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Currents

1 By Hannah Bottomy Voskuil

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Mar 22

Chia Chi Hsiao Chia Chi Hsiao (Mar 22 2018 9:35PM) : This entire story is told backwards.

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2 Gary drank single malt in the night, out on the porch that leaned toward the ocean. His mother, distracted, had shut off the floodlights and he did not protest against the dark.

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Nov 6

Florence Paull Florence Paull (Nov 06 2017 7:19PM) : Single Malt is a type of whiskey, which makes me think that he was distressed. Also the fact that he did not protest against the porch lights being turned off shows that something was bothering him.

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Dec 10

Mark Padgett Mark Padgett (Dec 10 2017 5:28PM) : I agree with you, something was wrong and he was struggling with whatever it is. C,P [Edited]

Jan 23

Luke Ingermann Luke Ingermann (Jan 23 2018 1:50PM) : (C) I can easily connect this comment to the other one's throughout the four stories.

Jan 23

Bryn McCarthy Bryn McCarthy (Jan 23 2018 3:06PM) : I agree. Things like that sometimes point to signs of Post Traumatic Stress Disorder.

Feb 27

Aidan Young Aidan Young (Feb 27 2018 4:11PM) : That's probably true, whiskey is a depressant, so it makes sense that he would use this in a time of distress

Feb 27

Aidan Young Aidan Young (Feb 27 2018 4:12PM) : It's interesting that you know so much about whiskey.

Dec 20

Jack Naglick Jack Naglick (Dec 20 2017 6:59PM) : Maybe he is trying to forget about what he saw. (P)

Dec 30

Tyler Bickham Tyler Bickham (Dec 30 2017 10:28PM) : Why is he drinking in the dark? Is he upset about something? A

Jan 8

Michael Simutis Michael Simutis (Jan 08 2018 8:40PM) : Single malt is defined as "whiskey unblended with any other malt." L

May 31

Audrey Phipps Audrey Phipps (May 31 2018 12:12PM) : I never knew that, I thought that all malts were just another version of milk shakes. I'm not that familiar with alcohol though so what does "unblended" mean, is it not watered down? (A)

Jan 27

Isabel Arroyo Isabel Arroyo (Jan 27 2018 4:45PM) : Usually when someone is drinking alone in the dark, it means they are trying to forget something or have been in a bad situation.

Feb 27

Aidan Young Aidan Young (Feb 27 2018 4:14PM) : Unfortunately that's true, I think people should be able to find less unhealthy ways to deal with stress.

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Nov 1

Jane White Jane White (Nov 01 2017 11:33AM) : Picturing

This makes me think of the beach house that my family rents sometimes, it has a porch and yard facing the ocean.

Nov 8

Student Kate Nelson Student Kate Nelson (Nov 08 2017 11:30AM) : This made me think of that, too! Personally, we also have a family beach house and we all like to sit on the porch and hang out or go watch the sunset.

Nov 6

Brenda Paull Brenda Paull (Nov 06 2017 4:08PM) : How old is he? It isn't likely if he was under 21 that he would be allowed to drink.

Nov 6

Florence Paull Florence Paull (Nov 06 2017 7:29PM) : I don't know how old he is, but as it mentions later on about the twelve yr old girls and their Grandma, I think he was their father, as they don't mention any other parents on the scene. That would make him around 30.

Nov 6

Brenda Paull Brenda Paull (Nov 06 2017 4:36PM) : Looking back, he might have been drinking to try to forget about the events of the day.

Nov 8

Student Kate Nelson Student Kate Nelson (Nov 08 2017 11:29AM) : Malt is a barley or other grain that has been steeped, germinated, and dried, used especially for brewing or distilling and vinegar-making. (L)

Mar 1

Erin Coleman Erin Coleman (Mar 01 2018 4:44PM) : I was wondering malt was. Thanks for your explanation!

