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“How Dee plan to part to be part of Asalamalakim life”

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I waited for her to finish using the restroom because even though she has been physically hurt she is still have this unbelievable habit of getting up early right before mom and I. I came from a poor family which seems to me as a curstcurse.My mom is the type of person that most people would describe as fearless and possess this , posessing incredible strengths. She does jobs that some men wouldn’t dare to do. My younger sister Maggie have has become this miserable person after the incident that had occurred in the other house a decade ago. She is mumbling to herself about this incident have destroyed her life for good which I don’t really consider true. In fact, the incident that occurred was an excitement for me because I hated every corner about our old house. Now the house that we are living in isn’t any better: scratches on the wall and holes on them as windows. I always dreamed of living leaving this horrible house to much nicer one and feel like I belong in that life style.

I waited for her to finish using the restroom because even though she has been physically hurt she is still have this unbelievable habit of getting up early right before mom and I. I came from a poor family which seems to me as a curse. My mom is the type of person that most people would describe as fearless, posessing incredible strengths. She does jobs that some men wouldn’t dare to do. My younger sister Maggie has become this miserable person after the incident that had occurred in the other house a decade ago. She is mumbling to herself about this incident have destroyed her life for good which I don’t really consider true. In fact, the incident that occurred was an excitement for me because I hated every corner about our old house. Now the house that we are living in isn’t any better: scratches on the wall and holes on them as windows. I always dreamed of leaving this horrible house to much nicer one and feel like I belong in that life style.

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I waited for her to finish using the restroom because even though she has been physically hurt she is still have this unbelievable habit of getting up early right mom and I. I came from a poor family which seems to me as a curstcurse.

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Paul Allison (Nov 27 2019 11:28PM) : "habit of getting up early right mom and I." Come again? I'm not sure what you mean by this phrase.
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My mom is the type of person that most people would describe as fearless and possess this , posessing incredible strengths.

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My younger sister Maggie have has become this miserable person after the incident that had occurred in the other house a decade ago.

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She is mumbling to herself about this incident have destroyed her life for good which I don’t really consider true.

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My so long dream came true when I met him.

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On a monday afternoon, I met Asalamalakim, the son of the richest man of the whole town. He was this short looking guy with long hair all over his head. To me God had provided everything for their family. This was the ideal family I wished to came from or to be part of. He was a bit older than I was but I didn’t mind. I thought to myself that if I could be a part of this family, it could bring an end to my miserable life. I decided to start a relationship with him so I could be part of his luxury. I have always been a great looking girl and so making myself noticed by him would be the easier part of the plan. I didn’t tell my mom about what I was about to accomplish because she would pull out her annoying lessons of life how we shouldn’t take advantage of people for their wealth but what did I cared.

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abdallah sevede abdallah sevede (Nov 26 2019 9:29PM) : the story is about Dee telling her version of the story and how and why she decided to marry Hakim. And how she envy his family
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Denieris Marte Denieris Marte (Nov 26 2019 9:32PM) : the story is a short time story in which the personality of Dee is define as woman who like luxurious life
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