My favorite word is loyalty
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My favorite word is loyalty because showing loyalty makes you earn a lot of respect from everyone, many people pretend to be loyal to others but really aint loyal at all. I'll rather pick loyalty over love anyday, people can love you today and won't love you tomorrow but loyalty always stays the same no matter what.
I know many people that I knew for about five years and I never taught they will really stab me in the back. Someone you meet tomorrow can show you loyalty over someone you knew for many years, in this generation a lot of wanna be something their not and that's really sad.
I am really shocked about how your own friends can turn their back on you anyday. Because where im from it's all about loyalty no matter what, if you know you aint loyal don't pretend to be loyal because some people will really kill you for not being loyal where I'm from.
Loyalty and love is not the same and never will be. We can use a relationship as an example, a man can tell a female “ I Will Always Love You”. but months later their no longer together so to me the word love don't really mean nothing to me and thats why when someone tells me they love me i just respond back with an ok cause 95% out of 100% times they really don't mean it so if you aint loyal to me get out my face with that fake love of yours partner.
My favorite word is loyalty because showing loyalty makes you earn a lot of respect from everyone, many people pretend to be loyal to others but really aint loyal at all.
I'll rather pick loyalty over love anyday, people can love you today and won't love you tomorrow but loyalty always stays the same no matter what.
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My favorite word is loyalty because showing loyalty makes you earn a lot of respect from everyone, many people pretend to be loyal to others but really aint loyal at all. I'll rather pick loyalty over love anyday, people can love you today and won't love you tomorrow but loyalty always stays the same no matter what.
I know many people that I knew for about five years and I never taught they will really stab me in the back. Someone you meet tomorrow can show you loyalty over someone you knew for many years, in this generation a lot of wanna be something their not and that's really sad.
I am really shocked about how your own friends can turn their back on you anyday. Because where im from it's all about loyalty no matter what, if you know you aint loyal don't pretend to be loyal because some people will really kill you for not being loyal where I'm from.
Loyalty and love is not the same and never will be. We can use a relationship as an example, a man can tell a female “ I Will Always Love You”. but months later their no longer together so to me the word love don't really mean nothing to me and thats why when someone tells me they love me i just respond back with an ok cause 95% out of 100% times they really don't mean it so if you aint loyal to me get out my face with that fake love of yours partner.
Reason: Breaking your writing up into paragraphs makes it easier to read and enjoy.
I know many people that I knew for about five years and I never taught they will really stab me in the back. Someone you meet tomorrow can show you loyalty over someone you knew for many years, in this generation a lot of wanna be something their not and that's really sad.
I am really shocked about how your own friends can turn their back on you anyday. Because where im from it's all about loyalty no matter what, if you know you aint loyal don't pretend to be loyal because some people will really kill you for not being loyal where I'm from.
Loyalty and love is not the same and never will be. We can use a relationship as an example, a man can tell a female “ I Will Always Love You”. but months later their no longer together so to me the word love don't really mean nothing to me and thats why when someone tells me they love me i just respond back with an ok cause 95% out of 100% times they really don't mean it so if you aint loyal to me get out my face with that fake love of yours partner.
Added March 03, 2020 at 9:06am
by Idrissa Sylla
(suggested by Paul Allison)
Title: Breaking your writing up into paragraphs makes it easier to read and enjoy.
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My favorite word is loyalty because showing loyalty makes you earn a lot of respect from everyone.
Many people pretend to be loyal to others but really ain't loyal at all.
I would pick loyalty over love any day.
People can love you today and won't love you tomorrow, but loyalty always stays the same no matter what.
I know many people that I knew for about five years and I never thought they would really stab me in the back.
Someone you meet tomorrow can show you loyalty over someone you knew for many years, in this generation there are a lot of people who want to be something they're not, and that's really sad.
I am really shocked by how your own friends can turn their back on you any day.
Where I'm from, it's all about loyalty no matter what.
If you know you ain't loyal, don't pretend to be loyal because some people will really kill you for not being loyal where I'm from.
Loyalty and love are not the same and never will be.
We can use a relationship as an example.
A man can tell a woman: “I will always love you,” but months later they're no longer together.
To me the word love doesn't really mean anything and that's why when someone tells me that they love me, I just respond back with an "O.K." 95 out of 100 times they really don't mean it.
If you ain't loyal to me, get out my face with that fake love of your partner.
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My favorite word is loyalty because showing loyalty makes you earn a lot of respect from everyone, many . Many people pretend to be loyal to others but really aint ain't loyal at all.
Reason: This is two sentences, not one. It's just more clear to a reader this way.
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I 'll rather would pick loyalty over love anyday, people any day. People can love you today and won't love you tomorrow, but loyalty always stays the same no matter what.
Reason: This is two sentences, not one (again). We should find a way for you to test this yourself. How can you figure out when you could break your sentences into two? Let's talk about this.
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I know many people that I knew for about five years and I never taught thought they will would really stab me in the back.
Reason: Word choice or spelling. We should look at the word "would" together. You often say "will" when you mean "would" -- at least in English.
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Someone you meet tomorrow can show you loyalty over someone you knew for many years, in this generation there are a lot of wanna people who want to be something their they're not, and that's really sad.
Reason: I think we just need to make this more written, standard English. "Wanna" isn't a word, even though people say it.
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I am really shocked about by how your own friends can turn their back on you anydayany day.
Reason: Minor corrections.
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Because where im from Where I'm from, it's all about loyalty no matter what, if . If you know you aint ain't loyal, don't pretend to be loyal because some people will really kill you for not being loyal where I'm from.
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We can use a relationship as an example, a . A man can tell a female “ I Will Always Love You”. woman: “I will always love you,” but months later their they're no longer together so to . To me the word love dondoesn't really mean nothing to me and thats anything and that's why when someone tells me that they love me i , I just respond back with an ok cause 95% "O.K." 95 out of 100% 100 times they really don't mean it so if you aint . If you ain't loyal to me, get out my face with that fake love of yours your partner.
Reason: Lot's of small corrections here.
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that mean the sincerity , But if you betray someone’s they will betray you
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