Nov 24

student Tycho Collins student Tycho Collins (Nov 24 2017 6:38AM) : This makes me think of a family living by the beach or are on vacation.

Jan 8

Dylan Perkins Dylan Perkins (Jan 08 2018 4:29PM) : This makes me feel like what my dad does every night out on our porch. C

Jan 22

Luke Ingermann Luke Ingermann (Jan 22 2018 8:39PM) : What exactly is single malt? (L)

Mar 22

Chia Chi Hsiao Chia Chi Hsiao (Mar 22 2018 9:38PM) : I think it is a kind of whisky.

Jan 31

Lauren Grover Lauren Grover (Jan 31 2018 7:21PM) : This makes me think that Gary is thinking about something. I find that a lot of the time, people will drink alcohol when they are in deep thought.

Feb 7

Kate Southerland Kate Southerland (Feb 07 2018 10:41AM) : I know that single malt is a type of whiskey, but I researched it to find out how strong it is. This helped me understand how Gary was feeling, and how he was trying to drown his sorrows.

Jun 1

Jaden Klebba Jaden Klebba (Jun 01 2018 10:49AM) : P

Based on the author saying that the porch “leaned toward the ocean” makes me feel like this is primarily about the weather and ocean. When one leans towards something it is either because things generally revolve around that thing or they like the thing. The title is also “Currents”.

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Nov 1

Jane White Jane White (Nov 01 2017 11:37AM) : Directly to the story.

I think, having read a little more into the story, that the story is going back to front, so the begining of the text is actually the end of the story.

Nov 9

Andrew Bailey Andrew Bailey (Nov 09 2017 10:56AM) : I think it can be comforting sometimes to just be in the dark and think over things.

Dec 4

Hayden Anderson Hayden Anderson (Dec 04 2017 11:27AM) : When I cant see anything in the dark, iit messes with me, I do not find comfort Haha... -Response

Dec 4

Hayden Anderson Hayden Anderson (Dec 04 2017 11:26AM) : I like how quickly the story starts - Direct Response

Jan 11

Elijah McMillin Elijah McMillin (Jan 11 2018 10:00AM) : P: So far it seems like a family is on the beach and it's freezing outside.

Jan 20

Damien NEZAR Damien NEZAR (Jan 20 2018 4:40PM) : Maybe he liked it

I have two suspicions for this.
1) he didn’t;t want his mom to see that he was drinking alcohol
2) he was just enjoying it and not complaining because he saw how fast life can be taken away.P

Jan 23

Bryn McCarthy Bryn McCarthy (Jan 23 2018 3:07PM) : Sometimes, after a tragedy happens, people like the darkness because it gives them a chance to reflect.

3 Before that, his mother, Josey, tucked in her two shivering twelve-year-old granddaughters.

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Nov 1

Jane White Jane White (Nov 01 2017 11:49AM) : I think they all must be really shook up, because a boy died and they had to help find him, which would be a really horrifying experience.

Nov 6

Brenda Paull Brenda Paull (Nov 06 2017 4:40PM) : I agree. They might have also felt some guilt as well even though there was nothing that they could have done.

This was why their mother is telling them that they have to go swimming the next day. It’s understandable why they would never want to go swimming or near water again after what they’ve been through.

Nov 6

Florence Paull Florence Paull (Nov 06 2017 7:21PM) : So was Gary their father? Was the boy who drowned related to them? [Edited]

Nov 15

Asher Merchent Asher Merchent (Nov 15 2017 9:43AM) : C: Gary is the father of the two girls featured in the story, but the boy was not related to them. If he was related to them, they would tell us when the grandmother tucked the kids in. [Edited]

Nov 24

student Tycho Collins student Tycho Collins (Nov 24 2017 6:36AM) : What type of language is this? using before that at the beginning of every sentence?

Mar 1

Erin Coleman Erin Coleman (Mar 01 2018 4:38PM) : I think it's just repetition.

