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Dear Representative Ocasio-Cortez,

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I am impressed by , your Instagram video where you call this generation of youth badass because you are truly right this .This new generation is very strong and oven minding.They accepted accept everyone either no matter their race, culture, religion or sexual orientation.One thing you said that stands out for me is: “The new generation is a badass” badass.” I think this is thoughtful because they never give up. I think this is thoughtful because they never give up. I think you used “Badass” “badass” to described describe how this generation is really not scare scared about accepting everyone and willing to talked about wold’s problem talk about the world’s problems, compared to adults.They are willing to protested protest for what they believed it’s believe is right.

I am impressed by your Instagram video where you call this generation of youth badass because you are truly right. This new generation is very strong. They accept everyone no matter their race, culture, religion or sexual orientation. One thing you said that stands out for me is: “The new generation is a badass.” I think this is thoughtful because they never give up. I think this is thoughtful because they never give up. I think you used “badass” to describe how this generation is really not scared about accepting everyone and willing to talk about the world’s problems, compared to adults. They are willing to protest for what they believe is right.

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Leticia Zang (Mar 03 2020 3:38PM) : You have right because she gave to the young generation what the deserve and I am really proud that you stood up with her idea.
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I am impressed by , your Instagram video where you call this generation of youth badass because you are truly right this . This new generation is very strong and oven minding.

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They accepted accept everyone either no matter their race, culture, religion or sexual orientation.

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Student Issaka Dabre (Mar 05 2020 3:25PM) : The young generation being Badass is a reality because they are ready to fight for all the causes that will be as drag to them
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One thing you said that stands out for me is: “The new generation is a badass” badass.” I think this is thoughtful because they never give up.

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Student Issaka Dabre (Mar 05 2020 3:35PM) : I think you are right on this part because "Badass" is the most appropriate word to describe what the young generation are getting done
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I think you used “Badass” “badass” to described describe how this generation is really not scare scared about accepting everyone and willing to talked about wold’s problem talk about the world’s problems, compared to adults.

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Student Issaka Dabre (Mar 05 2020 3:36PM) : Damn right
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They are willing to protested protest for what they believed it’s believe is right.

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Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at March for Our Lives, Washington, DC because I lived D.C. I live in the Bronx that every mouth m y community faced , and every month my community faces gun violence in schools.This one of the issues we faced face every day.Her brother died in gun violence and she representant represented all youth minorities.She wanted to honnor honor her brother and all the people who were affected with by this violence in her community.Every student should fell feel safe in school.This generation show video shows how this generation is willing to show the adults the what is right and make the world better.Basically they are an badass, but in a positive way for bein beinf strong and advocating for self-governmentjustice.

Recently I was looking at videos by young activists, and one of them is a good example of what I’m saying here. I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at March for Our Lives, Washington, D.C. I live in the Bronx, and every month my community faces gun violence in schools.This one of the issues we face every day. Her brother died in gun violence and she represented all youth minorities. She wanted to honor her brother and all the people who were affected by this violence in her community. Every student should feel safe in school. This video shows how this generation is willing to show the adults what is right and make the world better. Basically they are badass, but in a positive way for beinf strong and advocating for justice.

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(Mar 10 2020 11:24AM) : You are supposed to have a quote from Edna Gonzalez' speech.
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Student Issaka Dabre (Mar 05 2020 3:38PM) : Check your writing in this part [Edited]
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Student Issaka Dabre (Mar 05 2020 3:41PM) : The young generation are real victims of certain destruction
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I’m especially inspired by the video by Edna Gonzalez at March for Our Lives, Washington, DC because I lived D.C. I live in the Bronx that every mouth m y community faced , and every month my community faces gun violence in schools.This one of the issues we faced face every day.

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Student Issaka Dabre (Mar 05 2020 3:43PM) : Often leads to lose of relatives and so this is the same fuel that drive them to keep fight to stop
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Her brother died in gun violence and she representant represented all youth minorities.

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She wanted to honnor honor her brother and all the people who were affected with by this violence in her community.

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Student Issaka Dabre (Mar 05 2020 3:47PM) : Young generation, instead of focusing on accomplishing their goals in education, they rather fight to keep their school and home in one piece even though they can not use them.
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Every student should fell feel safe in school.

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This generation show video shows how this generation is willing to show the adults the what is right and make the world better.

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Student Issaka Dabre (Mar 05 2020 3:48PM) : Check your writing
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Basically they are an badass, but in a positive way for bein beinf strong and advocating for self-governmentjustice.

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I’ve also been learning about Movements leads by Young Activistshistorical movements led by young activists. The young protesters that I find most inspiring are the ones who protested during The Vietnam War. For trying to stoped them from taking children to war and by showing them they needed instead to go to school. I think this history is a good example of something you said in your video: “The new generation care about other people” I agree with you here, because in this historical movement this youth activities care about other they want them to be safe and return to school.

I’ve also been learning about historical movements led by young activists. The young protesters that I find most inspiring are the ones who protested during The Vietnam War. For trying to stoped them from taking children to war and by showing them they needed instead to go to school. I think this history is a good example of something you said in your video: “The new generation care about other people” I agree with you here, because in this historical movement this youth activities care about other they want them to be safe and return to school.

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(Mar 10 2020 11:22AM) : Sooo.... wait. If you are saying that you are inspired by the Vietnam War protesters, then what does that say about AOC saying that THIS CURRENT generation being more badass that older generations?
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I’ve also been learning about Movements leads by Young Activistshistorical movements led by young activists.

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(Mar 10 2020 11:20AM) : This needs some revising. I'm not sure who the "them" is in this sentence. Maybe look again at the writing under the Vietnam image to get a stronger idea about what their protest was about.
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Thanks for taking the time to read my letter. I look forward to seeing what you do or say next. Your video is very powerful we will liked to see more people like who believed in this generation and who push them to do more in the future. Having a young representant in the congress will really helped our voices heard and considered as not young immature but as a brave youth who advocated for a better future.

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