi Gray Heidi Gray (Jun 19 2018 1:34PM) : I like it that he isn't just explaining exactly how a train sounds, looks, and works he sort of gives you a brief look at the history as well and things that happened afterwards.

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Jun 19

Heidi Gray Heidi Gray (Jun 19 2018 1:37PM) : The author gives you a wonderful image of what it would look like to travel in a train and things that you would see and hear.

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Everlyn Z Everlyn Z (Apr 18 2018 7:04AM) : pacing – more

Already half way through, the author maintains the story’s pace. Although the visual quality is questionable, as the words are blurry… the mood is heavily set by the recorded audio. The text itself, and the imagery it employs (through vivid description, onomatopoeia) breeds and encourages the audience to make their own connections in addition to the illustration.

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Jun 19

Heidi Gray Heidi Gray (Jun 19 2018 2:32PM) : The way they explain the train being heavy and the bridge being narrow and creaking helps you picture the whole scene in your head. It also helps you realize that it was scary and nerve racking experience.

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Everlyn Z Everlyn Z (Apr 18 2018 7:09AM) : buildup more

Buildup to this point fosters real-life facts (what would lead to the train exploding) with excitement through text and visuals. It continues to maintain the pacing, the imagery, and its drive since the start.

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Jun 19

Heidi Gray Heidi Gray (Jun 19 2018 2:36PM) : I think this is a very important part to have in this book because it truly shows you how vital it is that everyone does their job so that they get to their destination without being harmed.

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Jun 19

Heidi Gray Heidi Gray (Jun 19 2018 2:44PM) : This part of the book talks about what it was like to travel before the locomotive was invented and how far things have changed. It truly helps you see that this was a huge deal when it was invented.

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Jul 11

Chia Chi Hsiao Chia Chi Hsiao (Jul 11 2018 4:44AM) : The story uses a 3-part structure. At the beginning it starts with workers building a train track. The middle of the story is depicting passegers on a train and what they see. At the end is when the boy and his mom are reunited with his father.

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Jan 26

Evie Yin Evie Yin (Jan 26 2018 2:09PM) : the "clank clank clank" made it seem more realistic.

Jan 26

Evie Yin Evie Yin (Jan 26 2018 2:10PM) : I like how the illustrations helped me picture what was happening.

Jan 26

Evie Yin Evie Yin (Jan 26 2018 2:12PM) : I think all the details help make it more interesting.

Jan 30

mr. Jack Zoerb mr. Jack Zoerb (Jan 30 2018 7:39PM) : In the story the author states that "the passengers sold their things, all their things." This shows that the people trusted that the new and innovative locomotive was the era defining apparatus that the newspaper had told them it was.

Jan 30

mr. Jack Zoerb mr. Jack Zoerb (Jan 30 2018 7:55PM) : The author uses new words to describe the train. [Edited] more

The author uses many different adjectives to define the locomotive. Such words include, “mighty,” “iron horse,” “great machine,” and “beast.” What this represents is that the train was this new and powerful force that was going to drive the people of America into the future.

Jan 30

mr. Jack Zoerb mr. Jack Zoerb (Jan 30 2018 8:03PM) : The train is personified. more

The author personifies the locomotive by using phrases that gives the train human-like attributes. Examples are, “the firemen keep the engine fed,” and “the locomotive roars as it approaches.” This adds to the story by making the train seem as if it were a character in the story and not just an object.

Feb 5

Hannah Hales Hannah Hales (Feb 05 2018 7:19PM) : I love that they use simple language that is simple to understand and the simple words keep children involved.

Feb 5

Hannah Hales Hannah Hales (Feb 05 2018 7:20PM) : I think it's interesting how the illustrator uses the authors words to create an feeling of exclamation.

Feb 5

Hannah Hales Hannah Hales (Feb 05 2018 7:24PM) : This is one of my favorite story I've read because I can connect to it. When I was young I loved trains and went on a ride with my family a couple of years ago.

Feb 5

Hannah Hales Hannah Hales (Feb 05 2018 7:29PM) : This book shows how big of an advancement the railroad really was

Feb 28

Aly Getty Aly Getty (Feb 28 2018 2:32PM) : "clank clank clank" is used throughout the book. This does use the rule of three.

Feb 28

Aly Getty Aly Getty (Feb 28 2018 2:34PM) : "The people had packed, and shipped, and sold their things." This is another use of the rule of three.

Feb 28

Aly Getty Aly Getty (Feb 28 2018 2:39PM) : This story follows a journey. The train, along with it's passengers, make a journey across the country, passing mountains and train stations.

Mar 12

Amelia Greene Amelia Greene (Mar 12 2018 2:56PM) : The repetition of "Clang clang clang" adds rhythm and a sense of pacing. [Edited]

Mar 30

Ben Huggins Ben Huggins (Mar 30 2018 9:04AM) : The use of onomatopoeia words by the author can really be used to catch the attention of child readers to maintain their interest and get them to continue reading on. [Edited]

Mar 30

Ben Huggins Ben Huggins (Mar 30 2018 9:09AM) : The integration of illustrations in that they aren't too extravagant and hard on the eyes, and didn't usually take up more than half of a page was very well done.

Mar 30

Ben Huggins Ben Huggins (Mar 30 2018 9:22AM) : The fact that the author kept the story simple while managing to tell a good story about the train, its passengers, and its journey across the country could make it a particularly fun book for readers of all ages.

Apr 18

Everlyn Z Everlyn Z (Apr 18 2018 7:18AM) : The overall arc of this story is very clear. more

The overarching storyline resembles the story itself; there are ups and downs in excitement levels, and there are ups and downs in the different sceneries, landforms, and geologic characteristics. Just as there is a clear beginning, middle, and end to the story, there is a clear beginning, middle, and end when it comes to the train tracks themselves. While there may be twist and turns along the way, there are also a myriad of factors that keep the train, the story, together like glue.

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