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Extended Essay Psychology example

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Jun-05-16	couldn't upload the whole doc
Jun-05-16	same reason as the other doc that I added

DMU Timestamp: May 24, 2016 02:30

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:14AM) : Influence of environment more

I disagree with that statement. Although it had evidence for it, I feel like that there is influence when it comes to being homosexual.

Jun 12

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:16AM) : words that I don't know more

prenatal, spatial

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:17AM) : defintions more

prenatal: before birth
spatial: relating to space

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Kenneth Ewing Kenneth Ewing (Jun 29 2022 7:14AM) : Writing skills [Edited] more

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Michael Hood Michael Hood (Nov 29 2023 4:21AM) : Good job! [Edited] more

Glad to find thist example essay. It’s inspiring. It took me a long time to get in the mood to write an essay on psychology. I even found essay writing service https://yhoo.it/45VeLcr where I asked for help. And already got my written essay.

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 5:00PM) : How the body paragraphs are written more

I’m still kind of confused of how I’m supposed to write the body paragraphs. They all seem like they’re summarizing the information that they found in the source.

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 5:03PM) : Now I see a few personal stuff more

There are a few analysis on the paper

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 5:03PM) : analysis is very settle, not big and over the top

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:20AM) : study on bullying more

That is true. I’ve been bullied before, and it made me feel like some of the emotions listed in the paragraph

Jun 12

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:23AM) : homophobia more

this is not necessarily true for me and most Christians. We are not homophobic; it’s just that we believe what they are doing isn’t right. It doesn’t mean we don’t love them; it’s because we know it’s a sin

Jun 12

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:26AM) : bullying more

This can also apply to other indentites as well

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:28AM) : sexual harassment more

Reread. I don’t understand how it connects to homosexuality

Jun 12

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:30AM) : GLSEN more

I’ve researched about this organization/network before! They also started most of the LGBTQ clubs at high school

Jun 12

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:32AM) : have homosexuals been raped? more

I know it’s probably true, but the idea sounds weird

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:35AM) : I don't have much to say on this page

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:36AM) : information about suicide more

I think that it’s very general until the next page

Jun 12

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:38AM) : I thought that the suicide rates for heterosexuals are higher

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 3:46PM) : This is for the title: Do you think that people become homosexual because of abuse? Instead of being homosexual and getting harassed? more

Not sure if I make any sense, but here are my thoughts

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 3:49PM) : pg 1: The abstract gives an overview of what the essay is about, and want the reader is going to see in the actual essay [Edited] more

I got confused of what the difference is between introduction and abstract. I think this clears it a little bit

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 3:52PM) : The abstract shouldn't be too long. Short summary of the essay

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 3:56PM) : I agree that homosexuals are harassed and stuff, but I still don't believe that it's right to be homosexual more

As a Christian, we are to love each other. I know that being homosexual is wrong, but it doesn’t give us the right to hurt them. Instead, we should try to help them see that this is a sin.

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 3:58PM) : Table of Contents: the author broke the body paragraph down into sections. The subjects on here are also mentioned in the abstract

Jun 12

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 12:54AM) : There's a big space between the bibliography and conclusion more

Why is that? Is it because that it isn’t a part of your essay (if you know what I mean)?

Jun 12

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 12:55AM) : Titles of the body paragraphs more

very interesting; makes you want to read it

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 4:08PM) : Introduction more

The first paragraph shows statistics and studies of discrimination. These facts lead into the question the author is trying to answer
The second paragraph shows the author’s thoughts on how to solve this problem. The author refers back to the statistics in the first paragraph to show her point. S(he) also describes the impact of harassment before hopping into her body paragraph

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:00AM) : The title of the essay is on also on the page of the introduction more

It isn’t acceptable for us to make the font on the title bigger. Is it ok to use on the EE?

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 4:11PM) : Introduction: how do we know how to cite a piece of information? [Edited] more

is it by the author and the date of when it was written? Or the website and date? I’m slightly confused

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 4:15PM) : The Psychology behind Homsexuality more

I don’t agree with the statement that being homosexual is biological. If that’s the case, is it possible to find out if your child is going to be straight or not?

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 4:21PM) : second paragraph: it makes no sense to me more

Sorry for being so critical of this essay. I’m expressing my thoughts in the essay. After all, we are supposed to challenge other peoples’ opinions in IB, right

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 4:18PM) : Structure of the essay more

It’s doubled spaced, everything centered in the middle. The title of each little section has a slightly bigger font and it’s underlined. There seems to be two spaces in-between the start of each new sentence

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 4:32PM) : Upload more

I uploaded the doc, and it got messed up. Sorry!

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 4:34PM) : 3rd page: how do we know that the information used in this essay is accurate? [Edited]

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:07AM) : The paragraph about twin brothers and influence more

Is there a way where you can find out what your “gender” is what you are born?

Jun 12

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:09AM) : animals and homosexuality more

I wonder if that is really true. If it is, I want to look deeper into the theory of his research

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 4:56PM) : The Harassment of Homosexuals more

How come the quote wasn’t cited in the 1st paragraph?

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 5:11PM) : Suicude, as a result from harassment more

Author uses the pychologists’ and gay peoples’ perspectives in the essay

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 5:13PM) : That huge, long quote more

Does that count as a part of the 4000 words in the essay? I don’t remember what the handbook said about it

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 5:14PM) : are you allowed to put that big of a quote in there?

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 12 2016 1:40AM) : are suicides the leading death of gay people?

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 5:18PM) : conculsion more

It summarizes all the body paragraphs, and takes out the important points in each paragraph to prove her point. Also, it shows how to fix it and how this research can help change the thoughts of others

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 5:19PM) : last paragraph of the conclusion (even more specific, "even in zealous states such as Oklahoma") more

why end with an example?

Jun 5

Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 5:22PM) : bibliography more

Author, day it was written, title, date retrieved, website

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Candice Kwok Candice Kwok (Jun 05 2016 5:23PM) : indent on the lines after the first. Centered

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