Dec 18

Olivia McNaughton Olivia McNaughton (Dec 18 2017 7:23PM) : I wonder if the twelve year old girls are Gary's daughters, or are the his nieces? A

Jan 23

Lilla Carroll Lilla Carroll (Jan 23 2018 11:30AM) : Are they shivering from the cold, or out of fear? (a)

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4 “I want you both to go swimming first thing tomorrow. Can’t have two seals like you afraid of the water.”

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Dec 10

Mark Padgett Mark Padgett (Dec 10 2017 5:31PM) : Something bad must have happened in the water. P

Dec 11

Yerin Yang Yerin Yang (Dec 11 2017 10:36PM) : The mother means that the girls are amazing swimmers, but the event that happened earlier the day traumatized them in a way that they are now afraid of the water. S

Dec 30

Tyler Bickham Tyler Bickham (Dec 30 2017 10:41PM) : I thought that the girls were shivering because they were cold but now I think they were shivering because they were in shock. P

Jan 8

Karsyn Bierbaum Karsyn Bierbaum (Jan 08 2018 1:08PM) : I agree. I wonder who told them that they should go swimming the next day, whether it was Gary or his Mom. They probably will be scared of the water now. (P) [Edited]

Jan 8

Dylan Perkins Dylan Perkins (Jan 08 2018 4:36PM) : This line right here reminds me of the time my Dad threw me into a pool when I was 2 to help teach me how to not be afraid of water and to swim. C

May 31

Audrey Phipps Audrey Phipps (May 31 2018 11:49AM) : I can understand why the mom wants the kids back into the water as soon as possible so that their fear doesn't become overpowering, but they will still need time. How much time should the mom give her kids to heal? (A)

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Jan 8

Michael Simutis Michael Simutis (Jan 08 2018 8:48PM) : Does the Gary's mother not know what happened, or did she know and just not want them to be afraid of the water. A

Jan 11

Elijah McMillin Elijah McMillin (Jan 11 2018 10:06AM) : A: now either I was right and it's cold out and the grandma is just brutal or they were just shivering from trying to swim.

Jan 22

Luke Ingermann Luke Ingermann (Jan 22 2018 8:39PM) : I bet the girls don't go swimming for a long time! (P)

Jan 23

Lilla Carroll Lilla Carroll (Jan 23 2018 11:31AM) : I think that someone they know must have died in the water earlier that day. This would explain why the girls are shivering and why the grandmother assumes they fear water. (p)

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Nov 6

Brenda Paull Brenda Paull (Nov 06 2017 4:34PM) : The two girls are traumatized by their experience.

Nov 7

Florence Paull Florence Paull (Nov 07 2017 8:10AM) : This hints that something bad probably happened in the water.

Nov 15

Asher Merchent Asher Merchent (Nov 15 2017 9:22AM) : P: Because the story is telling itself backwards, I believe that something will happen to the girls that has to do with water. [Edited]

Nov 24

student Tycho Collins student Tycho Collins (Nov 24 2017 6:48AM) : Something bad will happen.

Jan 8

Karsyn Bierbaum Karsyn Bierbaum (Jan 08 2018 1:03PM) : I think it is a lot to ask for the girls to go swimming the next day, especially after you find out what happened. (D)

Jan 23

Bryn McCarthy Bryn McCarthy (Jan 23 2018 3:08PM) : This hints that the mother doesn't want them to be affected by the situation, even though it is probably not going to happen tat way.

Jan 29

Aly Getty Aly Getty (Jan 29 2018 12:24PM) : This makes me feel like something bad is gonna happen.

Jan 31

Lauren Grover Lauren Grover (Jan 31 2018 7:22PM) : This makes me think that this story is going to be about these two girls and their past experience in the water, which might have been a bad one. P

Mar 1

Erin Coleman Erin Coleman (Mar 01 2018 6:00PM) : Doesn't the mother know how traumatized these girls are?

Mar 22

Chia Chi Hsiao Chia Chi Hsiao (Mar 22 2018 9:43PM) : Two girls are described as seals so they're probably use to being in the water; however, this experience probably made them afraid of the water.

Mar 22

Chia Chi Hsiao Chia Chi Hsiao (Mar 22 2018 9:44PM) : these girls are twins.

5 Before that, one of the girls held the hand of a wordless Filipino boy. His was the first hand she’d ever held. They were watching the paramedics lift the boy’s dead brother into an ambulance.

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Dec 19

Olivia McNaughton Olivia McNaughton (Dec 19 2017 11:21AM) : The girl wanted to comfort the boy because he had just lost his brother. She went out of her comfort zone to help him.

Jun 1

Jaden Klebba Jaden Klebba (Jun 01 2018 10:53AM) : C A

The girl seems very sympathetic. How did the boy die? No wonder why the grandma wants to quickly reverse the negative thoughts of the ocean in her grandkids minds.

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Nov 6

Florence Paull Florence Paull (Nov 06 2017 7:22PM) : This is the brother of the boy who drowned. [Edited]

Nov 8

Student Kate Nelson Student Kate Nelson (Nov 08 2017 11:31AM) : I think what they mean by "wordless Filipino boy" is that he is deaf. (P)

Nov 9

Andrew Bailey Andrew Bailey (Nov 09 2017 11:00AM) : I think that the Filipino boy is stunned that he lost his brother that quickly.

Dec 11

Yerin Yang Yerin Yang (Dec 11 2017 10:35PM) : No, I think he meant that the boy is stunned/shocked that he cannot speak.

Dec 18

Olivia McNaughton Olivia McNaughton (Dec 18 2017 7:27PM) : I agree, I think the boy is so shocked that his brother is dead that he can't find anything to say.

Nov 24

student Tycho Collins student Tycho Collins (Nov 24 2017 6:37AM) : I think wordless means he is out of words about what happened.

Jun 1

Jaden Klebba Jaden Klebba (Jun 01 2018 10:53AM) : I agree! He must have been so shocked on how quick it happened. I wonder what happened so quickly. C

Dec 30

Tyler Bickham Tyler Bickham (Dec 30 2017 10:00PM) : It sounds like learning to swim did not go so well. I wonder what happened that caused the boy to die. A

Jan 8

Michael Simutis Michael Simutis (Jan 08 2018 8:50PM) : I could be due to the ocean currents, hence the name, or it could be due to the boy's lack of swimming ability. P

Jan 29

Aly Getty Aly Getty (Jan 29 2018 12:26PM) : The boy is in such shock and grief that there is nothing for him to say.

Mar 22

Chia Chi Hsiao Chia Chi Hsiao (Mar 22 2018 9:32PM) : I wonder if this means he doesn't speak English or if he is in shock.

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Nov 6

Brenda Paull Brenda Paull (Nov 06 2017 4:35PM) : This shows that she went beyond her comfort zone and did something that she wouldn't normally do to help.

Dec 30

Tyler Bickham Tyler Bickham (Dec 30 2017 10:31PM) : I think that it is a little strange that a 12 year old has never held a hand before. C

Jan 20

Damien NEZAR Damien NEZAR (Jan 20 2018 4:47PM) : Young Age

She probably has before like a parent or teacher but I think she is a bit young don’t you think to hold another persons hand at 12 years old. Those emotions aren’t real at that young age they don’t know/understand it fully or properly. C

May 31

Audrey Phipps Audrey Phipps (May 31 2018 12:26PM) : Why would this be the first hand she's ever held? Even if they do mean the first person around her age I would still find this odd because when I was about 5 and 6 my friends and I would hold hands and skip around for fun.

It’s possible that she doesn’t like be touched very much and she wanted to express sympathy for the boy. (A)

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Dec 4

Hayden Anderson Hayden Anderson (Dec 04 2017 11:29AM) : Very sad, it's a terrible thought thinking of pulling my little brother dead from the water... The book definitely gives some teaser though in that sentence that makes it interesting. There have been many People that have drowned - Direct Response [Edited]

Jan 8

Michael Simutis Michael Simutis (Jan 08 2018 8:43PM) : This sight is likely the reason Gary was drinking. C

Jan 11

Elijah McMillin Elijah McMillin (Jan 11 2018 10:08AM) : S: That turned dark very fast, I wasn't even expecting that!

Jan 22

Luke Ingermann Luke Ingermann (Jan 22 2018 8:41PM) : I wonder if he died because he didn't know how to swim? (A)

Feb 7

Kate Southerland Kate Southerland (Feb 07 2018 10:33AM) : Could this be why Gary is drinking?

Feb 7

Kate Southerland Kate Southerland (Feb 07 2018 10:34AM) : I think that this story is going to be about how the Filipino boy"s brother died.

6 At this time, the other girl heaved over a toilet in the cabana.

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Nov 1

Jane White Jane White (Nov 01 2017 11:40AM) : Infering

I think the girl is feeling nauseated because she saw the boy’s dead hand bouncing.

Dec 10

Mark Padgett Mark Padgett (Dec 10 2017 5:40PM) : I think that too. C, inference.

Jan 8

Dylan Perkins Dylan Perkins (Jan 08 2018 4:54PM) : I agree if I saw someone that died in the water I continuously swim in it would get me scared of swimming again

Nov 6

Brenda Paull Brenda Paull (Nov 06 2017 4:15PM) : This is a cabana. It's interesting that there would be a toilet in there.

http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/commons/1/1d/Cabana_

Jan 30

Mason Kimball Mason Kimball (Jan 30 2018 12:02PM) : I agree, you wouldn't think that would be normal, however their might be different types of cabanas allowing the enclosed space/plumbing for a toilet, but still a little strange. (c.)

Jan 23

Lilla Carroll Lilla Carroll (Jan 23 2018 11:38AM) : I enjoyed the simplistic style used by the author. I think that this story lends itself well to that because the extra space and simple language creates a larger emotional impact. (c)

Jan 27

Isabel Arroyo Isabel Arroyo (Jan 27 2018 4:38PM) : I infer that the girl has gotten sick from seeing a person dead in the water, I think it is interesting how the author is very blunt and tells the story like it is.

Jan 30

Mason Kimball Mason Kimball (Jan 30 2018 12:04PM) : I think so too, I think that's the reason they were shivering at the beginning too. (c.)

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7 Before that, the girl who would feel nauseated watched as the drowned boy’s hand slid off the stretcher and bounced along the porch rail. Nobody placed the hand back on the stretcher, and it bounced and dragged and bounced.

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Dec 11

Yerin Yang Yerin Yang (Dec 11 2017 10:37PM) : This described it in a very detailed way - I can imagine how horrifying it would be. C

Dec 19

Olivia McNaughton Olivia McNaughton (Dec 19 2017 10:15AM) : Watching the boys hand bounce off the stretcher is what made her nauseous. P

Jan 27

Isabel Arroyo Isabel Arroyo (Jan 27 2018 4:41PM) : I think it is important that the author stated that no one replaced the hand because it makes the girl feel the reality of him being dead and it leaves that image in her head.

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Jan 8

Karsyn Bierbaum Karsyn Bierbaum (Jan 08 2018 1:02PM) : I think it's interesting how the two girls had very different reactions to the events that played out. (C)

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Jan 29

Aly Getty Aly Getty (Jan 29 2018 12:30PM) : This sentence gave me chills. It is sad to think how a life was lost so quickly.

8 Before that, Gary saw the brown hair sink and resurface as the body bobbed. At first he mistook it for seaweed.

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Nov 8

Student Kate Nelson Student Kate Nelson (Nov 08 2017 11:32AM) : A cabana is a cabin, hut, or shelter, especially one at a beach or swimming pool. (L)

Nov 15

Asher Merchent Asher Merchent (Nov 15 2017 9:52AM) : P: Maybe this is the reason why Gary was drinking at the start? Maybe he was upset at himself because he didn't realize that it was a body and blames himself for the death of this kid. [Edited]

Dec 11

Yerin Yang Yerin Yang (Dec 11 2017 10:38PM) : I hope he doesn't blame himself...it wasn't Gary's or anyone's fault.

Jan 8

Dylan Perkins Dylan Perkins (Jan 08 2018 4:56PM) : Well someone that would of been the only one that saw the tragic event but didn't help because he didn't know he probably would have blamed himself for the whole event. C [Edited]

Dec 18

Olivia McNaughton Olivia McNaughton (Dec 18 2017 7:31PM) : The boy drowned because he was still in the water when the riptide strengthened. P

Jan 8

Karsyn Bierbaum Karsyn Bierbaum (Jan 08 2018 1:06PM) : I think that Gary feels horrified after he realizes that it was not seaweed, which is probably why he was drinking at the end of the day. He was probably trying to forget what happened. (C)

Jan 27

Isabel Arroyo Isabel Arroyo (Jan 27 2018 4:44PM) : I think that once Gary saw that it was a person it became very sickening, which is why later on in the day he is drinking.

Jun 1

Jaden Klebba Jaden Klebba (Jun 01 2018 10:58AM) : The way the author organizes the order of events is new. I wonder why she chose to do it this way. It seems like she wants to show that all the way in the beginning it seemed like an innocent day but in the end saddening. S

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Nov 1

Jane White Jane White (Nov 01 2017 11:42AM) : Infering

The boy must have drowned.

Dec 4

Hayden Anderson Hayden Anderson (Dec 04 2017 11:34AM) : The boy drowned

Dec 10

Mark Padgett Mark Padgett (Dec 10 2017 5:39PM) : The boy sadly drowned in the riptide. C, inference.

Jan 11

Elijah McMillin Elijah McMillin (Jan 11 2018 10:11AM) : C: I did not expect this was the way the story was going to go.

Jan 30

Mason Kimball Mason Kimball (Jan 30 2018 12:09PM) : The continual "Before that" statements are getting a little annoying. (c.)

Jan 31

Lauren Grover Lauren Grover (Jan 31 2018 7:23PM) : This shows that the boy must have drowned. C

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Jan 7

Asiyah Herrera Asiyah Herrera (Jan 07 2018 4:47PM) : He is trying to forget. (I)

9 Before that, thirty-five people struggled out of the water at the Coast Guard’s command. A lifeguard shouted over Jet Ski motors about the increasing strength of the riptide.

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Nov 9

Andrew Bailey Andrew Bailey (Nov 09 2017 10:57AM) : The rip currents were high, which is why the people had to struggle.

Jan 30

Mason Kimball Mason Kimball (Jan 30 2018 12:06PM) : This seems to indicate this was a pretty crowded beach if there were that many people in the water. (c.)

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Jan 8

Dylan Perkins Dylan Perkins (Jan 08 2018 4:57PM) : This would have been the reason why the child died because of strengthening riptides and he would have probably been to small to fight it or try to escape. s

Jan 31

Lauren Grover Lauren Grover (Jan 31 2018 7:24PM) : This makes me think that the boy drowned due to the riptide, or the currents, hence the title of the story. C

Feb 7

Kate Southerland Kate Southerland (Feb 07 2018 10:36AM) : This sentence connects to the title of the story because it leads the reader to believe that the riptide/current that took the boy is reason the story is titled "Currents".

10 Before that the thirty-five people, including Gary and the two girls, formed a human chain and trolled the waters for the body of a Filipino boy. The boy had gone under twenty minutes earlier and never come back up.

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Jan 11

Elijah McMillin Elijah McMillin (Jan 11 2018 10:13AM) : P: That's probably why the two girls didn't want to go swimming.

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May 31

Audrey Phipps Audrey Phipps (May 31 2018 12:42PM) : To actually die from drowning you must be underwater for about 3-4 minutes; so it surprises me why no one tried to help him sooner if they knew it had been 20 minutes. (L)

Jun 1

Jaden Klebba Jaden Klebba (Jun 01 2018 11:00AM) : The water must've been so strong and controlling. S

11 Before that, a lifeguard sprinted up the beach, shouting for volunteers. The two girls, resting lightly on their sandy bodyboards, stood up to help.

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12 Before that, a Filipino boy pulled on the torpid lifeguard’s ankle and gestured desperately at the waves. My brother, he said.

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Nov 8

Student Kate Nelson Student Kate Nelson (Nov 08 2017 11:34AM) : Torpid means mentally or physically inactive. (L)

Jan 7

Asiyah Herrera Asiyah Herrera (Jan 07 2018 4:45PM) : Not very fond of the fact that they keep calling him Filipino boy, its kind of annoying. (C?)

Jan 30

Mason Kimball Mason Kimball (Jan 30 2018 11:58AM) : I agree! I feel like they could've found a better descriptor. Honestly this one borders on racist to continually identify someone that way. (c.)

Jan 31

Lauren Grover Lauren Grover (Jan 31 2018 7:25PM) : I thought so too! It would be more respectful if they had either found a better way to describe him, or told his name. C

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Nov 9

Andrew Bailey Andrew Bailey (Nov 09 2017 10:57AM) : The lifeguard didnt see the boy drown.

Dec 20

Jack Naglick Jack Naglick (Dec 20 2017 6:49PM) : Torpid- mentally or physically inactive (L)

Jan 29

Aly Getty Aly Getty (Jan 29 2018 12:29PM) : This helps a lot!

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13 Before that, it was a simple summer day.

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Nov 6

Brenda Paull Brenda Paull (Nov 06 2017 4:11PM) : The story is a bit difficult to follow at first since you don't know what is going on.

Nov 9

Andrew Bailey Andrew Bailey (Nov 09 2017 10:58AM) : It is backwards. There are so many modifiers in the form of "Before that,"

Dec 10

Mark Padgett Mark Padgett (Dec 10 2017 5:35PM) : As I continued to read I understood what was going on better. C

Nov 15

Asher Merchent Asher Merchent (Nov 15 2017 9:31AM) : S: The use of reverse-chronology helps tell the story in a more interesting way, starting with the end of the day and going further and further back telling what happened. [Edited]

Jan 23

Lilla Carroll Lilla Carroll (Jan 23 2018 11:35AM) : I agree! I think that revealing what happened before explaining how it happened, made the story much more interesting. (c)

Nov 15

Asher Merchent Asher Merchent (Nov 15 2017 9:55AM) : P: What this tells us is that, normally, this is a very peaceful town and this is the first time something like this has happened in a while, [Edited]

Dec 4

Hayden Anderson Hayden Anderson (Dec 04 2017 11:31AM) : This story is a pain to follow it makes no sense how the author organized the story, it by no means follows the correct MLA Format. -Choice [Edited]

Dec 20

Jack Naglick Jack Naglick (Dec 20 2017 7:00PM) : I'm not trying to be rude, but I believe that MLA refers to research papers and not works of fiction. (C?)

Jan 11

Elijah McMillin Elijah McMillin (Jan 11 2018 10:17AM) : C: I just looked it up and MLA is a research paper not a works or fiction.

Dec 11

Yerin Yang Yerin Yang (Dec 11 2017 10:34PM) : I had to read this backwards starting from the end to understand everything. S, C

Dec 20

Jack Naglick Jack Naglick (Dec 20 2017 7:05PM) : This illustrates how quickly things can change. (S)

Jan 20

Damien NEZAR Damien NEZAR (Jan 20 2018 4:43PM) : I agree [Edited]

I agree with you, people don’t realize how quick life can be taken away from them or even yourself. C

Dec 30

Tyler Bickham Tyler Bickham (Dec 30 2017 10:37PM) : It was interesting that the author started at the end of a story and went backwards. It was a unique twist. C

Jan 8

Karsyn Bierbaum Karsyn Bierbaum (Jan 08 2018 12:59PM) : This sentence shows how a day can go from boring and nice to a complete disaster in the blink of an eye. (D)

Jan 11

Elijah McMillin Elijah McMillin (Jan 11 2018 10:14AM) : S: If you were to read this story backwards it would be in order then.

Jan 20

Damien NEZAR Damien NEZAR (Jan 20 2018 4:36PM) : Proof

This shows how a normal day can turn into something like this without people realizing it or thinking about what can happen.C

Jan 20

Damien NEZAR Damien NEZAR (Jan 20 2018 4:42PM) : If you read it

If you read the story front to back then back to front then front to back again, it all makes more sense. The story line is more understandable P

Jan 22

Luke Ingermann Luke Ingermann (Jan 22 2018 8:40PM) : This reminds me of t.v. shows I watch sometimes where they start backwards. (C)

Jan 23

Lilla Carroll Lilla Carroll (Jan 23 2018 11:34AM) : Okay, well, I love this story!

The final line was very impactful to me and shows how terrible things can happen so quickly on seemingly ordinary days. This story is about unexpected tragedy. ©

Jan 27

Isabel Arroyo Isabel Arroyo (Jan 27 2018 4:44PM) : This is a very interesting format and at first it was very confusing, but the author did a good job of hooking the reader in and resolving the confusion later on.

Jan 29

Aly Getty Aly Getty (Jan 29 2018 12:28PM) : I like how the author chose to approach this story differently by creating it backwards and starting each event with "Before that,"

Mar 1

Erin Coleman Erin Coleman (Mar 01 2018 4:40PM) : I like how the story used "Before that" at the beginning of each sentence. It really engaged me in the story. (C)

Mar 1

Erin Coleman Erin Coleman (Mar 01 2018 4:42PM) : This story just goes to show how something traumatic can happen in a normal day. It also teaches readers to enjoy every single day because something unexpected could happen. (S) [Edited]

May 31

Audrey Phipps Audrey Phipps (May 31 2018 10:30AM) : I've seems shows and sometimes movies do something similar where they start in a horrible situation and then show the events leading up to it. Once they get to where they left off they continue the story in a more traditional format. (S)

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Dec 20

Jack Naglick Jack Naglick (Dec 20 2017 6:54PM) : It is interesting how the story goes backwards. I wonder why the author chose this method? (A)

Jan 23

Bryn McCarthy Bryn McCarthy (Jan 23 2018 3:09PM) : I think that it was partially to give it an edgeish feel. It doesn't give as much of an effect if you read it backwards. [Edited]

Feb 7

Kate Southerland Kate Southerland (Feb 07 2018 10:38AM) : I would agree. The use of this technique frames the story in a different way, yet manages to engage the reader.

Jan 8

Michael Simutis Michael Simutis (Jan 08 2018 5:21PM) : This is a completely different way of writing a story, which goes against most techniques for writing. [Edited]

The author does not use suspense at all, instead he tells you the ending and then works his way backwards, but it doesn’t have the opposite effect. It creates instead a feeling of dread making you wonder why did this happen. S

Jan 23

Bryn McCarthy Bryn McCarthy (Jan 23 2018 3:04PM) : I tried reading the story as written and then i read it "backwards". The story was easier to understand.

Feb 27

Aidan Young Aidan Young (Feb 27 2018 4:15PM) : Josey seems to be a grandmother that doesn't do well with feelings, she makes it clear that her granddaughters will be going swimming no matter what.

Feb 27

Aidan Young Aidan Young (Feb 27 2018 4:18PM) : It's taken her 12 years to hold her first hand. She's obviously careful with who she mingles with

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